- Aug 11, 2017
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I would suggest proofreading for those pesky apostrophes that are missing.
Also, even though I have chosen the female start, the text mentions a wife and 6 kids. Wouldn't it be more appropriate for a husband? I doubt lesbian sex makes children in this world.
1.at the front reception 2. duelist 3. the Academy does not mess about with these kinds of shenanigans 4. doesn't care 5. anyone of them 6. beautiful woman (men are handsome, women are beautiful) 7. ask His Grace 8. orient (in this case, since you're not having the character move a body or position themselves eastward) 9. for the Gaolhouse 10. remove the extra period 11. another instance of gender due to start sir vs ma'am. Perhaps have a parsing code to distinguish between the two starts.
Also, even though I have chosen the female start, the text mentions a wife and 6 kids. Wouldn't it be more appropriate for a husband? I doubt lesbian sex makes children in this world.
1.at the front reception 2. duelist 3. the Academy does not mess about with these kinds of shenanigans 4. doesn't care 5. anyone of them 6. beautiful woman (men are handsome, women are beautiful) 7. ask His Grace 8. orient (in this case, since you're not having the character move a body or position themselves eastward) 9. for the Gaolhouse 10. remove the extra period 11. another instance of gender due to start sir vs ma'am. Perhaps have a parsing code to distinguish between the two starts.
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