VN Ren'Py Completed The Escort [Final v1.01 SE] [DrFronkonstinMD]

[drfronkonstinmd]

Hi dev. I enjoyed your little story. First time I've seen this plot situation, I think it's clever/funny. Jen is very cute, sort of a unique look to her face that makes her believable both as an escort and as a sister. As for my constructive criticisms:

1. Calling it version .4 does suggest it's got a lot more content. This was probably, mmm, six minutes?
2. The timer on the decision came out of nowhere. I don't see what it adds to the game. I can always just push the back button and choose the other option.
3. Jen's face in the restaurant looks orange. It's not a good look.

All in all a good start to a short story. Good luck!

Hi. Thanks a lot for the comments.

The timer was more like a funny “Think fast” moment, because she’s leaving and the MC needs to decide what to do. Like you say, it’s totally reversible.

About her look in the restaurant. You’re right. I’ll fix it for the next version.

 

[AgnorWolf]

Thanks for all the replies!

Wow! Let me address the two elephants in the room…

It’s a short game with a bit of a slow burn, that’s why it doesn’t have sexual content (yet). I’m a single developer with a rather modest graphics card and renders take a lot of time. The sexual content is definitely coming very soon, but I thought this version was an interesting intro to the whole story and I didn’t want to push it back any further. I honestly think you won’t be disappointed.

I tried to be as accurate as possible with the version. I know it’s a short story, but it can be expanded into more episodes if people like the concept. If you think about it as “Episode I”, there’s still 60% of story left to add till Episode II.

About the Escort part, yes. That’s what she does or what she’s been doing for a while, but the game doesn’t have nor will it ever have any kind of NTR or sharing content. Her side job is just an excuse for the game to start and for a couple of things to happen. She’s not a prostitute. I chose that tag because it was the closest concept. I have to say she does have previous sexual experience. I didn’t know that absolute purity was a requirement for some people, but I find it very hard to believe that someone with that body and that face has never had sex. When I play these games, what really matters to me is what happens from the moment it starts.

I knew those two points could be controversial, but I still think it’s an interesting story worth playing. Hopefully you’ll be the judge for that.

And again, if you don’t like it, I want to know it too! I can’t expect to please everyone, but all comments are important.

On a side note: The room. Yes. It’s totally out of scale, but that’s how it comes from the store. I realised when I had half the game ready and I placed her next to the toilet. It’s ridiculous, but having to do all the renders again was just too much. There’s even a mention to the weird scale in one of the endings.

Thanks again for everything. I promise the next version will be ready soon.

I don't think any reasonable person would expect her to be pure. I don't think the fact she has sexual experience is the deal breaker here at all. I think the problem is that if she is an escort even if you don't call her a prostitute and she's been doing it for some time you would have to be seriously naïve to think she never had sex for money. Escorting is just a fancy way to say high class prostitute. If she's not having sex then the term she is most likely a sugar baby two very very different types of work. It makes the whole story frankly not believable. If she was just starting out that's something and you where one of her first clients I could buy that story. Knowing someone is doing this makes you see them in a very different light and I think that will turn most of the Incest fans away from this game.

Maybe im just being cynical but just my two cents and some feedback nothing personal. Either way best of luck with the game and I hope its successful for you.

 

[drfronkonstinmd]

Ok, so another virgin loser mc ? (man the disappointment,I thought the mc was going to be the escort ) the demo is quite short but interesting. (knowing that the sister is a VIP prostitute,It made me lose some interest in her, but I guess it's going to be the only LI if it's a short game,it is what it is,although the model looks very good.)
Edit:By the way, it was rare that they did not know who they were going to meet, usually one has access to photos of the girls when selecting or contacting one,just sying.(well, at least in my country I don't think it's different in others )

One question, I'm not from the USA, I don't know if the dev is, but in my country,the kids (son/daughter) generally don't have access to savings accounts... is it normal for them to have access there?

Leaving that aside the bathroom scene, as someone said it needs a readjustment in the proportions

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Anyways good luck Dev.

Thanks a lot for the comments!

It’s not written anywhere, but I like to think some time ago, MC found the user and password for his savings account in a text document when trying to fix his father’s computer. Now he’s simply making bad decisions with that info.

About knowing who they were meeting… you’ll have to wait for the next update.

 

[Joystick68]

Let's see... Many times I read here, in this forum, that adult games with View attachment 1888093 , it's just like paying an escort just to get a kiss... Well buddies, this is the case. lol

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Playing no sexual context is good for children (-18).

 

[Chalker]

I played the game, overall there isn't too much to go off so far, but I noted some small things along the way.

1)The character is a bit too over-expressive in my most humble opinion, it felt like the reactions at times were almost uncanny and just felt wrong.
2)In the hotel scene we have two visual glitches that I noted, one is some strange pink light that seems to have no source (it makes Jen look utterly baked and leaves a weird artifact on her chest), and her tit is clipping inside her bath robe.

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3)I can't say much for the plot because we have only been given so much, but the whole "pure" escort thing seems quite silly. Only time will tell how this develops.

Good luck to the dev.

 

[drfronkonstinmd]

I don't think any reasonable person would expect her to be pure. I don't think the fact she has sexual experience is the deal breaker here at all. I think the problem is that if she is an escort even if you don't call her a prostitute and she's been doing it for some time you would have to be seriously naïve to think she never had sex for money. Escorting is just a fancy way to say high class prostitute. If she's not having sex then the term she is most likely a sugar baby two very very different types of work. It makes the whole story frankly not believable. If she was just starting out that's something and you where one of her first clients I could buy that story. Knowing someone is doing this makes you see them in a very different light and I think that will turn most of the Incest fans away from this game.

Maybe im just being cynical but just my two cents and some feedback nothing personal. Either way best of luck with the game and I hope its successful for you.

First of all, thanks for the comment.

I’m going to be totally honest with this. I’ve been writing potential games for a couple of years now. It’s become something natural for me to imagine these characters in different situations. And you read correctly. All my stories have these two characters (and supporting cast when needed) when I picture them. They’re like my fetish actors. I do have other characters ready for other projects, but whenever I start writing a B/S incest story, Jen (as I call her) is always there. You can think about it as a “What if…” scenario, instead of a continuous story. What I’m trying to say is that I’ve pictured the same character in so many different situations that having her be an Escort for this one was just another option. I just didn’t consider the fact that, for you, it’s the only scenario. My bad.

I also have a full and much longer script ready to start featuring the same model in a totally different situation where she’s not connected to the “night life” in any way, but with The Escort, I just wanted to know if I could take a simple and short idea and see it to an end. Why an Escort? Because I wanted a short incest story, but incest is rarely fast, so I decided to put both characters in a situation where sex was not mandatory, but definitely an option for the night. That way, their mindset was already in place and they just need a little push forward. Was it the best idea? Probably not, given the controversy. But I still love the story and the characters and I’m going to finish the project. After that, who knows.

Thanks again!

 

[ptahn]

Complaining that one does not want a relationship between the MC and a escort... in a game called THE ESCORT... that's not a matter of some content in the game, it's complaining about the core concept of the game. If you or others don't want to play a game about escorts, why would you even click on the link to open the page of a game with this name? This isn't an issue with the game, it's entirely on you.

I don't like furries, so I don't play or even bother checking games about furries. Even taking the time to argue and criticize a game for the core idea within it is baffling and pointless.

The developer asked for players' thoughts about the game. A poster said that he did not like the idea of the sister being an escort. Another poster complained about the first poster expressing that opinion. I defended the first poster's right to express that opinion. If a developer that created a game about furries asked you what you thought about the game and you said that you do not like games about furries, there would be nothing wrong with that; even if the game was called "Furries." That is exactly what happened here. I don't know why, but there are several posters here that have an issue with players expressing their opinion. This is a discussion thread, that's what people do here. If you have your own comment that you want to make about the game, then make it. If you believe that having the sister be an escort in an incest game is a good idea and you want to make that argument, then make it. Don't just argue that people that have a different opinion than you don't have the right to express that opinion.

 

[goulet1995]

Thanks for all the replies!

Wow! Let me address the two elephants in the room…

It’s a short game with a bit of a slow burn, that’s why it doesn’t have sexual content (yet). I’m a single developer with a rather modest graphics card and renders take a lot of time. The sexual content is definitely coming very soon, but I thought this version was an interesting intro to the whole story and I didn’t want to push it back any further. I honestly think you won’t be disappointed.

I tried to be as accurate as possible with the version. I know it’s a short story, but it can be expanded into more episodes if people like the concept. If you think about it as “Episode I”, there’s still 60% of story left to add till Episode II.

About the Escort part, yes. That’s what she does or what she’s been doing for a while, but the game doesn’t have nor will it ever have any kind of NTR or sharing content. Her side job is just an excuse for the game to start and for a couple of things to happen. She’s not a prostitute. I chose that tag because it was the closest concept. I have to say she does have previous sexual experience. I didn’t know that absolute purity was a requirement for some people, but I find it very hard to believe that someone with that body and that face has never had sex. When I play these games, what really matters to me is what happens from the moment it starts.

I knew those two points could be controversial, but I still think it’s an interesting story worth playing. Hopefully you’ll be the judge for that.

And again, if you don’t like it, I want to know it too! I can’t expect to please everyone, but all comments are important.

On a side note: The room. Yes. It’s totally out of scale, but that’s how it comes from the store. I realised when I had half the game ready and I placed her next to the toilet. It’s ridiculous, but having to do all the renders again was just too much. There’s even a mention to the weird scale in one of the endings.

Thanks again for everything. I promise the next version will be ready soon.

for me its not a problem if she has sexual experience or not buy if that experience came while she was on a job, this is a game that i will wait to see the direction it is headed before trying it

 

[E_nigma]

Why an Escort? Because I wanted a short incest story, but incest is rarely fast, so I decided to put both characters in a situation where sex was not mandatory, but definitely an option for the night. That way, their mindset was already in place and they just need a little push forward. Was it the best idea? Probably not, given the controversy. But I still love the story and the characters and I’m going to finish the project. After that, who knows.

I think this is more than reasonable enough explanation. While I also am one of the purity fans, obv a woman who looks like that ,is over a certain age, and has gone into that line of work has had some experience, but with good enough writing like another poster said she could not have ever slept with any clients but has most certainly been propositioned before and MC is an exception. you've been here long enough to know what comes with ntr/sharing and all that and are very clear about your intent there, so that is encouraging.

No doubt a good looking character and if this is sort of just a test run with the 2 characters and sort of an "elseworlds" experience for familiarization and feedback for whatever your "full" production will be, I think it's also super reasonable you sort of cut to the chase and avoid needlessly stretching out something you've more or less admitted is just testing the waters.

 

[ptahn]

First of all, thanks for the comment.

I’m going to be totally honest with this. I’ve been writing potential games for a couple of years now. It’s become something natural for me to imagine these characters in different situations. And you read correctly. All my stories have these two characters (and supporting cast when needed) when I picture them. They’re like my fetish actors. I do have other characters ready for other projects, but whenever I start writing a B/S incest story, Jen (as I call her) is always there. You can think about it as a “What if…” scenario, instead of a continuous story. What I’m trying to say is that I’ve pictured the same character in so many different situations that having her be an Escort for this one was just another option. I just didn’t consider the fact that, for you, it’s the only scenario. My bad.

I also have a full and much longer script ready to start featuring the same model in a totally different situation where she’s not connected to the “night life” in any way, but with The Escort, I just wanted to know if I could take a simple and short idea and see it to an end. Why an Escort? Because I wanted a short incest story, but incest is rarely fast, so I decided to put both characters in a situation where sex was not mandatory, but definitely an option for the night. That way, their mindset was already in place and they just need a little push forward. Was it the best idea? Probably not, given the controversy. But I still love the story and the characters and I’m going to finish the project. After that, who knows.

Thanks again!

I believe that the problem you have is that you see these characters as just that, characters in your story. To be successful, you want players to enjoy the story in an immersive way. Try creating a game where you cannot rename MC and check out your comments. If someone wanted to just watch two characters just having sex, there is always Pornhub. Try looking at your game from the perspective that you are MC. You might see things differently.

 

[Waifston]

I played the game, overall there isn't too much to go off so far, but I noted some small things along the way.

1)The character is a bit too over-expressive in my most humble opinion, it felt like the reactions at times were almost uncanny and just felt wrong.
2)In the hotel scene we have two visual glitches that I noted, one is some strange pink light that seems to have no source (it makes Jen look utterly baked and leaves a weird artifact on her chest), and her tit is clipping inside her bath robe.

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3)I can't say much for the plot because we have only been given so much, but the whole "pure" escort thing seems quite silly. Only time will tell how this develops.

Good luck to the dev.

How can you focus on a damn glitch when there is such a tasty boobies? HUH?

 

[Draverik]

Dunno what's worse, calling up an agency to order a hooker and they send you one that does not fuck her clients, or the fact that she's your sister

 

[Belnick]

how is it incest and no sexual content? incest is sexual content between blood relations.....im confused

 

[NakedSingularity]

how is it incest and no sexual content? incest is sexual content between blood relations.....im confused

And here I thought I was the only one that didn't read previous posts in threads. It's planned, but not in it yet as it's a new AVN.

 

[Chalker]

How can you focus on a damn glitch when there is such a tasty boobies? HUH?

My eyes have been blinded by the horny, oversaturated, they are used to the light now.
my blinded eyes see everything now.

 

[hkennereth]

Don't just argue that people that have a different opinion than you don't have the right to express that opinion.

You have every right to express your opinion. I'm also expressing my opinion: your opinion is silly, the opinion of the other guy you were supporting is innane and pointless, and you should both feel bad for subjecting everyone else to them instead of making valuable use of the oportunity to move on with your lives in silence.

Ain't freedom of speech great?

 

[Deleted member 446419]

Why 0.4 for first release I'm wodering

dev never claimed that he was good at maths.

 

[JonTommy]

Dunno what's worse, calling up an agency to order a hooker and they send you one that does not fuck her clients, or the fact that she's your sister

She's probably fucking clients, she just ain't fucking you lmao either scenario would be a bummer though. If it were me, I'd probably cut ties with my sister not try to bang her tbh.

 

[ptahn]

You have every right to express your opinion. I'm also expressing my opinion: your opinion is silly, the opinion of the other guy you were supporting is innane and pointless, and you should both feel bad for subjecting everyone else to them instead of making valuable use of the oportunity to move on with your lives in silence.

Ain't freedom of speech great?

So, you don't actually have any comment about the game itself. All you have got to say is that you don't like the opinion of some of other posters. An opinion that seems to be the majority opinion at least of those that have decided to post or to react to posts. Freedom of speech is great, it's a shame you react so badly when people exercise it.

 

[drfronkonstinmd]

dev never claimed that he was good at maths.

Well, it's not a finished product, so it's not v1.0 and it's roughly 40% of the final material. It felt weird using something like v0.1.