VN Ren'Py The Fiery Scion [Update 24b] [Vander]

[honkyfifteen]

The queen, and our adoptive fathers wife (I'm pretty sure that's who you're talking about), have both been confirmed by Vander be joining our harem eventually

Awesome. thanks for the good news.

 

[S1nsational]

Thinking on it, part of the issue with adding the Queen herself and her daughter to our harem is the requirement to marry into their family not them into ours; would this be removed or significantly reduced in relevance if/when we marry Arwen? Like we won't simply be another noble, but equal Royalty.

 

[HiHaHo]

Thinking on it, part of the issue with adding the Queen herself and her daughter to our harem is the requirement to marry into their family not them into ours; would this be removed or significantly reduced in relevance if/when we marry Arwen? Like we won't simply be another noble, but equal Royalty.

i think it is suggested the queen wants a matriarchal marriage to preserve the bloodline/family name
sarah now being her only(acknowledged) heir is the only way for her bloodline to stay on the throne

if sarah was to marry the mc in a patriarchal marriage the future heir would not be assured from the queens bloodline
(just like whit athagan and avila, the MC already stated that his heir might not be avila and the mc's child)

Basicly the issue isn't really the MC's title or blood itself (because he is heir to windale a important county(? maybe province not sure)(lord protecter isn't a hereditary title as far as i know but whit the MC suggested possible power when matured it could be earned as well)
for his blood itself is something that she already desired as he is powerful mage being a half blood of ether a dragon or a ifrit
these are the current mentioned possibilities( it could also be something else entirely as a demi-god whit a elemental focus divinity or a devil (devils and demons are mentioned to be separate entity's whit demons comming from a other plane) )

 

[SlapE]

Yeah, this. Him encroaching on the topic, then girls enthusiastically agreeing. It's creepy. Like, to me, it's less creepy if girls are straight up brainwashed compared to how MC acts and then how story proceeds.

It might be creepy to you, but within the context of the plot and the universe these characters live in, it isn't creepy at all. Not only is it essential to have kids because of the population decline and the curse they have to deal with, but it's also part of their religion, they literally have women who get pregnant over and over as part of their religion, they kind of have to because again, the curse and what not.

You're really really just trying to make something out to be creepy that isn't creepy at all within the confines of a fantasy story and the world it's set in, if it bothers you so much just like, idk, don't play.

 

[Tiur]

Yeah, this. Him encroaching on the topic, then girls enthusiastically agreeing. It's creepy. Like, to me, it's less creepy if girls are straight up brainwashed compared to how MC acts and then how story proceeds.

I agree with everything SlapE just said. That you find it creepy does not make it creepy within the context of the game's setting. The whole point of the setting's narrative setup is that the birthrate in Aetas is declining pretty drastically because there are so few men (due to the curse). The fewer children born, the fewer boys born, and the harder it will get to even maintain birthrate next generation, much less improve on it.

This is a pre-industrial/fantasy setting, not the modern day, so having children is a priority for most people. Which is a great setup for a heavily pregnancy-focused VN. If you don't want a heavily romance- and pregnancy-focused VN (or if you wanted a VN with non-consensual pregnancies or women corrupted into brainwashing), this will definitely not be the game for you. The MC is a good man who wants lots of babies with women who are similarly enthusiastic about it.

 

[whichone]

Vanderer Just started playing & found

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[Vanderer]

Vanderer Just started playing & found

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Thank you very much, corrected for the next update.

 

[Vanderer]

Pleasure mate, added a couple more to my previous post, but just found another:
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The collective term for voles is a colony.
Pack is for wolves\dogs.
I presume you meant wolves, as voles are tiny little rodents, like a gerbil.

Spoiler: vole

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Corrected those too, thanks.

And as for the voles, no, I meant the rodents. I mean, tiny rats. Well, not so tiny in that world... It seemed to me to give the right image of little children gobbling a feast up.

As for using pack...Aoife is no scholar, she learned to read at 20 and does not always use the right words. And, descended like a colony of voles... doesn't sound right.

But again, thank you for the typos, I always appreciate it.

 

[whichone]

Corrected those too, thanks.

And as for the voles, no, I meant the rodents. I mean, tiny rats. Well, not so tiny in that world... It seemed to me to give the right image of little children gobbling a feast up.

As for using pack...Aoife is no scholar, she learned to read at 20 and does not always use the right words. And, descended like a colony of voles... doesn't sound right.

But again, thank you for the typos, I always appreciate it.

lol Fair enough.
I wouldn't associate voles with being ravenous.
Wolves definitely conjurs the image of a group devouring something, possibly due to Duran Duran's "Hungry Like the Wolf".
Hungry Like the Vole just doesn't have the same ring to it.

 

[Tiur]

Corrected those too, thanks.

And as for the voles, no, I meant the rodents. I mean, tiny rats. Well, not so tiny in that world... It seemed to me to give the right image of little children gobbling a feast up.

As for using pack...Aoife is no scholar, she learned to read at 20 and does not always use the right words. And, descended like a colony of voles... doesn't sound right.

But again, thank you for the typos, I always appreciate it.

In that context, "like a swarm of rats" (or locusts) might better convey the connotation you're looking for, of a collective ravenous group who can eat almost anything despite each individual being small and weak.

 

[Ghost'']

The Fiery Scion [Update 10b] Unofficial Android Port

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[HiHaHo]

Man, I really enjoy this story, but the absolutely countless spelling errors, poor sentence structure & incorrect word usage is quite jarring & detracting.

I get it, if English is not the dev's first language, but there are just so many instances & having to figure out what the sentence was intending to say, from what it actually says, is making this into a word puzzle game.

e.g. When the Queen gets freed from the demon's control, they remark that the demon made her "more sensible to suggestions".
The word is susceptible.
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Excuse me, not excuses. There are numerous other erroneous "s" added to words, like this, where they do not belong.
There are just too many instances of this type & it really pulls me out of the, otherwise excellent, story.

Models are good, story being told is captivating, but this could really, really benefit from an English proofreader.

well you just volunteered to be Vanderer his proof reader

 

[Vanderer]

Thanks for the report. Yeah, I should get a proofreader but...well no one proposed to be one, except one at the beginning that I stupidly rejected.

It should get better as the VN get along though, since I imporve my english with every update. And yes, the s at the end of the words are a big weakness for me, English is kinda the opposite of French, my mother tongue, where the s indicate the plural, rather than the 3rd person singular. And not always.

 

[whichone]

Thanks for the report. Yeah, I should get a proofreader but...well no one proposed to be one, except one at the beginning that I stupidly rejected.

It should get better as the VN get along though, since I imporve my english with every update. And yes, the s at the end of the words are a big weakness for me, English is kinda the opposite of French, my mother tongue, where the s indicate the plural, rather than the 3rd person singular. And not always.

Mate, honestly, for a 2nd language your English is excellent!
Certainly better than some 1st language (I'm English) people I know!

 

[Vanderer]

Mate, honestly, for a 2nd language your English is excellent!
Certainly better than some 1st language (I'm English) people I know!

Third language, in fact, I am Belgian, so I speak Dutch too. Albeit, my English probably surpassed my Dutch at this point, I use it far more often.

But thanks.

 

[whichone]

Third language, in fact, I am Belgian, so I speak Dutch too. Albeit, my English probably surpassed my Dutch at this point, I use it far more often.

But thanks.

Wow! I think anyone who can speak more than 2 languages is pretty impressive.
I'll continue to note the ones I find, but will send them to you by DM, so as not to clutter the thread.

Regardless of some errors with language, your story & characters are engaging & interesting. Your story telling skills are, in my opinion, excellent.
I'm really enjoying your game, thank you!

 

[wsnlndr]

....
I'm really enjoying your game, thank you!

+1

 

[Sasquatchnunu]

Does a gallery exist?

 

[mrttao]

Yeah, this. Him encroaching on the topic, then girls enthusiastically agreeing. It's creepy. Like, to me, it's less creepy if girls are straight up brainwashed compared to how MC acts and then how story proceeds.

The MC is rich and powerful. Both personally powerful (pyromancer) and of high social status (official mage, and adopted son of a famous lord)

IRL even with feminism women will still literally steal the used condoms of the rich and famous so they can have their babies.
On a less extreme level you have

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Just because women are not enthusiastic about having your kids, does not mean women are not enthusiastic about having babies at all.
I assure you, if you were a famous handsome billionaire nobleman you would have women lining up for you too IRL.

Besides which, not all the girls in the game want the MC's babies. Multiple girls are explicitly opposed to the idea.
MC just goes "k-thanks-bye" and goes to girls who actually want him.

 

[Sewyoba]

The MC is rich and powerful. Both personally powerful (pyromancer) and of high social status (official mage, and adopted son of a famous lord)

Just because women are not enthusiastic about having your kids, does not mean women are not enthusiastic about having babies at all.
I assure you, if you were a famous handsome billionaire nobleman you would have women lining up for you too IRL.

So, you are assuming that girls are into MC for the money?