Well said. This was my issue as well with the game, every other character's flaws get pointed out except Kendo's
I didn't read too much into your discussion but I am guessing you are trying to point out that Kendo doesn't get any character development etc(which starts with acknowledging one's flaws right). This is a very valid point. Narratively it was completely omitted, Kendo starts the game impotent and then upon seeing Mary magically turns into sex beast and his character progression and development, shortcomings etc arent portrayed at all. We also dont know anything about him other than his personality traits as we see them, his job, his old wife etc, almost everything covered in the fog. I think this is a mistake personally, I believe that these things should be slowly getting uncovered as main story progresses rather than dropping them all at once at the end. This kind of IV drop would make story more interesting and engaging.
For example knowing what his job is, assuming it's something up there and seeing other characters not know and act oblivious would also slowly build up expectations for when they finally find out. How often do you continue reading novels just to see the bomb drop? But we don't know the bomb, it doesn't exist for us.
The most primitive example is shounen novels where protagonist goes into training, then comes out and kicks ass. People read through the process to see the protagonist blast everybody. Or thillers and crime fiction/mystery novels where bits and pieces slowly are fed to you and keep you hooked and interested...honestly I am sorry to say this, as your most loyal fan No try but you've made some mistakes in terms of story telling but it's too late now. Also it's not like people expect you to be the master novelist, it's a porn game after all. Although naturally, porn is no lower than other genres. The expectations are just lower.
I still think that the game is up there and unlike other porn games on the site, it's nice read, just not perfect in my eye. You know how it goes, when you do complete shit people won't really say anything because the expectations don't exist or are very low but if you do put in the effort then people will judge it more seriously and raise the bar according to the increased effort. This is one such case, the pursuit for greater standard is paying off in harsher criticism.
In all those other games on this site that have somewhat coherent storytelling the concepts that we speak off here, like character progression for example, don't exist haha. We are in different realm here.