VN Ren'Py The List [v0.12] [Uncle Loco]

[Antera]

This site really needs to re-evaluate its review process. No way in hell this is a 3 star VN and anybody who thinks a 1 star review is appropriate should be banned from the site - doesn't matter how wordy the review is, ridiculous is still ridiculous. There are way too many idiots posting reviews. Maybe people who want to post reviews should have to attend "review school". Hopefully that would, at least, weed out some of the trolls. Jus' Sayin'

Honestly I am gonna check out game because of your comment. Because of rating I was on fence

 

[Uncle Loco]

Honestly I am gonna check out game because of your comment. Because of rating I was on fence

I have found that most of the big issues people mention in the reviews are based on chapter 1. I know chapter 1 I made mistakes, and i got bad advice about animations the too. If you can get through that you should be good. All the wrap-ups and recaps can be skipped after chapter 1 and there is no fourth wall breaking after chapter 1 either.

I find it interesting that so many people that play my story tell me they skip the lewd content, because they want to see more of the actual story. However, you see some reviews that say there is no story at all.

Hopefully you enjoy the game.

 

[HornyyPussy]

You are always so humble and polite, Uncle Loco.

Yeah, he's a really good actor.........Shakespearean level!

 

[ThorinKing]

there is no fourth wall breaking after chapter 1 either.

Although, a well-timed fourth wall break can be entertaining.

I can't remember which ones now, but I recall instances where characters were talking about "creepy dudes playing AVNs", or an MC in an incest VN thinking "am I really depraved enough to do my mom/sister", or characters "feeling like someone was watching" them, and then all the characters in the scene turn their heads to look at the screen for a slide, then go back to the story. Of course, it's potentially extra dialogue to program and an extra render or two to do, but I did find them funny when they occurred.

 

[Uncle Loco]

Chapter 10 teaser and status update.

Spoiler: Chapter 10 teaser image

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[ThorinKing]

And so it begins...


Gotta say - the opening flash gets your attention!

 

[Uncle Loco]

And so it begins...
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Gotta say - the opening flash gets your attention!

I hope you enjoy it, just try to look past my mistakes in chapter 1.

 

[ThorinKing]

I hope you enjoy it, just try to look past my mistakes in chapter 1.

Just got home after the first night out. Very interesting beginning - thought for a minute the game might have been a rip, but, we are just getting started.

Spoiler: This was amusing - and listen to your muse.

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Spoiler: It is only proper...

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Spoiler: Do you have a second writer on your staff?

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Spoiler: In case you want to fix a really old typo...

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[Uncle Loco]

Just got home after the first night out. Very interesting beginning - thought for a minute the game might have been a rip, but, we are just getting started.

Spoiler: This was amusing - and listen to your muse.

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Spoiler: It is only proper...

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Spoiler: Do you have a second writer on your staff?

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Spoiler: In case you want to fix a really old typo...

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Chapter 1 is pretty rough since I was not sure what I was doing, had some issues and got some bad advice too with things like animations. Things improve a bit in chapter 2, and in my opinion, keep getting better. I have a long way to go to be good.

I have so much fun writing dialog for Kelly both in the story itself and in the wrap-ups/re-caps. Hell, I might have a little more fun writing her dialog in the wrap-ups/re-caps though.

That poker scene was fun to write especially the dialog with Diamonds/Ellie. That one you shared is my favorite line there.

The first chapter was closer to the book this was supposed to be. I kept some of the descriptive text, but in later chapters, I used it less and less.

I do have a proofreader and we both miss some stuff. Thanks for pointing it out I will address it.

 

[ThorinKing]

I do have a proofreader and we both miss some stuff. Thanks for pointing it out I will address it.

I'm through Chapter 3 now and am enjoying things and, yeah, animations are better and things seem tighter. For whomever bitched about the recaps, they're nuts - I've found some fun nuggets in there and look forward to the introduction of Kelly into the regular cast.

As for typos/grammar/punctuation/phrasing kind of stuff, most of the places I've worked, I was always the proofreader they sent in after everyone else said "it's good!" I'm never trying to be an asshole about it, but, well, it usually came off that way to whomever wrote what I was reviewing.

And it always annoyed me no end when people found stuff in documents I authored that I'd missed - mostly annoyed at myself. We are our own worst proofreaders and checkers - just the way it is.

 

[ThorinKing]

Before heading into Chapter 4, some accumulated observations, etc.

Spoiler: Ahhhh, redheads. Can you really have too many redheads?

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Spoiler: Bad Loco!

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Spoiler: Yeah - there are some odd ones around here.

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Spoiler: Speaking of Ellie/Diamonds - a perfect set up for a...

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Spoiler: Ouch...

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Spoiler: Are you a wizard, Unc?

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Spoiler: She's part Hobbit!

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Spoiler: When things got heavy...

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Spoiler: Range Day.

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Despite the little bit of grief in that last part, I'm having fun with this so far. Onto Chapter 4!

 

[ThorinKing]

Chapter four went kind of fast.

So, was there a cop cameo?


My first though was Alexia from My Dorm, then, with earlier references to My New Memories, wondered "maybe Sarah". But I've never seen Sarah with a pony tail, and Alexia usually has one. Or is this just a random NPC?

 

[divingmedic]

Chapter four went kind of fast.

So, was there cop cameo?
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My first though was Alexia from My Dorm, then, with earlier references to My New Memories, wondered "maybe Sarah". But I've never seen Sarah with a pony tail, and Alexia usually has one. Or is this just a random NPC?

LOL I thought that too. Alexia on her way to peep on Nora and MD MC bumping uglies on the side of the road

 

[Uncle Loco]

Chapter four went kind of fast.

So, was there cop cameo?
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My first though was Alexia from My Dorm, then, with earlier references to My New Memories, wondered "maybe Sarah". But I've never seen Sarah with a pony tail, and Alexia usually has one. Or is this just a random NPC?

It is one of the cops from chapter 1. Just wanted something on the road.

 

[divingmedic]

It is one of the cops from chapter 1. Just wanted something on the road.

I would guess with Daz assets there is a good chance that coincidences will happens.

 

[Uncle Loco]

I would guess with Daz assets there is a good chance that coincidences will happens.

Oh yeah it happens a lot. I have found similar looking characters in multiple games now. It's always fun to find them too.

 

[HornyyPussy]

I'm never trying to be an asshole about it

 

[ThorinKing]

Ahhh....Chapter 5....

Spoiler: Was very pleased to get confirmation of this report...

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Spoiler: I thought this was "The List"...

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Spoiler: Will there be a cameo...

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Spoiler: Should Alexis be wearing black for this?

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Spoiler: Interesting artists...

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Spoiler: Georgia, eh?

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[ThorinKing]

To the East Side? To a deluxe apartment in the sky? Will we meet George and 'Ousie? Maybe they'll get Archie and Edith to leave Queens and visit!

 

[Uncle Loco]

I love it when people fine the small details I toss in for fun. There are some many song, tv show and movie references I sneak in. A lot are missed or not mentioned, but I have fun putting them in.