I have no idea what these criticisms are about. This story was never gonna win a Pulitzer. It's mindless, fantasy porn about what you want to do with mind control powers and bimbos. The caretaker needs to be made into your submissive, your muscle bound not-sister has always wanted to serve you. There are at least two entitled bitches who need to be turned into slaves, and one legitimately hot boss who is very lonely, and insecure as hell. It's just meant for fun. I, for one, am happy the story doesn't play around with trying to be taken seriously, and gets to the point.
Oh, and I enjoyed the update, heh...