VN Ren'Py The Ruined Bloom [v0.2] [CungDuts]

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"This story follows the journey of Yuu Kanata, an ordinary high school student, as he tries to protect his younger sister, Misaki Kanata, from a cruel world. Every choice you make will determine the fate of this family..."​

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I'll emphasize that netorare can't occur without a romance. so don't forget that. Your sister shouldn't be doing anything lewd(with other people) unless she is your girlfriend! You can stay a blue balled virgin that gets no action, but she does have to be your girlfriend for there to be NTR.

The writing seems to be AI-assisted, what with the inconsistent mix of apostrophe unicode.
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Your English grammar isn't very good, so I suppose you're asking an AI to fix your grammar in some parts? Or maybe you're writing some things, getting stuck, and asking AI to write another part(Like all the prose describing sex. Like everything after drinking the soda). Or some variation on that. Hard to say because clearly some lines are hand-typed with mistakes.
Just curious how you're doing it.
That aside, one mistake is "Haha, You dont have to Misaki." from Haruka. It should be "Haha, you don't have to, Misaki."
"No Thanks, Haruka." should be "No thanks, Haruka." Comb through for more capitalization errors like that, there are a few.
Then there's perspective difference. "After I opened the door, she quickly rushed into my room." Clearly first-person narration (not dialog). Then "You couldn't leave your sister terrified, so you finally let her sleep in your room." Second-person narration.

As far as the content itself goes, I get wanting to cram several lewd scenes in immediately so the first version isn't too empty, but I think it jumps ahead too fast with Misaki. I prefer building on their dynamic more first. If you don't want to, so be it, just giving my opinion. Also the girl at the comic shop should probably be pushed off to later. Concentrate focus more on what's going on in Misaki's life and then the comic store girl can be a dramatic wrench in the works. If the Misaki relationship isn't progressing because of player choices, Misaki later finding out about the comic book store girl that clearly likes Yuu could be an accelerant to make her vy for Yuu's attention, and if the Misaki relationship is more developed, like dating, then the jealousy and insecurity Misaki feels about the comic book store girl sharing Yuu's interests could drive her to lash out, be more reckless, be petty, or any such. Maybe you even told Misaki to steer clear of that guy Haruka was with and this jealousy drives her specifically to be more friendly with him just to make you feel what she does.
There's a lot of approaches you can take as the writer depending on what you really want this VN to be.
Maybe you don't like anything I like and just want an easy-going comedy of errors where every wrong step gets your sister plowed and every few right steps lets you plow her yourself. High action, no downtime, little build up. It's your first VN, so don't overthink it. Do what you want, it's not your last VN. It's all just... "food for thought" I guess?
 
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Febui said:
I'll emphasize that netorare can't occur without a romance. so don't forget that. Your sister shouldn't be doing anything lewd(with other people) unless she is your girlfriend! You can stay a blue balled virgin that gets no action, but she does have to be your girlfriend for there to be NTR.

The writing seems to be AI-assisted, what with the inconsistent mix of apostrophe unicode.
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Your English grammar isn't very good, so I suppose you're asking an AI to fix your grammar in some parts? Or maybe you're writing some things, getting stuck, and asking AI to write another part(Like all the prose describing sex. Like everything after drinking the soda). Or some variation on that. Hard to say because clearly some lines are hand-typed with mistakes.
Just curious how you're doing it.
That aside, one mistake is "Haha, You dont have to Misaki." from Haruka. It should be "Haha, you don't have to, Misaki."
"No Thanks, Haruka." should be "No thanks, Haruka." Comb through for more capitalization errors like that, there are a few.
Then there's perspective difference. "After I opened the door, she quickly rushed into my room." Clearly first-person narration (not dialog). Then "You couldn't leave your sister terrified, so you finally let her sleep in your room." Second-person narration.

As far as the content itself goes, I get wanting to cram several lewd scenes in immediately so the first version isn't too empty, but I think it jumps ahead too fast with Misaki. I prefer building on their dynamic more first. If you don't want to, so be it, just giving my opinion. Also the girl at the comic shop should probably be pushed off to later. Concentrate focus more on what's going on in Misaki's life and then the comic store girl can be a dramatic wrench in the works. If the Misaki relationship isn't progressing because of player choices, Misaki later finding out about the comic book store girl that clearly likes Yuu could be an accelerant to make her vy for Yuu's attention, and if the Misaki relationship is more developed, like dating, then the jealousy and insecurity Misaki feels about the comic book store girl sharing Yuu's interests could drive her to lash out, be more reckless, be petty, or any such. Maybe you even told Misaki to steer clear of that guy Haruka was with and this jealousy drives her specifically to be more friendly with him just to make you feel what she does.
There's a lot of approaches you can take as the writer depending on what you really want this VN to be.
Maybe you don't like anything I like and just want an easy-going comedy of errors where every wrong step gets your sister plowed and every few right steps lets you plow her yourself. High action, no downtime, little build up. It's your first VN, so don't overthink it. Do what you want, it's not your last VN. It's all just... "food for thought" I guess?
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I'm using this game as a way to practice my English,
and thank you for your suggestions! I will make sure to improve it in the next update.:)
 
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the incest route is cute. refreshing change of paice to see the sister making the first moves and not having our usuall creepy brother as MC.
but DAMN the ntr shit is going dark rly fast! would not mind if it end up beeing a story where you need to avoid it like landmines in order for a happy ending since if you dont avoid, bad endings happen.
but doing a full ntr route, if this was a taste of whats to come.. holy crap how dark a story does dev wants to make here xD
 
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