- Feb 8, 2023
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A few things:
The grammar is really terrible, but that could eabe fixed with a proofreader.
The walking animations are going to live in my nightmares for quite a while, but it doesn't ruin the game in any way IMO.
The MC's anger issues(at least in the start) should probably get toned down a bit, as he acts like a 7 year old throwing a tantrum, because he wasn't allowed any candy.
The biggest problem for me is the grammar, as i have a hard time making out any sentences, because they are so incomprehensible.
The grammar is really terrible, but that could eabe fixed with a proofreader.
The walking animations are going to live in my nightmares for quite a while, but it doesn't ruin the game in any way IMO.
The MC's anger issues(at least in the start) should probably get toned down a bit, as he acts like a 7 year old throwing a tantrum, because he wasn't allowed any candy.
The biggest problem for me is the grammar, as i have a hard time making out any sentences, because they are so incomprehensible.
- Jan 14, 2024
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Thank you for your feedback. I'm already working on those walking animations(Fixed one of them.). MC's mood instability is because of his despair.
Right now, I can't afford to hire a proofreader (I really appreciate if someone can help me for now for a free.), I assume main problem is the way I tried to describe things, like when MC was sitting by the pool, Am I right?
- Feb 8, 2023
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Yes, both when you're describing different things, but you also sometimes put the words in the wrong order. An example: "Alarm isn't ringing, probably i woke up earlier than usual" when it should've been "Alarm isn't ringing, i probably woke up earlier than usual"
For me the most important thing in a VN, is the story and the narration of the story. So i probably care a little more about the grammar than others.
I wish you the best of luck with your project.
- Mar 17, 2021
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The Way of the Champion [Ch. 1] Unofficial Android Port + IC Patch
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it has potential .....
the story isnt bad so far... i like the choice of soccer (football) too
moreover im a sucker for a good sister/mc Incest story and i hope the sister will the monogamous/single path choice that dev was talking about at earlier comments.
but the visuals and mostly the animations need some work , especially when the characters walking.
the story isnt bad so far... i like the choice of soccer (football) too
moreover im a sucker for a good sister/mc Incest story and i hope the sister will the monogamous/single path choice that dev was talking about at earlier comments.
but the visuals and mostly the animations need some work , especially when the characters walking.