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I'm not a fan of how your telling this story. Your description makes it as your one character but you start the game bouncing around characters and even so far as going into inner thoughts.
If you are trying to tell one characters story don't tell stories outside of their perspective unless it's being told to the character in question at a later time and avoid others internal thoughts. Once again if your goal is telling the story as MC.
I'll be honest if your aim is NTR is optional to hit a wider player base your start ruins it with the introduction of the grandpa, much falls back to my previous statement on the story and his inner thoughts. This would throw many people off who are not into NTR.
You really should have a much more solid idea what your game will be than what your responses imply.
It feels like your planning to make a game based upon feedback and I don't think I can think of a single game that was not ruined due to that.
I am not trying to dissuade you from making your game, you have only done your first release. This is the time if you want to take a different start before you get too far in and it feels too hard to change direction if you want to.
Ultimately this is your game, figure out how you want to tell the story (3rd person or first person) and what elements you want in it and stand firm with that.
If you want the grandfather to be an antagonist to Sam as shown just go ahead and make the game NTR as I don't see a character like him being a throw away.
If you really want NTR optional you need to rework the grandfather introduction and not make him this creepy guy to the players love interests. You can still have him be a perv to non LI's in the game just not the ones the player can go after as unavoidable story.
If you are trying to tell one characters story don't tell stories outside of their perspective unless it's being told to the character in question at a later time and avoid others internal thoughts. Once again if your goal is telling the story as MC.
I'll be honest if your aim is NTR is optional to hit a wider player base your start ruins it with the introduction of the grandpa, much falls back to my previous statement on the story and his inner thoughts. This would throw many people off who are not into NTR.
You really should have a much more solid idea what your game will be than what your responses imply.
It feels like your planning to make a game based upon feedback and I don't think I can think of a single game that was not ruined due to that.
I am not trying to dissuade you from making your game, you have only done your first release. This is the time if you want to take a different start before you get too far in and it feels too hard to change direction if you want to.
Ultimately this is your game, figure out how you want to tell the story (3rd person or first person) and what elements you want in it and stand firm with that.
If you want the grandfather to be an antagonist to Sam as shown just go ahead and make the game NTR as I don't see a character like him being a throw away.
If you really want NTR optional you need to rework the grandfather introduction and not make him this creepy guy to the players love interests. You can still have him be a perv to non LI's in the game just not the ones the player can go after as unavoidable story.
mom-daughter sex in future? we hope so
MommyAlwaysOnTop
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SpiritawayV9
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Nice story and character hope to see more tag in future Cheating/corruption/ntr....
Grandfather is good to see i like it but he look so very old that not make sense for me i thing he will heart attack before him can... Age is no more than 60 is work for me.
Grandfather is good to see i like it but he look so very old that not make sense for me i thing he will heart attack before him can... Age is no more than 60 is work for me.
SafeForSure
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Yeah totally agree I don't see how NTR is avoidable if the Pervy grandpa isn't smacked down right after he started groping everyone the moment he got introduced.
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Credit where it’s due: thanks to Eye Wish for the valuable feedback.
Based on the suggestions, the dialogues have been improved and refined to feel more natural and consistent.
Appreciate the support and constructive criticism—it really helped the game move in a better direction.
Based on the suggestions, the dialogues have been improved and refined to feel more natural and consistent.
Appreciate the support and constructive criticism—it really helped the game move in a better direction.
EyeWish1
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The old man is my favorite character. You should try his dipping sauce.
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EyeWish1
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This has been fixed.
The game now includes the dialogue fixes.
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TeamEquipe
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Good start but the rapid scene transitions are a bit unsettling. Can you perhaps expand the time to something a bit longer than a nano-second?
EyeWish1
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Yup. First thing I mentioned to the dev. I'll have my other dev friends jump in if he is unsure how to fix this.
The Story starts off exciting and thrilling. Personally, I think it would be great if grandpa paul were Amber's father instead of Lewis's. That would make the whole thing truly forbidden and taboo. Amber looks incredibly hot, and the idea of something forbidden between her and her old dad and her son, or even ending with the son and grandpa with Amber at the same time, and Cate with the camera at the end of the story, is fantastic.