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I'm not a fan of how your telling this story. Your description makes it as your one character but you start the game bouncing around characters and even so far as going into inner thoughts.
If you are trying to tell one characters story don't tell stories outside of their perspective unless it's being told to the character in question at a later time and avoid others internal thoughts. Once again if your goal is telling the story as MC.
I'll be honest if your aim is NTR is optional to hit a wider player base your start ruins it with the introduction of the grandpa, much falls back to my previous statement on the story and his inner thoughts. This would throw many people off who are not into NTR.
You really should have a much more solid idea what your game will be than what your responses imply.
It feels like your planning to make a game based upon feedback and I don't think I can think of a single game that was not ruined due to that.
I am not trying to dissuade you from making your game, you have only done your first release. This is the time if you want to take a different start before you get too far in and it feels too hard to change direction if you want to.
Ultimately this is your game, figure out how you want to tell the story (3rd person or first person) and what elements you want in it and stand firm with that.
If you want the grandfather to be an antagonist to Sam as shown just go ahead and make the game NTR as I don't see a character like him being a throw away.
If you really want NTR optional you need to rework the grandfather introduction and not make him this creepy guy to the players love interests. You can still have him be a perv to non LI's in the game just not the ones the player can go after as unavoidable story.
If you are trying to tell one characters story don't tell stories outside of their perspective unless it's being told to the character in question at a later time and avoid others internal thoughts. Once again if your goal is telling the story as MC.
I'll be honest if your aim is NTR is optional to hit a wider player base your start ruins it with the introduction of the grandpa, much falls back to my previous statement on the story and his inner thoughts. This would throw many people off who are not into NTR.
You really should have a much more solid idea what your game will be than what your responses imply.
It feels like your planning to make a game based upon feedback and I don't think I can think of a single game that was not ruined due to that.
I am not trying to dissuade you from making your game, you have only done your first release. This is the time if you want to take a different start before you get too far in and it feels too hard to change direction if you want to.
Ultimately this is your game, figure out how you want to tell the story (3rd person or first person) and what elements you want in it and stand firm with that.
If you want the grandfather to be an antagonist to Sam as shown just go ahead and make the game NTR as I don't see a character like him being a throw away.
If you really want NTR optional you need to rework the grandfather introduction and not make him this creepy guy to the players love interests. You can still have him be a perv to non LI's in the game just not the ones the player can go after as unavoidable story.
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Nice story and character hope to see more tag in future Cheating/corruption/ntr....
Grandfather is good to see i like it but he look so very old that not make sense for me i thing he will heart attack before him can... Age is no more than 60 is work for me.
Grandfather is good to see i like it but he look so very old that not make sense for me i thing he will heart attack before him can... Age is no more than 60 is work for me.
