I enjoyed the chapter, though it felt brief. I like Otis's role and would love to see Sarah descend further into depravity. However, introducing the parents feels like a tactic by Don to unnecessarily pad the story. What could have been a slow but satisfying conclusion now risks dragging on into a 4,000-chapter sprawl where Lester gets involved with the mom, the grandmother, my mom, and so on. I love the story, but this is my gripe.
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My bad, I'm a subscriber and it didn't show up on my feed for some reason.
Anyway, I've just clicked on some tab other than the "Home" page and I see the post you refer to.
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Thanks for the suggestion. I liked the idea, something simple, the man didn't want the woman either, let's be honest. I play video games when my wife doesn't want sex. If it were up to me, I'd take the time off in the bedroom and have lots of sex.
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Yeah. It made sense to use Otis in this regard as that will discard him as a character in the future. What I would've wanted more of was:
1) Sarah purposefully thinking of being a bad girl vs good girl as she gets it on with Otis. The jump from her fuming to getting it on with Otis was a bit jarring a transition.
2) More viceral description of Otis one final time. This will tie nicely with Sarah's original kink of doing someone beneath her, and the final humiliation of being caught. The contrast of miss prim and proper, the one that would have been CEO vs Otis the janitor. That would make for a more descriptive downward spiral -- how the mighty have fallen situation. As it was the theme all along with Mary and Sarah's meeting.
DS has played it right this time!
Unfolding is believable and coherent with Lester manipulations. Otis usage is correct here and Sarah behavior is possible too. Lester has been fortunate in his manipulation again, not Superman…Nothing ventured, nothing gained!
PS Lester is still undercover, so his manipulations can go easily well yet. There will be interesting when the big player hunting him will come into picture with all its resources.
Unfolding is believable and coherent with Lester manipulations. Otis usage is correct here and Sarah behavior is possible too. Lester has been fortunate in his manipulation again, not Superman…Nothing ventured, nothing gained!
PS Lester is still undercover, so his manipulations can go easily well yet. There will be interesting when the big player hunting him will come into picture with all its resources.
I actually really liked the add-on for 30, with the conversation. You notice Sarah never disputed that she belonged to him, or what he said about being better than Dan in every way, she just said she was married and it was complicated, personally, I like where that was heading and then chapter 31 happened and I am not a big fan of it. I guess, I don't get why Lester just let Sarah crash and burn. Her career is now over and there is no way to ever get a reference. I guess it makes her almost completely dependent on Lester, but i am not sure. Usually I can see where Don is heading and this time, I am lost.
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Sarah will still fight with Dan, it will be his fault. Now Lester can be the hero and will live with Sarah while Dan is away; Sara's parents liked him. - I hope that the development of Sara being caught having sex will be presented in chapter 32. There may be some more changes in 31, some extra information, so that 32 will be very dynamic, I don't see much need for sex if it is to develop the drama. Note: I haven't read the remade 30 yet.
Apparently Sarah has contacted Maury Povich.
Mann theese janitors gets the best sex from all the stories 
Its not a story anymore is just raw porn...
Its not a story anymore is just raw porn...
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I liked the updates to 30, they were nuanced but made it gel with the overall story. Now as for the alpha of 31. If it'd been a meal, I would have sent it back to the kitchen. It is likely the worst chapter I've read in this series---correction half chapter. Up to Sarah being back at the hospital the chapter was on a good trajectory (except for Dan), but then you spend the back half the chapter telling us that Sarah is willing to put up with Mary and not bitch slap the smug look off her face because she needed the job, and yet turn around and have sex in a public conference room, one in which others had been invited to.
Sarah isn't that fucking stupid, or at least the character development up this point has shown us she wasn't. Yes I get she's under a lot of stress, but she wasn't under the amount of stress necessary to make that dump a decision. She could have invited him to her office and locked the door, the janitor's basement, etc.
I also get the scene was necessary for Sarah to get fired, all according to Lester's plan. To spend 8k words on something that should have been a short scene with a throwaway character, it felt... Pointless.
I agree with you King, we had some major development to Dan's character in 30 and now we get wishy-washy Dan back. After the events of 30 he should have been outraged or broken, but no we get the "Oh that's Sarah being Sarah" Dan again.
I hate to say this, as I've had a lot of respect for DS's writing, but I'm starting to agree with others, that this story has no ending.
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Agreed. We all know Lester is a selfish prick and he's a bit twisted, but this seemed unusually cruel even for him. I think you hit the nail on the head though. If she'd simply lost her job because her position was eliminated or a minor infraction, she could have found another one. The only logic that makes sense is that now she'll never be able to work at a major hospital again, because that kind of unofficial reference will follow her around forever. Which obviously with the mounting bills will leave her few options and now I see Lester offering the couple a new devil's bargain.
The other aspect is it sort of paints DS into a corner. The Sarah that he's developed, if she ever finds out the truth of what Lester has done to her and her family...I think it would cause her to flip and castrate him at best and kill him at worst. But then maybe that's the grand plan, Dan starts uncovering things, Lester gets exposed by TLG, Sarah finds out, they join forces, plot against him and bring him down.
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A friendly reminder that you need to use a file sharing service. You'll want to take this down before the mods see it.
Maybe Sarah will just go to Lester for financial support and lets him live with her and the girls when home, but does not tell Dan she is unemployed, so he doesn't try to stop her relationship with Lester. Being unemployed has made her really think about what Lester says in the car and she knows she needs Lester if she is going to raise her daughters without concerns over money, like she has had to with her husband. Maybe???
I am not sure what DS is thinking and I dont think anyone does. Yes, chapter 31 is by far the worst chapter of the series after a somewhat good chapter 30 (I personally enjoyed it). The way I see it is that we dont know anything for sure. Lester hasi been speaking about a lot of variables and how he cant control them but try to predict them. The fact is we dont know those variables. We all assume Mary as the evil bitch whos gonna use what shes seen to kick Sarah to the curb because given their history its the most logical thing to do. However, the most logical thing to do is to call the police and cause a scene to totally humiliate Sarah isnt it?
We actually dont know if shes on Lester’s payroll or not because I think getting the head of HR involved in such a way is to huge of a risk for someone like Lester. Plus he is not above using other women to manipulate the couple as he has done it before with his “gf” at the time. If Mary is indeed working with him, then it would make a great plot twist and it will seal Sarahs entrapment. She cant work in the hospital anymore and Mary will make sure through her network that she doesnt land any job in any hospital in the area anytime soon.
at least thats how I see it. If anyone has any thoughts or corrections lets hear it
We actually dont know if shes on Lester’s payroll or not because I think getting the head of HR involved in such a way is to huge of a risk for someone like Lester. Plus he is not above using other women to manipulate the couple as he has done it before with his “gf” at the time. If Mary is indeed working with him, then it would make a great plot twist and it will seal Sarahs entrapment. She cant work in the hospital anymore and Mary will make sure through her network that she doesnt land any job in any hospital in the area anytime soon.
at least thats how I see it. If anyone has any thoughts or corrections lets hear it