Toxic Attraction DonSilver #Cuckold 8muses forum

[Big K2]

Through and through. Nice recovery from Don post the last chapter disaster. Lester finally got the opportunity to swap the pills.

Liked the fact Dan kicked himoitll take a while on the pil. Front

 

[Verisimilinude]

love to know who the model is though, if she is professional that is. Pic looks pro taken.

I'm 99% sure that isn't a real person Psiber. Might be based on someone that is real, but it's art not a photo. Though I agree with you, kinda reminds me of what I thought Sarah looked like when I first started reading TA.

 

[Verisimilinude]

Chapter 32 alpha made it seem like don was finally moving things along,but the ending just felt like he was going to continue with his 1 step forward,2 steps backward approach, which has been going on since chapter 23-24.

Earlier in the story, Jesse was a character that Dan loathed, someone that was out of bounds as far as Sarah was concerned. When Lester got Dan arrested and got Sarah to sleep with Jesse, it felt like shit was about to hit the fan, but it didn't.

Then came Otis , an unnecessary character in my opinion, but at least Lester used him to get Sarah fired from the hospital, which seemed like another pivotal moment. Chapter 32 played out that way, and it seemed like Don was finally moving things along. But the Lester showing dick pics to Sarah's mother, and the ending which implied that Sarah would sleep with Richard in order to save her job just rendered the entire Otis thing pointless.

At this point, I'm not sure how far things will drag along. I think don has 2 types of paying customers, there are those who want to see Sarah fuck the whole world, and then there's people like me, who want the story to focus on the original three characters. Right now Don's trying to keep both groups satisfied, which is why we keep seeing this 1 step forward, 2 steps backward approach.

Your last point is an interesting angle. I think I agree with you, just couldn't put it to words they way you have. It does seem like there are parallel story threads; one that feeds the the 3 MC crowd and one that feeds the someone different every chapter crowd. I can't blame DS for trying to please his whole market, though I do think it's a fallacy to try. You can please some of the people all of the time, all of the people some of the time, but rarely can you please everyone all of the time.

 

[Em Lear]

Why don't you guys take one for the team? Also thought this was the Toxic Attraction thread

It's not like we don't take one for the team. But there's nothing foul in asking for something. If there's like a demand and such rude behaviour, it's a different matter.

And yes this is a TA thread.

 

[adamblack144]

I appreciate that other stories are shared on here. I've found a lot I liked. Thanks for everyone who's contributed

 

[DarkStutzel]

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[Verisimilinude]

Curious question came up today. Someone made a comment that it was hard to follow the writing because there were "large gaps in the paragraphs", which I assumed was due to carving out the dialog from prose. Do you as a reader have a preference on this topic? Do you like long walls of text with dialog blended into it, or do you prefer the dialog separated (when appropriate), or somewhere in between?

 

[Minscnboo]

Curious question came up today. Someone made a comment that it was hard to follow the writing because there were "large gaps in the paragraphs", which I assumed was due to carving out the dialog from prose. Do you as a reader have a preference on this topic? Do you like long walls of text with dialog blended into it, or do you prefer the dialog separated (when appropriate), or somewhere in between?

From my perspective, being rather a grammar and English structure person, I like dialog separated from other writing. I see that done a lot in fanfiction.

 

[berylflame]

Curious question came up today. Someone made a comment that it was hard to follow the writing because there were "large gaps in the paragraphs", which I assumed was due to carving out the dialog from prose. Do you as a reader have a preference on this topic? Do you like long walls of text with dialog blended into it, or do you prefer the dialog separated (when appropriate), or somewhere in between?

Very interesting question. I like it separated for longer conversations. Gives the dialogue room to breathe. It becomes very monotonous reading though when the author forgets to set up scenes and reactions / or too much of it.

I can also appreciate dialogue within the prose for the more terse interaction. Ie some mundane convo but then some exposition going on in the background.

 

[Verisimilinude]

It becomes very monotonous reading though when the author forgets to set up scenes and reactions / or too much of it.

I agree, I was trying to read a story that had the potential to have a good plot but I just couldn't get thru the first quarter of dictation dialog. Scrolled down to see that was the format for the entire story and just skipped it. I personally like a blended approach, separated dialog and sometimes blended dialog/prose when it's appropriate.

I think DS does a pretty good job with his structure:

Dan sighed. "You're right. It's going to be hard enough just being away from you and the kids, but if this gets us back together faster then so be it."

A half smile spread onto Sarah's face. "It's going to be hard on all of us, but this is the best scenario in terms of our finances." The smile on her face grew wider and she locked eyes with Dan. "And it's not like this is forever. Once we've saved enough money and I can find a job in Chicago, the kids and I will be right there with you in a place of our own.

 

[polpolp]

long time not reeding this story, he get worse every chapter, Don silver just want to make it more longer to get more money, and all the hard cuck fan pay for it , its never gonna ending cause his other story doesnt have 10% of the succes of TA.
Probably gonna wait for the final chapter in 5 years, with Sarah get gangbang by 20 men and Dan swallow every bit of cum like the wimp cuck he became. Trully disapointed story ruin by a greedy Author

 

[Davidsays1]

I feel like all the pieces are in place for Dan to leave Sarah and have his happily ever after (introduced potential love interest, or potential new lester victim)
For Lester to get exactly what he wants, + more (mother, clients wives, former victim)
Lester to crumble/fall (tlg is looking for him)
Sarah to lose herself completely (getting her job back/falling for Lester)

His pace is just sooooo slow, but we're getting there

 

[srajat11rs]

Can anyone upload toxic attraction ch 32 final version please.

 

[swewx]

long time not reeding this story, he get worse every chapter, Don silver just want to make it more longer to get more money, and all the hard cuck fan pay for it , its never gonna ending cause his other story doesnt have 10% of the succes of TA.
Probably gonna wait for the final chapter in 5 years, with Sarah get gangbang by 20 men and Dan swallow every bit of cum like the wimp cuck he became. Trully disapointed story ruin by a greedy Author

That's what I am telling you all since about a year....
DS lost a good chance to make a real good story.
8 billion people in this world and 800 rule his mind. lol
The idea of supporting the artists have been altered to "I DO ANYTHING YOU WANT IF YOU PAY". There's a name from and old proffession for this kind of relationship.
In the meantime lets keep sharing great stories from really awesome authors.

 

[Minscnboo]

Swewx said: The idea of supporting the artists have been altered to "I DO ANYTHING YOU WANT IF YOU PAY". There's a name from and old proffession for this kind of relationship.

ROFLMAO. Honestly that is it! And its even funnier based on what this thread is all about!
I don't really blame him as far as a money thing goes. If they want to pay, then write away. Sure those of us who want story get frustrated. Can't really expect literary excellence in this particular genre.

 

[nonametba]

next months will not be able to contribute/share ! hope someone else can!
TA 32 final .

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[Davidsays1]

next months will not be able to contribute/share ! hope someone else can!
TA 32 final .

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And just like that I believe I'm done with Toxic attraction, listened to his fan base, and removed an entire scene from Dan in exchange for an entire extra scene with Lester and Sarah, more dialogue for them, and a couple extra lines for the mother?

 

[bbc4sluts2]

And just like that I believe I'm done with Toxic attraction, listened to his fan base, and removed an entire scene from Dan in exchange for an entire extra scene with Lester and Sarah, more dialogue for them, and a couple extra lines for the mother?

wait, whats wrong with that? I am just asking about your opinion not starting a fight.

Most of the complains about the recent chapter was that he is back to 1 step forward 2 step backward kinda writing. However, with how he modified the chapter he seemed to have corrected that. My main issue with the alpha is how Lester was there for Sarah when she was vulnerable and how their pillow talk seemed genuine, only for her to simply let Dan kick him out just like that the next day. Now it makes more sense for her to escort him out. Also, in the alpha we never got to see her considering Lester's offer. He offered, they fucked then Dan came and she spilled everything for him.

One thing I feel important in this chapter is the shift in Sarah's thinking. Initially, she was that strong corporate woman who wasnt above some teasing but knew who she was and took bullshit from no one. Now, shes not only considering prostituting herself to Richard for her job but actually planning it. She's not above using her body to achieve her goals anymore, or at least she has accepted that idea. We still need to see if Lester's new deal will change her thought process.

 

[Davidsays1]

wait, whats wrong with that? I am just asking about your opinion not starting a fight.

Most of the complains about the recent chapter was that he is back to 1 step forward 2 step backward kinda writing. However, with how he modified the chapter he seemed to have corrected that. My main issue with the alpha is how Lester was there for Sarah when she was vulnerable and how their pillow talk seemed genuine, only for her to simply let Dan kick him out just like that the next day. Now it makes more sense for her to escort him out. Also, in the alpha we never got to see her considering Lester's offer. He offered, they fucked then Dan came and she spilled everything for him.

One thing I feel important in this chapter is the shift in Sarah's thinking. Initially, she was that strong corporate woman who wasnt above some teasing but knew who she was and took bullshit from no one. Now, shes not only considering prostituting herself to Richard for her job but actually planning it. She's not above using her body to achieve her goals anymore, or at least she has accepted that idea. We still need to see if Lester's new deal will change her thought process.

Different opinions is all, I was completely for the dan scene where he kicked him out as it shows dan still has fight in him/wants to fight for his marriage, and shows Sarah still cared somewhat for her marriage/wasn't completely manipulated by Lester, so with these changes it negates that even further. The previous version set up lester debasing dan even further, or making him lose even more then he already has, due to being thrown out, now we don't have that setup unless Lester does it just to do it. This chapter kind of killed Dans character even more for me as he's made it known Lester isn't to be inside their home in Middleton so to just let Sarah handle it with no serious backlash doesn't sit right with me.

 

[adamblack144]

I loved the new version. The alpha version was just a rehash of the early chapter where Dan comes home and kicks Lester out. Instead, Sarah wanted to speak to him and then initiated a kiss with him. This is progress

I'm disappointed she's going to fuck Richard. More pointless sex scenes.