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Toxic Attraction Literotica

swewx

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Oct 6, 2021
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I respect all readers preferences and ideas.
But...
I'd rather have DS leaving these ideas to other stories. TA must finish or it will turn into the most boring erotic story of all times. When we take it from the first chapter and try to follow the plot through chapter after chapter, it becomes hard to understand where the story is going to.
The number of "clues" and "tips" DS gives throughout the story leads to nowhere.
He writes entire chapters, including sex scenes that most of the time do nothing for the story but increase the "words counting number".
If we pay attention to the last eight or ten chapters of TA, without the first ten, it's really a boring story.
It takes at least three chapters to jump forward a little bit, with new possibilities. And then, more two or three chapters where nothing is confirmed.
Now Toxic Attractions is far, far away from the initial idea. It's not the same story.

DS clearly just wants to keep making money until the last dumb paying customer says "I am out".
This way of supporting authors on patreon is abusive and when we think about it, it has no sense at all.

DS had a good idea and started ok. But as the money kept flowing he obviously thought he couldn't finish TA without another one with the same commercial appeal.
None of his other stories went ahead.

After DS ends this story (if he ever does) I would like someone, or as many as you want, if not myself, to edit Toxic Attraction taking out all the bullshit DS wrote that don't add to the original plot.
I'm not saying it should be rewritten, not even compressed, but really edited to make it more enjoyable to read, without so many duplicated situations or sex scenes without any plausible reason (i.e. Jesse fucking Sarah, even Byron, Otis...).
It will be a fun exercise to see what everyone think of which scenes are unecessary.
I'm certain gonna do it for my amusement.
 

Stestall

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Apr 1, 2024
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Yea 23 was the worst of all the chapter it is a dam shame too ds don't got know where else to go now I can tell it seems to me he just ran out ideas
 

Wife is Hot

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Nov 9, 2024
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In Don’s defense he is accommodating requests from members to add variety and not just Lester. Interjecting other players is fine but there should be a distinction between Lester, Dan and the others. Lust, passion and submission belongs to Lester. Dan is love, passion and safety. The others are merely props. Byron didn’t deserve her submission. Lester worked so much to achieve that. There is always something special with Lester.. Oh yeah his huge cock. So far this is what made Sarah submit and her slow decline to full submission is becoming more evident. Their connection is undeniable and I wouldn’t be surprised if she eventually falls for him not just physically but emotionally as well.
 
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Stestall

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Apr 1, 2024
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From chapter 7 thru 23 they done had sex and it's getting repetitive to me I guess he gonna throw in some anal but this story is not making any since to me anymore
 

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