The animation leaves something to be desired with one part of one body moving back and forth, yet the story and renders are fantastic which are what drove me to finish till the latest update.
There are a couple words and phrases that give away the single writer on this script.
Whilst rather than While (intelligent Goblins and Ogres saying it no less), then "I call bullshit" being mentioned by many different sects and races, rather mentioning other words and phrases respective to their backgrounds like "While".
Just some things I noticed and thought might be looked into changing, but they are just my opinion.