Well right from the bat, copyright music. Can't have Money by Pink Floyd jamming as soon as you start the game or even Dan Balan, when you are on patreon (or anywhere). Can't have copyright music on a product you're trying to make money on. It's just illegal lol (copyright infringement). Use royalty free music or buy licenses.
Otherwise, I guess it wasn't all that bad. A lot of grammar issues, but they are understandable at least. Seems like there would be a lot of content with how many renders this first release has, but it several different paths split among those renders. So it feels short if you don't try every path. Not a bad thing, as there is plenty of setup to give you a feel for how things will go.
Plenty of choices to choose the path you want to go on, so hopefully it stays that way in the future.
Kind of bummed that the MC is already a cheater from the start and a man-whore. Wife seemed really nice, so was sad to see that we have been cheating on her with tons of different women all this time. I mean, he is even looking up an escort service the whole time he is talking to his wife. Kind of a scumbag.
But yeah, overall, not too bad. Seems interesting at least. Probably not for me, but will see what happens in the next update at least. Best of luck with your project and thanks.