HTML Tumblr Girls [v0.2] [Green Nemo]

[theonlyondgreat]

I fixed most of the broken links (I think). I hope it's ok for the dev.

 

[Brazilian Engrish]

I dont even care about ntr stuff. If it will be Riley Reid, I m in.

edit: seems like the game is broken right now. well, you cant have everything

 

[xmilteach]

thx

 

[Yog-Sloth]

is the ntr avoidable.

 

[mystafa]

This game has something like that) Good luck with the development.

 

[xslutz]

is the ntr avoidable.

Not even remotely. It's pretty much the entire point of this one.

 

[CiccioBenzina1881]

Broken images, shitty english... just put a little more effort...

 

[Feyschek]

Broken images, shitty english... just put a little more effort...

I think that English is not the author's native language. Therefore, I don’t think that we should expect corrections in this regard if he doesn’t find a native speaker of the language to correct the mistakes.

The funniest moment is why invest effort if you can get money for almost nothing? In fact, other than time, such games do not take anything away from the author.

 

[Corruption_]

I feel like the pacing could use some work, it goes a bit 0-100 with her getting railed in front of you with no buildup

 

[Up1978]

A nice start, but a lot of image links seem to be broken

 

[Feyschek]

A nice start, but a lot of image links seem to be broken

I fixed most of the broken links (I think). I hope it's ok for the dev.

 

[Feyschek]

I feel like the pacing could use some work, it goes a bit 0-100 with her getting railed in front of you with no buildup

I will answer directly and without inspiring hope, I do not think that this thing will be fixed.

Why? Yes, because if it wasn't done at the beginning, then it was done specifically to stretch the time. As if the laws of the genre have no content, we give the player a ton of grind, why? To keep him busy

 

[gaaby]

Will give it a try!

 

[Freedom9555]

I fixed most of the broken links (I think). I hope it's ok for the dev.

You sure about that? It only made it worse, when I use it.

 

[Dented]

Sorry, imho, mindless grinding doesn't count as gameplay, not as it is currently implemented anyway. At least the dialogue is digestible and the UI is relatively clean.
Good luck!

 

[theonlyondgreat]

You sure about that? It only made it worse, when I use it.

Really? Well I didn't retest it and simply replaced the file links in twine while playing the game.

Can you tell me, where it was worse? Eventually it would be a easy fix

 

[CiccioBenzina1881]

I think that English is not the author's native language. Therefore, I don’t think that we should expect corrections in this regard if he doesn’t find a native speaker of the language to correct the mistakes.

The funniest moment is why invest effort if you can get money for almost nothing? In fact, other than time, such games do not take anything away from the author.

He could write the game in his native language and then translate it with a machine; he would get a better result.

 

[Feyschek]

He could write the game in his native language and then translate it with a machine; he would get a better result.

I think you've hit the nail on the head, he used a machine to translate from his native language without understanding the intricacies of English.

Russian is my native language, for example, when I write a text, I have to avoid difficult Russian words in English. Because English does not understand them and you have to look for alt versions of these words for this language in order to adequately construct sentences.

The question is, will a person bother so much with such subtleties? The answer is simply no. Believe me, it is very tiring to adapt 2 texts to 2 languages.

 

[kronmar]

Game is broken, no events and after 30 days I still lost game.

 

[theonlyondgreat]

Game is broken, no events and after 30 days I still lost game. View attachment 3432028

I think you need to buy something to trigger an event, and then later can move in with riley. Under Tasks, Events should be some descriptions