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Please 17moonkeys, Thake your rest! The fans don't care about the delays, they just care when a dev isn't sincere or give fake ass excuses. This isn't the case by any means. Good luck for future and
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It's great work but you've got a lot of admirers here that don't want you to over pressure yourself or burn out.
Thank you, I'm so glad to hear that.It's great work but you've got a lot of admirers here that don't want you to over pressure yourself or burn out.
I'll try to take care of myself!
Love you guys.
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Just remember that burnout has little to nothing to do with not enjoying working on something.
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is this the game that had junky UI or I am confusing things?
btw if it's not, can someone pls tell me the name of the game that I had in mind? I only remember that it was sci-fi comedy, had junky UI and had something to do with aliens (i think).
btw if it's not, can someone pls tell me the name of the game that I had in mind? I only remember that it was sci-fi comedy, had junky UI and had something to do with aliens (i think).
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What type of exquisite UI were you expecting from a Renpy game?
Middle school power point presentation circa 2000 style, with slides made in paint, written with times new roman and colored like a violently ill shrek.
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Except UFO isn't a sandbox (that requires a UI), it's a kinetic VN.
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Didn't really care for that one; the UI did look like a kindergarten classroom blew up in its face.
I have just stated the new game and have few suggestions if you don't mind. First, I think writing doesn't really feel "flowy" or natural. I think it needs some rewrites to make it feel more organic. For example the opening scene originally goes like this:
...
- Oh God! Mom, just listen to me for once, will you!
- Anna you are drunk. Look, I've been listening to you whining for the last two hours. If you want me to help, get to the point. Come on sweetie, tell me what your problem is and please keep it short.
- It's not just one.
- Just spill it. What's bothering you?
- Olivia went of to college, and is going to live in a dorm. I miss her so much. She and I were so close, now she is in another town. And I...
- Okay, what else.
- Jason's brother and his wife died in a car accident, and now their son lives with us. He took Olivia's bedroom. I've mentioned it before.
- Yes I remember. I even got him a cute teddy bear when I was at the airport. Do you think he'll like it?
- Haha, Mom, he's not a kid anymore. His dick is bigger than Jason's! (Omg! Did I say that out loud?)
- So this is the problem? That his dick is bigger than your husband's?
...
How I would have written it:
- How are holding up sweetie? Are you doing alright? This has been a hectic year, both for you and for Jason.
- That's an understatement of the century, mom. First, Olivia decides to go to college halfway across the country, then Jason's brother dies in a car crash and leaves his kid to Jason and me to foster and now I am beside myself, worrying sick about this child.
- Is something wrong with him?
- No... Well, how do I put it. Nothing wrong with him, he is just weird. Watch X-files all day long, meditate in pjs at the porch and search for aliens weird.
- Give him some slack, dear. He is still just a kid.
- Heh, looking at his penis you wouldn't think so! (Omg! Did I really say that!)
- Well now, and how would you know that, sweetie?
- Eh, he stays in Olivia's room and I absentmindedly barged in like I usually do. Saw his kielbasa in all it's glory. He made me even touch it, saying his balls hurt.
- You are drunk, honey.
- Hey, I just checked on him, it's not like did anything... But he sure is impressive.
- ... Say, is he... like... say 11 inches impressive?
- Mom! ... Yeah...
- Yeah...
...
Second, I think the game could lean more into parody. For example when MC meets Barbie I think is the perfect time for a joke.
- Hi, I'm Barbie, the chief mate.You must be the guy from the fridge? You must be the real, human dude from the fridge?
- Haha, yeah that's me.
- Cool, tell me if I'm doing it right.
(She turns around to hold the console and looking back at MC says)
- Help me step-bro, I am stuck.
Sure, the joke is old and played out but it has the charm of a low brow humor that is common in porn parodies. Kinda like a trademark cringe.
...
- Oh God! Mom, just listen to me for once, will you!
- Anna you are drunk. Look, I've been listening to you whining for the last two hours. If you want me to help, get to the point. Come on sweetie, tell me what your problem is and please keep it short.
- It's not just one.
- Just spill it. What's bothering you?
- Olivia went of to college, and is going to live in a dorm. I miss her so much. She and I were so close, now she is in another town. And I...
- Okay, what else.
- Jason's brother and his wife died in a car accident, and now their son lives with us. He took Olivia's bedroom. I've mentioned it before.
- Yes I remember. I even got him a cute teddy bear when I was at the airport. Do you think he'll like it?
- Haha, Mom, he's not a kid anymore. His dick is bigger than Jason's! (Omg! Did I say that out loud?)
- So this is the problem? That his dick is bigger than your husband's?
...
How I would have written it:
- How are holding up sweetie? Are you doing alright? This has been a hectic year, both for you and for Jason.
- That's an understatement of the century, mom. First, Olivia decides to go to college halfway across the country, then Jason's brother dies in a car crash and leaves his kid to Jason and me to foster and now I am beside myself, worrying sick about this child.
- Is something wrong with him?
- No... Well, how do I put it. Nothing wrong with him, he is just weird. Watch X-files all day long, meditate in pjs at the porch and search for aliens weird.
- Give him some slack, dear. He is still just a kid.
- Heh, looking at his penis you wouldn't think so! (Omg! Did I really say that!)
- Well now, and how would you know that, sweetie?
- Eh, he stays in Olivia's room and I absentmindedly barged in like I usually do. Saw his kielbasa in all it's glory. He made me even touch it, saying his balls hurt.
- You are drunk, honey.
- Hey, I just checked on him, it's not like did anything... But he sure is impressive.
- ... Say, is he... like... say 11 inches impressive?
- Mom! ... Yeah...
- Yeah...
...
Second, I think the game could lean more into parody. For example when MC meets Barbie I think is the perfect time for a joke.
- Hi, I'm Barbie, the chief mate.
- Haha, yeah that's me.
- Cool, tell me if I'm doing it right.
(She turns around to hold the console and looking back at MC says)
- Help me step-bro, I am stuck.
Sure, the joke is old and played out but it has the charm of a low brow humor that is common in porn parodies. Kinda like a trademark cringe.
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Thank you for an amazing game! The pictures and storyline grab you from the very beginning and don't let you go until the very end. I really hope to see a sequel.
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I think the dialog improves a lot once the MC wakes up on the ship. I was a little disconnected from the story also, due to the rapid-fire dialog on the Earth scenes at the very beginning, but once the MC is on the ship, and on the doll planet, the dialog flows much more naturally.