VN Ren'Py Unexpected Opportunity [Ch. 6] [Sweetychily]

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I anticipated this kind of confusion when adding a scene like this. But there were people who did not prefer to play the game even because of this... This scene is not about Lisa's youth. I just wanted to add a scene where the character would enjoy the similarity.
And don't worry. I believe the coming updates gonna be better and better . I'll do my best.

*PLAYS RECENT UPDATE*

 

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[Midnight Ghost]

What's the point of giving options if there's only going to be one option present..... lol.
Would have better to also offer the option to skip her by texting her to fuck off and go straight to bed instead.

Also the blow job scene was mixed up, first of all it's lay not lie her on the couch.
Next she's on her knees blowing you off but saying she can't cause on her period...
Then she's back to laying on the couch....
Then she's on her knees again holding your dick saying she missed your taste...
Then she's on the couch again while you pretend to be alpha and tell her to suck it in your thoughts....
Then she's back on her knees blowing you....
Like damn dev... play through your update before you release it lol....

 

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yea
fixed it.

 

[TigerWolfe]

Needs a serious proofreading pass. Renders are nice enough and MC as man servant seems novel enough. Not wild about seeing an LI get railed by not-MC (although based off of comments here that was perhaps just a similar looking girl, better English would convey that better)*. I'm not one of the ravening horde of "only virgins" harem fans... But there's a big difference between being aware of the reality of the existence of former partners for the LIs and seeing them with those former partners.

Android patch was still only version 0.1 so if the novel part of this VN reads better now I apologize for being out of date.

*updated with more context.

 

[boobsrcool]

if anyone is curious about the context to those 2 screenshots, its the MC watching porn. so seems like wasted effort on renders

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Is this still canon?

 

[Raziel_8]

The idea of the MC being a maid is kinda rare, some female models are good, but that's everything possitive about this game.

I can't stand the MC.
He is the typical manchild, which drools after every female, peeps on women, gets an hard on just from watching yoga and he is an complete simp, dumb on top of that.
Like the guy is wondering why a hot women like Lisa is with that old fart...she literally told him, he's rich does whatever she wants and work isn't for her, after a few minutes i already got fed up with the MC simping for that gold digger.

The porn clip with the black guy and the Lisa look alike was already bad.
Why would we, or the MC, want to see a look alike of a LI (he has the hots for) getting fucked by a black guy and jerking off to that...

This time around we are forced to go back with a cheating ex, which is sad that the guy she cheated with on the MC is now cheating on her...seriously what bs is that.
Seriously why ? He just got an invitation from the hot milf he knows from his childhood, why forcing going back to that ugly, cheating ex ? I wouldn't piss on her if she were on fire.

Also a lack of choices, make it avoidable to watch that video, give choices if we want to pursue the LI's or not, like the ex and no forced sex scenes.

 

[Anarchy2000]

as i read in another comment, patreon friendly tags only lol


will there be incest (outsourced)?

 

[TONYNICHOLAS]

animations ?

 

[Sweetychily]

I really consider your feedbacks. I've done some mistakes... Thanks to your feedbacks I'll be able to reorganize them. I'm gonna make the choices more avoidable from now on and the issue that you talk about the girl cheated on the MC gonna be avoidable either. As I say I'm a beginner and trying to improve myself.

 

[Look-see]

Is this still canon?

yes i restarted the game to make sure and it still happens.

 

[hysepReC]

I really consider your feedbacks. I've done some mistakes... Thanks to your feedbacks I'll be able to reorganize them. I'm gonna make the choices more avoidable from now on and the issue that you talk about the girl cheated on the MC gonna be avoidable either. As I say I'm a beginner and trying to improve myself.

I understand new devs can make mistakes but I have to ask what your thinking behind the cheating ex-girlfriend was? There are many reasons why a couple might split up but you chose to make her a cheater. Why? That makes her instantly unlikable and dead as a LI for many people.

 

[Professor Black]

I was ok with the mc watching porn with one of the LI look alike, I already knew its just one of those cliche and it's not really her. I guess some people have PTSD from other games, which i can understand. But what I didn't enjoy was there were no option to ignore the cheating slut, is that even a kink? to fuck your cheating ex back? I'm really not sure. other than that story was original and good overall, dialogue could use some overhaul though.

 

[Majindevil]

Actually I wanted to put a char on the story that MC can fuck her whenever he wants. MC doesn't try to be in a relationship with her and there is no emotion for MC's side. Kind of a getting revenge from a slut ex GF and have fun with it. Obviously I couldn't expose it on the script...

a little tipp never force content... just think about it for every kink on this site there are 10 people who like it but also 10 who hate it... so as a dev i can understand to put as much of them into the game to reach a broader audience BUT if said kinks are not avoidable you just won 10 player but also lost 10 an when more and more content and kinks are added you will soon run into the problem that you will piss off more people than you win. but as long this things are avoidable (and i dont mean skipable but in the next epsiode the mc just remembers it....no avoidable like it dosnt happen maybe in an twisted alternate world nobody would see only if he would isekaid in said... damn sorry back on topic...)

so long as ech li is not forced on you and you as the mc has control who you persue and fuck people can even live with totally different and contradicting kinks but only if they never cross and the player has all say in what he wants to see in his playthrough.

sure it is not easy and a lot more to write and script but in the end its either this way or stick to a specific crowd which will include to really understand them and what they want to see in a game otherwise its just a matter of time for a failure or outcrys like the last update.

 

[XV71]

Actually I wanted to put a char on the story that MC can fuck her whenever he wants. MC doesn't try to be in a relationship with her and there is no emotion for MC's side. Kind of a getting revenge from a slut ex GF and have fun with it. Obviously I couldn't expose it on the script...

Honestly, I'd be fine with it if was just the Lisa lookalike porn thing, unless the mc is fucking her mom in front of her there is no revenge, having sex with her and calling it revenge is peak idiocy no offense, just so you could throw in a cheap fuck, it only reflects badly on the mc as he is associating himself with her again after she cheated knowing how Happy they were together, don't delude yourself the mc isn't getting revenge unless the person hates you and you slowly corrupt them into falling for you through love or obedience, but that isn't the case here, this game would have been better off without the cheap whore being forced onto the player, my two most hated things are ntr and people who think having sex with someone is somehow revenge, it doesn't matter if the mc wants to be in a relationship with her just letting her slip back into his life shows the mc has no self-respect.

 

[Sweetychily]

MC just wanna fuck her and beside that I think he can take revenge on him by leaving his feelings unrequited.

In any case you all right about not to put a choice... I agree with you... Totally my mistake. I'll put avoidable choice and fix that problem in the next update.

 

[risky0]

I don't want to tell you what to do but I think the point is that he cheated on mc in the past, if you're thinking of saving something I think you should change this situation.
Frankly, I don't prefer a loser Mc who was cheated on in the past.
Good luck.

 

[Famescua]

Which is kind of sad really. I've played one game that had a black MC(STWA The Author), which was an amazing game. We need more games like that. I'm not a white dude and I feel like there should be more. But, it is what it is. It's a shitty overly used trope though.

Try Starship Innana, it's slow in development but it's a very good story. Plus the MC is black.

 

[SilentSevenStar]

Nice~

 

[Rodrigoofb]

forcing the cheating ex gf on the player was never gonna work my guy. Even if she wasn't a cheating bitch, it would still be an unavoidable sex scene. Just give the player a choice to tell her to fuck off, she's for the streets.