I've been following this game for some time and when I saw this new Twine rendition I decided that's it's a time for a comment.
1. First of all, thank you for your work. In my opinion, Rubedo is the greatest QSP game of all time and seeing its spiritual successor to go to Twine is really nice. It's easier to run and it probably has more technical options.
2. Your original story and a variety of races are good. Story is not easy to get a grasp on but it is an interesting take on our world's mythos.
3. From the game design perspective, it is an improvement from the "original" but here are some points:
- Warrior has a multiattack but attacks do not go to different target. If I am fighting 5 goblins with 30 HP and I have 5 attacks, I still need take 5 attack actions. This is probably a tech thing but I felt that it needed mentioning.
- It is not clear which actions lead to XP gain. The game really need visuals for this.
- It seems that Monduval clothes do not have any effect for now.
- Your default house is the hut on Dragon isles and you can teleport concubines only there which is odd.
4. Thank you for not hiding variables so they can be accessed via the browser console!
Things that I am not fond of:
1. For me, the main selling point of Rubedo was corruption. You decided to remove such arcs as:
- barmaiden in Avedon suburbs (replaced with Frog that has a distinct kink so doesn't count),
- onsen worker,
- sex worker in the slums (it was not from pure to corrupt, it was from corrupt to truly depraved).
- Idk about Tel-Adre barmaiden, it's not implemented yet.
- Oh, I remembered, also sex in bakery! Now it's replaced with "semen donation" which is not that engaging imo.
- Also, there were hints to corruption via flower delivery in Rubedo, now they are gone too.
- And a gloryhole in the port.
2. You can sell yourself to lizardfolk and at the Junktown brothel from the get go, character do not have moral restraints to begin with which is odd. This genuinely breaks immersion.
3. Not only it breaks immersion, it makes it so there are no repetitive-and-escalating events in the game which are really important if you came here not for the story but for the NSFW content.
4. Overall it seems that there are more stuff to do as a male character than as a female character which makes me sad.
5. On a similar note, you can't use a brothel for some reason, you can only work in it. This would be a great addition.
So, I understand that you want to distance yourself from the "source" but I humbly ask you to consider bringing back things that made it great in the first place or making new similar ones that fill the same gameplay niches.
As a nar GD\ game writer I could even write something for you but I understand that you chose to be a single dev for a reason and I highly respect that as well as an enormous job you've done.
Thank you for your game! What you're making can be one of the greatest NSFW games of all time eventually.
