This is getting interesting. The way you tell the story makes it feel like a movie. Music sets the mood.
Plot build up is on point. The hottest thing about this game is Nina. It would be great to see a lesbo scene with her. Just imagine a whole game about Nina training girls in the office. Too hot. Other super attractive things are heels, skirts, office environment and great camera shots showing model's legs. You could try to play with focal length and light setting in the renderer in order to get more realistic - more big screen movie like. And think about adding short animations rotating view, closeups. For example you enter the room, animation zoom and she sits down and crosses her legs. Negatives - it looks like MC who's not very smart won't get any action lol. It's more like Beatdown edition. It's shocking how women in this game behave. But women are very aggresive and treat guys like s*** nowadays.
Anyway what I'm trying to say is MORE NINA!
What software do you use to create 3D models and renders?