Also wanted to voice my opinion that the scenes are far less erotic when we hear how much she's enjoying what's happening and even demanding more. Ugh. It's awful. The dialog is painful to me. It's far more erotic when there's ambiguity, and where you leave space for the player to assume she's feeling what THEY would like to see her feeling. The player's imagination is FAR more rewarding than anything a Dev can write. -- Just have her gasp, protest, and then have an orgasm--whether wanted by her, or not--is enough for her part. All the dirty talk should only be coming from the men and boys--none from her. If the guys ask something like, "You liked getting fucked?", et al., then, again, leave her answer ambitious--just have her not reply to any of those questions. As well, none of the 'hearing' of her thoughts, unless maybe if it's disbelief, anxiety, silent protest, denial, disgust, humiliation, reservations, great reluctance, or shame.
Because, the goal should be her having to DO things a slut does, but never ACTUALLY ever BECOMING a slut. Because as soon as she IS a slut, the interest in her--for the player--goes WAY DOWN. At that point we're looking for a new, fresh girl (Ie., another VN.) And that isn't what you want, I don't think.
