This game wins me from the banner alone. The concept and MC carry the stars. Sadly I think everything else is weak to failing. I am hopeful that it will be improving given the popularity, and I hope more expertly advice comes to Dev's aid.
Not meant comprehensively.
Positive
Lily's vibe/looks echoes a performer from way back, Mya Mckay/Nichole, before she was worn out by abuse, surgery and anorexia. Chef's kiss.
Material is controlled and well planned.
Neg:
The judgement should be based on the game/VN's merit within its genre/fetish. Its weaknesses then are obvious.
- I don't know why the progress feels very bland. To be sure, I recall a blackmailer, an insidious mentor and a couple of "come on, do it"-types conditioning you with praise and bribery. Still, Lily never appears convincingly forced, tricked, seduced, etc. It feels like lewd acts are presented and you either accept or not, usually, she feels too stupid or childish to compute (and not in a sexy innocent way...).
- Nothing lives up to conceptual drama,
_the Stephen King/Wickerman/Village setting does not feel nearly isolated/cultish enough
_the sneaky/sleezy old-man is not sleezy enough,
_the old lady neither tricky nor devlish enough,
_the vagrant is neither seductive nore threatening enough,
_the thugs aren't tough and prince charming is not charming
_the pimpy photographer doesn't make any sense, he's like a fashion queen diva AND he's in a village.
The thing that most surprised me most was the village-setting, with all the well-done, sometimes very large no-escape worlds you find in corruption games this was an odd disappointment... I don't know if Dev can pull a Palahniuk out of what seems like a Shyamalan...
This a very good cut of beef, but it's cooked, raw, seasoned and plain in all the wrong ways.
I have no idea how to make it immersive/believable/erotic...: more details? more horrific/brutal? drugs earlier? more reasonable sequence of corrupt events? ...
I hope Dev will find the inspiration/advice necessary. I want to enjoy this as much as I love it.
Not meant comprehensively.
Positive
Lily's vibe/looks echoes a performer from way back, Mya Mckay/Nichole, before she was worn out by abuse, surgery and anorexia. Chef's kiss.
Material is controlled and well planned.
Neg:
The judgement should be based on the game/VN's merit within its genre/fetish. Its weaknesses then are obvious.
- I don't know why the progress feels very bland. To be sure, I recall a blackmailer, an insidious mentor and a couple of "come on, do it"-types conditioning you with praise and bribery. Still, Lily never appears convincingly forced, tricked, seduced, etc. It feels like lewd acts are presented and you either accept or not, usually, she feels too stupid or childish to compute (and not in a sexy innocent way...).
- Nothing lives up to conceptual drama,
_the Stephen King/Wickerman/Village setting does not feel nearly isolated/cultish enough
_the sneaky/sleezy old-man is not sleezy enough,
_the old lady neither tricky nor devlish enough,
_the vagrant is neither seductive nore threatening enough,
_the thugs aren't tough and prince charming is not charming
_the pimpy photographer doesn't make any sense, he's like a fashion queen diva AND he's in a village.
The thing that most surprised me most was the village-setting, with all the well-done, sometimes very large no-escape worlds you find in corruption games this was an odd disappointment... I don't know if Dev can pull a Palahniuk out of what seems like a Shyamalan...
This a very good cut of beef, but it's cooked, raw, seasoned and plain in all the wrong ways.
I have no idea how to make it immersive/believable/erotic...: more details? more horrific/brutal? drugs earlier? more reasonable sequence of corrupt events? ...
I hope Dev will find the inspiration/advice necessary. I want to enjoy this as much as I love it.