Is this it? I mean... It wasn't bad, but... All that hype for... this? Very mid update. Mid banter, mid teasing, bellow average sex scenes that were EXTREMELY short, in fact, shorter than the teasing scenes from the earlier updates.
The writing for those scenes was very poor, to say the least. Felt like a "well, let's get this out of the way so that we can move on" kinda scene.
People saying "Saxy is cooking!" probably can't even go to the gym without creaming their underpants, because seriously... Even though we finally got the long awaited sex scene with the coach, there was nothing hot about it. Actually, I think this is the worse I've seen the pacing and text for any update, so far.
It felt like watching someone rip apart the concept of "show, don't tell". Because we are told multiple times Ammie is getting fucked hard, intensely and losing her mind from pleasure... But we don't actually see that happening, because the author doesn't show us, he only tells us it's happening. And then you press enter a couple of times and the sex scene is over, without even giving you enough time to get a hard-on. Lmao.
You're telling me the jacked personal trainer who just so happens to present himself as a fuckboy could only mannage that? 2 positions in bed for what seemed like a couple of minutes, then a slightly longer and somehwat "spicier" (hair grabbing and spanking) scene in the bathroom with only silhouetes?
Again, there was no kissing, no breast sucking, no foreplay, nothing interesting going on. Straight to the bedroom, then straight to sex (very lame sex, at that), pump a couple of times, aaaaaand done! What an absolute shitshow of a sex scene.
And what the fuck is up with the dialogue? "ahhmm", "uhhmmmf", "aaargh", "fuck!"... We grade schoolers now? The fucking AI NTR games being spammed on this site have better dialogue for the sex scenes. For shame!
Great art tho. Karman is the one actually cooking.
I've come to the conclusion that Saxonado can't write sex scenes. The one with the coworker seems to have been a fluke.