Ren'Py Whispers of Desire [v0.30] [Mr_Fable]

[SomeOldFart]

Every time I read a book, the story goes the way that the author wrote it.

 

[Mr Fable]

The thing about games like this is you're completely at the mercy of the dev's understanding of personality dynamics and intent. Tired to steer the MC's in certain directions and just can't. The point system doesn't make too much sense either, unless you just want straight NTR with male characters. Either you go all out or you head toward failure. Like many of these games, the male character is forced into a degrading position while the female becomes empowered. The corruption is one way. This one has potential though, if the point system is revised a bit so that both the male and female characters can be equally corrupted or submissive.

What changes to the point system do you think are needed.

 

[Mr Fable]

And if they are both corrupting each other? With no humiliation or degradation?
Mr Fable ?

That should be possible.

 

[Coder62]

If you'd like a free English proofreader (once you've uploaded a free new chapter or whatever) let me know

Edit: Removed pesky incorrect comma!

 

[Maviarab]

If you'd like a free English proofreader, (once you've uploaded a free new chapter or whatever) let me know

Your comma is incorrectly placed

 

[Coder62]

Your comma is incorrectly placed

Kinda ironic I'll grant you lol. I guess I am better suited to just proofreading where people use the wrong words etc and some spelling. I do the scripts for ILSProductions with Toxicity. Thanks for the tip on the comma, never knew that : )

 

[Mr Fable]

Kinda ironic I'll grant you lol. I guess I am better suited to just proofreading where people use the wrong words etc and some spelling. I do the scripts for ILSProductions with Toxicity. Thanks for the tip on the comma, never knew that : )

I just started working with another proof reader , but any help would be appreciated. I would recommend waiting for the next update because some of the issues already there will be fixed in that release.

 

[blkcrow20]

I just started working with another proof reader , but any help would be appreciated. I would recommend waiting for the next update because some of the issues already there will be fixed in that release.

I'd offer to help if my plate wasn't already full. *shrugs*

 

[TonyMurray]

If you'd like a free English proofreader (once you've uploaded a free new chapter or whatever) let me know

Edit: Removed pesky incorrect comma!

It's not that there shouldn't be a comma (there should), it's the placement. It should be after the closing parenthesis so the format is: "if this - comma - let me know."

 

[Maviarab]

Kinda ironic I'll grant you lol. I guess I am better suited to just proofreading where people use the wrong words etc and some spelling. I do the scripts for ILSProductions with Toxicity. Thanks for the tip on the comma, never knew that : )

It's not that there shouldn't be a comma (there should), it's the placement. It should be after the closing parenthesis so the format is: "if this - comma - let me know."

This. Tony's placement is perfect, after. Never before, or extremely rarely. Often one may not be needed after the parenthesis either, that really depends on the context of the sentence.

 

[Coder62]

This. Tony's placement is perfect, after. Never before, or extremely rarely. Often one may not be needed after the parenthesis either, that really depends on the context of the sentence.

Thanks so much to you and Tony, I'll do my best to remember this!

 

[Coder62]

I just started working with another proof reader , but any help would be appreciated. I would recommend waiting for the next update because some of the issues already there will be fixed in that release.

No worries mate, I don't know if DMing is a thing on here, but feel free to drop me one and I can give you my email if you ever need help.

 

[CarrolldaBoss]

I don't see how it's one-way traffic there. There are opportunities for both male and female MC to have their stats changed in various categories (and we're still early in the game's development, so there will be plenty more to come). What degrading position is the MMC forced into?

Very true, it's still early, but point wise more flow toward her than him. There are at least 2 that will minus against his if you do not allow or encourage her too (so no opportunity for her submission). That's why I'm still hopeful there will be tweaking of the point system and perhaps another metric added. No dissing the dev(s). It's hard work.

 

[CarrolldaBoss]

What changes to the point system do you think are needed.

I've looked over it again more carefully - tried looking at your code to see if I could add up all the point systems but you've compressed it so yeah - and think there's an easier fix. I'll put it in a spoiler tag...

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[Coder62]

I've looked over it again more carefully - tried looking at your code to see if I could add up all the point systems but you've compressed it so yeah - and think there's an easier fix. I'll put it in a spoiler tag...

Spoiler: Ideas

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Not that my 2 cents count for anything, but I just wanted to say I liked your idea here and also your statement that the game is good so far and has a certain something to it that others don't. : )

 

[Dealbreaker]

It just needs a little tweaking with the dialogue.

You are right in your observations, but I would say this is not about some little bugs but about the overall tendency of the game which is deliberate. You can sense it in most conversations.

 

[Mr Fable]

Not that my 2 cents count for anything, but I just wanted to say I liked your idea here and also your statement that the game is good so far and has a certain something to it that others don't. : )

Excellent points. That is the why I have incorporated the personality stat into the game so we can track how dominant or submissive the main characters are. Ideally I would like to have such subtle changes in the dialog in the game that changes with these different personalities. However, having such different dialogs this early in the game, although can look simple at first, quickly adds up as I am experiencing while finishing the upcoming update (some dialog are different based on your character traits). So for now I am to planning to have most of these character traits show their effect later in the game. Having them play out now would take mean that the update rate for the game would be significantly affected. That been said as the game grow I do plan to hire more help so I can incorporate such nuances to the game. And I am not against the idea of going back to a chapter and modifying it to add more depth to the characters, to make the game a more memorable experience.

You are right in your observations, but I would say this is not about some little bugs but about the overall tendency of the game which is deliberate. You can sense it in most conversations.

as Dealbreaker points out some of the flow is deliberate to make sure I can release regular updates. I think a player once raised the point that the MMC is still in limbo whether he is into sharing, although the player picks every choice against it. Which is kind of true, but that choice is made to make sure the development doesn't become overwhelming. However in later updates you will see more differences in the dialog based on their character stats.

 

[Joshy92]

I think the sharing path in this is going to be so hot. I can't' wait to share Sarah with Erik.

 

[SomeOldFart]

I think the sharing path in this is going to be so hot. I can't' wait to share Sarah with Erik.

 

[TonyMurray]

One of the things I like to do in a game like this is to thwart the slimy boss at every step - so Neil, in this instance