VN Ren'Py Abandoned Why not?! - A week with my cousins [Day 1] [Soul93]

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Mr Wayne

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Jul 7, 2017
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A great start with eye catching graphics and implications, I will follow and see how it grows. I worry about only a week, but since you have included the nights with it it might work. Thank you for sharing your hard work. So far it was fun.
 

Efol

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Nov 18, 2018
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I must say it is refreshing seeing a game on here where the women are aggressive from the start.
Usually the games are about a guy creeping around and perving on his family so this is a breath of fresh air.
 
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I'm trying to focus on "silly, harmless porn game... don't worry about the plot," while also trying to ignore things like "If I haven't seen them since they were 12 or 13, and one is a virgin, what made them plot to invite me out with the intentions of jumping my bones, together?" and, less meta, "my cousin hugged me when I said hi and is happy I'm here. Do you think she wants to fuck me?"

It's kind of hot, it's silly fun, and it's a first attempt (compared to my ZERO attempts, so I shouldn't judge so hard), but it comes off a little odd.

A suggestion of how I'd manipulate the plot a little, to make it feel more normal?
1) With a few weeks off college, you went to that city for a vacation. Upon getting there, the event you went there to see is canceled and your hotel screwed up booking, and you have no place to stay.
Call home, talked to mom, and she suggests your uncle. Talking to him, he says yes, and informs his daughter's you'll be visiting, but tells you he'll be gone all week on a trip.

2) Cousins are happy to see you day zero. Less flirting, more excitement. After dinner, while you relax, they talk to each other and say they both used to have a crush on you, and as twins they share anyhow, and THAT is when they make their plot.

3) day one should be more... settling in and getting to know the girls. Some flirting and teasing, but nothing too far. Early in the day, they call to reserve the hot spring.

4) day 2 should be most of current build's day one

move forward from that point

That makes a better reason for him to be in town, a better reason for the cousins to decide to make a plot, and slows things down, just a little, to allow better pacing, and getting more from the girls feel more earned.
 

Mod Learner

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Dec 1, 2019
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Your game look great, sir, but it's too large. Only day 1 and it's 1GB. I don't really want to imagine a game one week long 7GB.
Too bad I don't have any experience with game develop, but if someone pro can help then you can lower the size as there are many pictures with same background but only different face expression. For example the event_mao is 124 MB but you can cut it down around 20 MB if you able to cut the faces for expression and use only one background.
 

KRock19

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Jul 15, 2017
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I had a go at this game and found it quite nice.
I liked the girls look and the animation is also ok. For a first try definetly well done!(y)

The plot is a bit too random and the suggestion of humanstickobserver is actually quite good to make the game feel a bit more natural. It's rather unlikely that the girls want to give themselves to someone who they have not seen in years. So coming up with their plan after having actually seen the MC and talked to him would make it a bit more realistic.

Overall I had fun playing the game and that's what counts......:)
So I will tag this little thread and keep following your progress with the game!

Thanks for your work in putting this together! :cool:
 

tincann

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Jul 18, 2017
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Not a bad beginning. A few grammatical errors, but very good for someone who it is not their native tongue.
I like it. And those cute redheads make me want more now....:p
 
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LaraWolfe

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I'm surprised I was the first one to review it. I've had this game sitting in my "New games to play" folder since release...
 

Cernunnos.

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Interesting start but what is it with redheads always making pancakes in these type of games? My only dislike is the nipple tattoos...they just look weird, like large deformed areola.
 
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