VN Ren'Py Wild Cats [v0.3] [LopaPhi]

[EvolutionKills]

I really do like the game and all, but dude needs to get their use of ellipsis under control. I'm with Shakespeare and staunchly on the side of loosening grammar rules, writing in the vernacular so to speak, especially when writing dialogue. But all the the writing in-between? It needs some serious wrangling and a few passes from an editor. There are multiple frames during the pool scene that had 3 or 4 uses of ellipsis. If you have a complete thought and need a pause? Use a period. Have an incomplete thought and need a pause? Use a comma, and complete the thought. I've seen other Ren'Py games use them so I know the capacity exists, so maybe try out using bold or italics for extra emphasis? But the chronic abuse of the ellipsis needs to chill the fuck out.



The above is not spoken dialogue. This should be broken up with a period, a comma, then 2 more periods. The use of 4 ellipsis is a bit ridiculous. It also mostly neuters the literary impact, the overuse robbing it of distinction from other punctuation. Need an even longer pause than a period? Simple fix; put that text on the next frame.

 

[Discrepancy]

Bring it on

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No interest in the other 4?

 

[ChipLecsap]

No interest in the other 4?

 

[Discrepancy]

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That scene is pretty awesome

 

[Tenshi1999]

I love watching people shit themselves when a woman in a porn game doesn't immediately kneel before the MC and worship his cock while simultaneously having never done anything wrong or has feelings for another boy in the past because God forbid characters have layers! Just make them walking holes!

This is also why many similar games include a lot of other girls early in the story to fill in this part of the plot. I still think each update should include at least 2–3 sex scenes, after all, each update takes 8–12 months.

 

[iIIusory]

This is also why many similar games include a lot of other girls early in the story to fill in this part of the plot. I still think each update should include at least 2–3 sex scenes, after all, each update takes 8–12 months.

you have to remember that it's one guy making this as a part-time job. other hs games of this quality have a team of people working on it. also, additional sex scenes wouldn't have made sense in this update as it was adamantly about progressing the plot.

 

[Meiri]

1-Saki, 2-Eve, 3-Zoe, 4-Desiree, 5-Lexi, 6-Fiona
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I like them all though

Honestly, my list would be almost the same but Zoe would've first.

There's nothing wrong with Fiona, but I think I just expected a bit more from her, she still feels like the girl we have seen the less.

 

[OsirisHeir._]

Just finished the recent update — really enjoyed it! The pacing feels natural, and it is well written. Although not much lewd content, I really like this update from the dev. Looking forward to Chapter 4!

 

[KaosKally]

Honestly, my list would be almost the same but Zoe would've first.

There's nothing wrong with Fiona, but I think I just expected a bit more from her, she still feels like the girl we have seen the less.

i actually feel bad for her considering all the issues she have. I can't say I agree with what she did but i understand why she did it. And I guess is now quite easy to see how hard it hits her the role she chose in all that ordeal.

 

[IfuckKayane&Vania]

you have to remember that it's one guy making this as a part-time job. other hs games of this quality have a team of people working on it. also, additional sex scenes wouldn't have made sense in this update as it was adamantly about progressing the plot.

You are right in any aspect, but it is especially regrettable and arduous and a real challenge to our patience to wait up to ten months for a new update when the story's quality is so high.

 

[KaosKally]

You are right in any aspect, but it is especially regrettable and arduous and a real challenge to our patience to wait up to ten months for a new update when the story's quality is so high.

Now I see a bit of a contradiction here. You want faster updates but at the same quality, thing that I agree can be achieved, but not by a single dev, making the game in his free time, jugling with work and family. Besde, for me at least, considering the quality it delivers, I don't mind the wait.

 

[iIIusory]

the custom volleyball animations must be a ton of work too

 

[Discrepancy]

the custom volleyball animations must be a ton of work too

Imagine when they have real games, if he keeps doing animations for it, it's going to take ages, but it would be cool to see them actually
I'm actually really invested on the sport story thing, came to see girls in short shorts and got invested in the volleyball drama

 

[IfuckKayane&Vania]

Now I see a bit of a contradiction here. You want faster updates but at the same quality, thing that I agree can be achieved, but not by a single dev, making the game in his free time, jugling with work and family. Besde, for me at least, considering the quality it delivers, I don't mind the wait.

you misunderstood me. I just deplore that we have to wait so long although I understand that this is probably unavoidable. But getting more updates in a shorter time with the same quality ... would you be against it ?

 

[KaosKally]

you misunderstood me. I just deplore that we have to wait so long although I understand that this is probably unavoidable. But getting more updates in a shorter time with the same quality ... would you be against it ?

Ah got it, sorry that was my bad there then, and heck no, i would love faster updates at the same quality, but is something we just hope it can happen for now.

 

[IfuckKayane&Vania]

you misunderstood me. I just deplore that we have to wait so long although I understand that this is probably unavoidable. But getting more updates in a shorter time with the same quality ... would you be against it ?

I would love to help this man to get faster (I am a writer by myself and a former newspaper journalist) but don't understand anything of render technique and so on. So we have to bite the bullet and just waaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiitttt

 

[IfuckKayane&Vania]

I would love to help this man to get faster (I am a writer by myself and a former newspaper journalist) but don't understand anything of render technique and so on. So we have to bite the bullet and just waaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiitttt

An alternative for the future would be: Lopaphi could make two smaller updates out of one big. This just released update e.g. was really huge and you could possibly split it into two smaller ones, each one released in a four months interval.

 

[Erios Stiflerick]

I'll play when the Portuguese translation is released. Is the update good?

Aqui a versão com tradução em português. Também tem a opção de linguagem em inglês, é só alterar nas configurações. Infelizmente devido a edição de traduções só tem esses dois idiomas disponíveis.
(Here's the version with the Portuguese translation. There's also an English language option; just change it in the settings. Unfortunately, the translation editor only has these two languages available.)
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[KaosKally]

I would love to help this man to get faster (I am a writer by myself and a former newspaper journalist) but don't understand anything of render technique and so on. So we have to bite the bullet and just waaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiitttt

I write as well, well poetry and I know is not the same, but I don't know, having multiple writers for this game feels wrong somehow. I am not sure aditional writers could match the writing.
And about spliting the release, it might work, just i have no idea how well considering it will leave you hanging either way.

 

[Meiri]

An alternative for the future would be: Lopaphi could make two smaller updates out of one big. This just released update e.g. was really huge and you could possibly split it into two smaller ones, each one released in a four months interval.

If you want quality you have to wait, also making the update shorter also means he wouldn't be able to show everything and could lead to updates where your favorite LI barely shows for example, I like the current length.