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Ren'Py World's Crossing Academy [v1.3.5.1] [TeamEmberWings]
I played whole game again from the start. My saves were from period when there was two parts, so I wanted to redo those and make sure they'll work. Few things I'd like to mention. Aside from game having amazing characters, some of which managed to surprise me with their awesomeness (for example Druthari in the early date in awesome costume. Beware goblins, we might have new number two girl (can't beat Wither though)).
When someone sends you an image within text messages, it would be nice to view full size image of it by clicking it on phone, like some games do.
Idea to send two "sorcerers", no matter how powerful, to fight Marbog seems far fetched given rate of Marbog's reproduction and vast area to be reconquered (unless their powers are at nuclear levels and using those would cause nuclear winter, which would make planet too cold for Marbogs).
Sidestories seemed often disjointed and some of them ended bit too abruptly. I'd like to see as much of the story as possible in the main story.
There were couple parts with no images, just conversation showing with black screen for about half dozen screens. For example second of these around the sentence "I'm sorry again! I'd stop to help but I'm in a hurry!". Seems like MC collided with someone, but it was weird that nothing was shown? Placeholder that was forgotten to finish?
Few typos:
(MC in kitchen)
Anywho... -> Anyhow
(First visit to beach with Ember)
I suppose I'll take that as a complement -> compliment?
(In the pool with Rukah)
I was alwasys chastised for not fitting in with orc -> always
When someone sends you an image within text messages, it would be nice to view full size image of it by clicking it on phone, like some games do.
Idea to send two "sorcerers", no matter how powerful, to fight Marbog seems far fetched given rate of Marbog's reproduction and vast area to be reconquered (unless their powers are at nuclear levels and using those would cause nuclear winter, which would make planet too cold for Marbogs).
Sidestories seemed often disjointed and some of them ended bit too abruptly. I'd like to see as much of the story as possible in the main story.
There were couple parts with no images, just conversation showing with black screen for about half dozen screens. For example second of these around the sentence "I'm sorry again! I'd stop to help but I'm in a hurry!". Seems like MC collided with someone, but it was weird that nothing was shown? Placeholder that was forgotten to finish?
Few typos:
(MC in kitchen)
Anywho... -> Anyhow
(First visit to beach with Ember)
I suppose I'll take that as a complement -> compliment?
(In the pool with Rukah)
I was alwasys chastised for not fitting in with orc -> always
- Oct 14, 2019
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Hey there! Thanks for the feedback.
Putting the stories into the main story disallows people from being able to include and exclude the girls they are or aren't interested in. Would you believe there are people who don't want to romance every single LI out there? I know. Crazy. But I got crucified in WCA's early days for "forced" content, so I began putting as much as I felt was practical into the side stories.
I'm interested to see how you feel about the Marbog thing after we get S2E5 out. If it's still not believable, I'd definitely like to know.
Yes, I do the black screen thing here and there when I have an idea after I've shot the scene and want to add a few lines.
Typos:
"Anywho" is a southern thing. Half my family was from Texas, and the other half from Italy, so I have a weird blend of speech habits. You'll notice "y'all" a lot even though I have a California accent lol
Great catch on the other two typos. Fixing those now.
Again, thank you so much for wanting to contribute to making WCA better!
- Oct 19, 2022
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It's shocking to me that anyone who thinks they're proficient enough in English to offer critique, would be unfamiliar with that...
Non-native here. My dictionary doesn't have that word and that was first instance when I ever saw it.
- Oct 19, 2022
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I'm sure in your language there's a ton of dialectal spoken terminology, that wouldn't be found in a dictionary.
This is also the reason I don't try and edit stuff in Arabic despite allegedly being fluent.
You were right on the others though, and I tend to be overly snarky, so don't take it to heart.
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Yeah I grew up with Texan grandparents lol. There's gonna be a LOT of stuff I say that may not be in your dictionary. But I'm grateful for your input because you did catch two typos that have been there for a while!