- Nov 18, 2018
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The problem isn't the girls at home. Its all the ones he keeps adding. The College girls, his girlfriends, Elizabeth, Talismah, Rachel, Harper and then our non-girl Skye. That literally all he ever needed. Throw in the Pregnancy service things every once in a while, maybe bang the teacher or her sister. But as much as I love Willebelle, the colors never needed to exist. The two movie stars never needed to exist. The rich donor women never needed to exist. Before the Bowling Alley event even happened there were already more than enough characters.Everyone keeps talking about "Fix the story" "Too many girls" "It can't be fixed at this point, start over." "There is no story anymore"... There actually is a story, it's buried under lots of other nonsense though. So, here's my sugestion on how to get back to the story....
When the plane lands, Veronica, the Police woman, meets the MC at the airport and tells him that while he was in the air, all the girls that wern't with him were waiting for him to surprise him at home and the douche bag he fought at the bowling alley planted a bomb at his house that went off early and killed half of the harem. Hurt over the loss, the remaining members of the group "circle the wagons" and don't let anyone else in for fear of loosing them one day. MC concerns himself with only his girls and Basketball from then on. Can also give the rest of the story a moral lesson on dealing with greif and loss properly (not by fucking everything in site.)
It may be a bit morbid, but hey, my day job is in the funeral industry.![]()
I swear that event and the fight is where BD shifted gears away from the College and the girls and towards everything else.