VN HTML Abandoned A Day in the Life Of [v0.08] [Erneiros]

[jonk999]

Found a couple of typos on a quick playthrough.

After first sex scene: We also have the right bar, which is basically unused. The only reason that it's there is for the back button, safe and restart buttons and the gallery butten where, obviously, you can replay all the sex scenes you've done.

Isn't the bar on the left? And a couple of typos - safe instead of save, butten instead of button.

When introducing the son it asks you to " Please enter the younger daughters name"

Also, is there any reason you don't have the videos playing automatically. Unless it's just for me. I needed to click on play to have them run.

 

[assurdo]

usually html games are barely a thing on their first release and this, while still not being that full of content, it gives a nice premise of a game and honeslty i hope to see more of this and eventually completed and not abandoned as most games like this end. good luck on your project

 

[Lednacek]

good start, but i dont think there is enough content to share with the world. 6 scenes and the game ends. And you already have 4 characters to play as? You need 100 scenes to make it worth looking with that many characters.

 

[Erneiros]

This made my chuckle. You might think NTR is optional, but I guarantee that there are plenty on this site who would not take that view after playing the game. If you regard the father as the MC (since you start with him) you get to watch your daughter fucked with no option and then see your wife fondle a guy's cock (though you can admitedly stop it there). You will get complaints if you label that as optional NTR.

Having said that, I love it, so please continue to include the forced NTR. Just make sure it is tagged as such.

Personally I thought that NTR is only counts for the partner, in this case it would only be NTR if the mother ($Megan) has sex with someone else while the father ($Steve) watches. Now I could most definitely be wrong about this since I'm not that good on the lingo. That is also the reason that I didn't add NTR in the genres. But please correct me if I'm wrong which automatically means there is NTR in the game and not to worry, this will not change.

Found a couple of typos on a quick playthrough.

After first sex scene: We also have the right bar, which is basically unused. The only reason that it's there is for the back button, safe and restart buttons and the gallery butten where, obviously, you can replay all the sex scenes you've done.

Isn't the bar on the left? And a couple of typos - safe instead of save, butten instead of button.

When introducing the son it asks you to " Please enter the younger daughters name"

Also, is there any reason you don't have the videos playing automatically. Unless it's just for me. I needed to click on play to have them run.

Thank you! As you probably noticed, English is not my first language, so I really appreciate this! Also the son / daughter is indeed a mistake.
The reason that I haven't set the videos on autoplay is because movies should start in order. If autoplay is on then all the clips start playing at the same time, directly as you enter the page. This causes you to maybe miss parts of vid 2 and 3 because you are still watching vid 1. This way you can start vid 2 once you've finished vid 1.

good start, but i dont think there is enough content to share with the world. 6 scenes and the game ends. And you already have 4 characters to play as? You need 100 scenes to make it worth looking with that many characters.

As said in the Dev notes, this is like a preview / demo-ish version. I know it's not a lot yet. But it is in development. And by releasing it now, I can get feedback in early stages which helps with the development. Making changes now is easier then making changes later on.

Bravo for not using the same 5 pornstars that are in every game. Will try it out. Good luck!

Glad you like it, I spend a lot of time in selecting them.

If you are going to put a lot of stuff into the game it would be a good idea to specify what "stuff" or mspecific fetishes will NOT be in your game.

That is a though one, since I'm not completely sure yet. I've plenty planned. But plans keep changing, for example I replaced one of the pornstars last minute because of a change in plans and the initial pornstart couldn't match my demands terms of the scenes she has.

 

[Erneiros]

Yeah, they always cry "let my partner fuck around so i have more time to masturbate to my porn collection"
That being said, i want a ntr answer too, but i think for a different reason

However, the most important question is the female protagonist, will there be a pure lesbian route in the future Erneiros ?

Almost missed you comment since you posted just before my replies.
Either way, there is something planned in the future, that's all I'll be saying right now .
That said, it's hard to make a good lesbian story with real porn since it's hard to find multiple lesbian scenes with the same female pornstars and as said in the dev notes, I don't want continuously random ps or lookalikes in the scenes. But I'll be trying.

 

[Rutonat]

"In the a day life of".
I can't get over it, I'm sorry. People read top to bottom, placement is important...

 

[MissFortune]

You are not far off to be honest, but don't judge a game by it's cover.

I'm not, I know better than that. But a cover's something that's usually going to attract or deter someone, at least in a lot of mediums. That's all.

 

[Raknor]

It is a fairly nice start, but, there are just too many playable characters all at once. I think that you should either just take it down to maximum of two, or just go down to one playable character and have the player choose. Maybe the first time the person plays the game, they choose to play as the father and he plays it to the end. Then, the next time he can choose to play as the father again, making different choices or playing as the female character. But, having at least four characters playable all at once is just too much, both for the player and for you to code and implement.

 

[Gelenji]

Very good concept and demo,seems to be a lot of work for it though, wish you the best of luck !

 

[Zephran]

It is a fairly nice start, but, there are just too many playable characters all at once. I think that you should either just take it down to maximum of two, or just go down to one playable character and have the player choose. Maybe the first time the person plays the game, they choose to play as the father and he plays it to the end. Then, the next time he can choose to play as the father again, making different choices or playing as the female character. But, having at least four characters playable all at once is just too much, both for the player and for you to code and implement.

I agree with this. You, the dev, will have to put ALOT of content into the game already as it stands to cater to the expected desires of everyone. Ever character you have doubles the workload.

 

[jonk999]

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Thank you! As you probably noticed, English is not my first language, so I really appreciate this! Also the son / daughter is indeed a mistake.
The reason that I haven't set the videos on autoplay is because movies should start in order. If autoplay is on then all the clips start playing at the same time, directly as you enter the page. This causes you to maybe miss parts of vid 2 and 3 because you are still watching vid 1. This way you can start vid 2 once you've finished vid 1.

<snip>

No worries. If I go through again and find any more will let you know.

With regards to the videos, most other HTML games have the movies autoplay and on repeat. That way you don't necessarily miss anything as it will keep playing from the beginning again once done. But if your choice is to have the player start each video individually all good

 

[Erneiros]

So not sure if I should do this, probably not, but I'm going to it anyway because I need some more feedback on this review since I didn't understand a lot of this review. Also I reply to most feedback in the comments so why not this one.

First off, as said I appreciate feedback and ratings, but they have to be constructive and I also felt this one doesn't make sense in a lot of ways.

So here is my reaction to @I♥VirginGirls review and I hope he answers some of my questions, so let's get to it.

First of all, it's v0.01, maybe I should have use more zero's to make clear it's a very first version, or maybe I should have put in something more like: PRE ALPHA in caps so it's even more clear, but I was just surprised in general to receive any rating by now. Also if you rate, at least actually play the game (read in game text) and read the dev notes. Let me clarify:

Good:
A lot playable characters.
Thanks.

Bad:
No content.
Read the dev notes, it's clearly stated there. Shouldn't have come as a surprise.

The father saw the daughters having sex and talked about it a bit to early.
There is no talk about sex with any of the daughters as consequence of having seen them having sex.

The father looks like a grandfather.
I think he looks 50 - 60 years old, but ok. Also what is the problem with this?

The mother cheats at her first scene.
This is optional, so if it happens, it's your own choice.

No stats.
This game does not have stats or grind indeed, why is this a problem?

A lot typo.
Help me fix that by telling me where, I'm not native English, so it's likely that there are typo's.

No sound.
HTML games rarely have. Also another reason that I don't use sounds is because pornstars tend to be very vocal and without sounds at least I can decide what they say, if that makes any sense.

Multiple protagonists. Also, you can rename every character but you never knew, is this a playable character or not.
So this confused me the most. First a lot of playable character is a good thing couple of rows down and now it's bad thing?
And I think I make quite clear when a character becomes playable with a pop up.
Also, I do not understand why naming a pc or a npc matters to naming the character, can you elaborate on this?

There is really no daily life. Your daughter and you are fucking every day. Its always the same scene. Currently its just a collection of around 3 short sex scenes.
Again, I made clear that there's not a lot of content in the dev notes. And what do you mean it's always the same scene?


Hope you answer.

 

[The 1★ Dude]

So not sure if I should do this, probably not, but I'm going to it anyway because I need some more feedback on this review since I didn't understand a lot of this review. Also I reply to most feedback in the comments so why not this one.

First off, as said I appreciate feedback and ratings, but they have to be constructive and I also felt this one doesn't make sense in a lot of ways.

So here is my reaction to @I♥VirginGirls review and I hope he answers some of my questions, so let's get to it.

First of all, it's v0.01, maybe I should have use more zero's to make clear it's a very first version, or maybe I should have put in something more like: PRE ALPHA in caps so it's even more clear, but I was just surprised in general to receive any rating by now. Also if you rate, at least actually play the game (read in game text) and read the dev notes. Let me clarify:

Good:
A lot playable characters.
Thanks.


Bad:
No content.
Read the dev notes, it's clearly stated there. Shouldn't have come as a surprise.

The father saw the daughters having sex and talked about it a bit to early.
There is no talk about sex with any of the daughters as consequence of having seen them having sex.

The father looks like a grandfather.
I think he looks 50 - 60 years old, but ok. Also what is the problem with this?

The mother cheats at her first scene.
This is optional, so if it happens, it's your own choice.

No stats.
This game does not have stats or grind indeed, why is this a problem?

A lot typo.
Help me fix that by telling me where, I'm not native English, so it's likely that there are typo's.

No sound.
HTML games rarely have. Also another reason that I don't use sounds is because pornstars tend to be very vocal and without sounds at least I can decide what they say, if that makes any sense.

Multiple protagonists. Also, you can rename every character but you never knew, is this a playable character or not.
So this confused me the most. First a lot of playable character is a good thing couple of rows down and now it's bad thing?
And I think I make quite clear when a character becomes playable with a pop up.
Also, I do not understand why naming a pc or a npc matters to naming the character, can you elaborate on this?

There is really no daily life. Your daughter and you are fucking every day. Its always the same scene. Currently its just a collection of around 3 short sex scenes.
Again, I made clear that there's not a lot of content in the dev notes. And what do you mean it's always the same scene?



Hope you answer.

So what? Because the game is in a pretty early version I need to give you 5 stars? I can only rate this whats currently in the game and thats not much. If you add new noticable content I consider it in the new review and so on. Thats how reviewing works.


Bad:
No content.
Read the dev notes, it's clearly stated there. Shouldn't have come as a surprise.
Yes and I consider it in my review.

The father saw the daughters having sex and talked about it a bit to early.
There is no talk about sex with any of the daughters as consequence of having seen them having sex.
He did, with the youngest. Not original text, "Have you already seen a cock?"

The father looks like a grandfather.
I think he looks 50 - 60 years old, but ok. Also what is the problem with this?
No problem. Just thought everybody must know.

The mother cheats at her first scene.
This is optional, so if it happens, it's your own choice.
Not really optional. Cuz its the only one scene for the wife. So if you want to see a sex scene you MUST cheat on your husband.

No stats.
This game does not have stats or grind indeed, why is this a problem?
Its important for me.

A lot typo.
Help me fix that by telling me where, I'm not native English, so it's likely that there are typo's.
You dont need to be a native english speaker to know its correctly spelled with "Daughter" and not "Duaghter".

There is really no daily life. Your daughter and you are fucking every day. Its always the same scene. Currently its just a collection of around 3 short sex scenes.
Again, I made clear that there's not a lot of content in the dev notes. And what do you mean it's always the same scene?
You always know, 10 pm you go to sleep. In around 10 am you see your daughter fucking the boyfriend?!, in 2 pm you watch tv, in 8 pm you fuck your wife. And so on. Every day is the same. You wake up and see exactly the same scenes as the day before.

ps.:

A seemingly small choice can have massive consequenses.

Even if you reject your boss in the wife path, you will still able to fuck him at the next day. So, currently there are no choices with consequences.

 

[Erneiros]

So what? Because the game is in a pretty early version I need to give you 5 stars? I can only rate this whats currently in the game and thats not much. If you add new noticable content I consider it in the new review and so on. Thats how reviewing works.


Bad:
No content.
Read the dev notes, it's clearly stated there. Shouldn't have come as a surprise.
Yes and I consider it in my review.

The father saw the daughters having sex and talked about it a bit to early.
There is no talk about sex with any of the daughters as consequence of having seen them having sex.
He did, with the youngest. Not original text, "Have you already seen a cock?"

The father looks like a grandfather.
I think he looks 50 - 60 years old, but ok. Also what is the problem with this?
No problem. Just thought everybody must know.

The mother cheats at her first scene.
This is optional, so if it happens, it's your own choice.
Not really optional. Cuz its the only one scene for the wife. So if you want to see a sex scene you MUST cheat on your husband.

No stats.
This game does not have stats or grind indeed, why is this a problem?
Its important for me.

A lot typo.
Help me fix that by telling me where, I'm not native English, so it's likely that there are typo's.
You dont need to be a native english speaker to know its correctly spelled with "Daughter" and not "Duaghter".

There is really no daily life. Your daughter and you are fucking every day. Its always the same scene. Currently its just a collection of around 3 short sex scenes.
Again, I made clear that there's not a lot of content in the dev notes. And what do you mean it's always the same scene?
You always know, 10 pm you go to sleep. In around 10 am you see your daughter fucking the boyfriend?!, in 2 pm you watch tv, in 8 pm you fuck your wife. And so on. Every day is the same. You wake up and see exactly the same scenes as the day before.

ps.:

Even if you reject your boss in the wife path, you will still able to fuck him at the next day. So, currently there are no choices with consequences.

Thank you for making my points for me about you and the fact that you haven't paid (any) attention:
- With the youngest there is an option to talk about sex, but he didn't see the youngest have sex, this was the eldest.
- If grind is important to you, why play a game that states it has no grind (also in de dev notes which you "read").
- The wife has no boss, so what are you talking about? (She doesn't even have a job.)
- I just searched my complete game for the word Duaghter (and duaghter), no results. (It's very easy to search everywhere in Twine fyi.)

Also this will be the last message I'll spend on you and your review, since my point is quite clear.
(I almost start to doubt if I uploaded the correct game / file.)

 

[Virulenz]

Hmm, the replay directed to me prepared me to wait a few updates, but i'm in no way interested seeing any boyfriends or a cheating wife...i mean, the whole point of a lesbian route is to avoid dicks and not stumble every few steps over some. So i need to finetune my last question, will that stuff be avoidable then?

 

[The 1★ Dude]

- I just searched my complete game for the word Duaghter (and duaghter), no results.

Then maybe im playing a different game. But yeah, why you even talk to me if you dont like criticism.

 

[Highland_Hunter]

You dont need to be a native english speaker to know its correctly spelled with "Daughter" and not "Duaghter".

So, How many other game reviews have you done, where the Dev/creator, stated they were NOT an native English speaker, and yet , spelled every single word correctly ?

 

[elstupidwolf]

I have to agree with the person who said the NTR feels very forced.
Like, I have no interest into seeing the girls with other men (forcibly) than the MC...
It's too bad because the concept is actually great.

 

[zeus04]

 

[RockyBalboa1985]

Ntr is unavoidable, so I'll skip, good luck with your game.