VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - 53x – Homecoming [v0.2.8.1] [Agent 53X]

This is a great spy thriller with hot sex scenes. The incest parts has several surprising twists. That said, I enjoy the novel more. Unfortunately, there are many glaring misspellings that distract from the story flow.

The renders are pretty solid and the characters are good also but that’s about it. The story stops making sense after a while. I don’t like how the MC is either a complete fucking idiot or the world’s biggest beta. There is ZERO choice which is very bad for this kind of game.

Review of v0.1.5

To my understanding this is from 1 person shop, not a team of people. I am not someone who could do this on my computer or even think of this type story so I am impressed to start off. For a free game there is really nothing you can complain about.

This is better than good but not completely excellent, but it has great potential!

The story is really interesting, it can go in many different directions. I makes me want to know what is going to happen next more than who the next girl is going to get undressed. Don't get me wrong the girls get undressed plenty.

I like how the MC manipulates the others and they not really see it. I think he is setting up Cam with the way he asks her what her line is that she is willing to cross. The models are hot. Some of the video could use work but after going to the Dev's Patreon site and reading his free posts he plans to do just that on future updates.

Story - 5 of 5
Girls - 5 of 5
Animation - 3 of 5
Potential - 5 of 5
Cost (FREE!) 5 of 5

v0.1.5

Everything is better than average, great even visually, despite the recycled material.

The biggest drawback I have seen is the writing. It is choppy, jerky, no flow or consistency. I only noticed a few real grammatical errors, so that isnt the issue.

The best way I can explain it is how I see it happening in my mind. Instead of writing the story and adding visuals, you created visuals, and added the story later. Maybe you have an outline for a story, but never finished writing it? Maybe you wrote only a first draft, or never had a real editor? I dont really know.

The scenes, models, animations... the visuals in general, they cant cover the entire narative process of a story, you still need background information, hints to moods and ambiance, things visuals cant convey. The inner monologues are a good example, you have that perfect. But the scenes need a sorta inner monologue as well. Granted some things are meant to be jerky, it is a tool to use to setup a certain amount of anxiety, but not the whole thing. I think i got a headache from reading it.

You got the visual part down, just need to work on the novel side of it.

The story/plot is good, interesting enough to keep me playing. The porn and photography add ins seems cliche, and a "genius" should know better.

I think I am coming off sounding too negative, and that is wrong. You have a gem here, it has everything it needs. Some polishing, tweaking, is all it needs to be an easy 5 star. I am not an expert, these are just my impressions, and feedback trying to help you make it better.

Edit: One thing I do like, that i failed to mention. I like how the MC uses his sexual training to manipulate these women who think they are dominant. At first I was turned off about how easily the MC was blackmailed, then I figured it out. From looking at other ratings, you may need to make this more obvious.

Thank you for sharing your hard work. I look forward to your next update.

i was almsot inclined to hit it with 1 star, cause besides the girls being hot, there is nothing actually good about the game, maybe it has some content, but its quantity over quality. Sex scenes are average and the mostly consist in a render or short loop to kickstart the scene with some basic text, an optional looped animation, and a final render for the climax. The total avergae is like 3 seconds. Even a sex scene with a charatcer that yopu have been pursuing for 2 hours of gameplay is like that, feels totally irrelevant and dissapointing.

There are better games. The decent thing about this are the girls, that are a little weird but hot, and some animations are fluid, not good because of that act, just fluid.

After playing in September 2023, Rachel is still unobtainable,and that is more than 2 years since the alst time I played. She even dissappears from the game for very long periods of time and only shows herself to do some hacking. 300 random side characters, in a repetitive fuckfest "game" that dares to keep one of her characters a virgin, for the sake of keeping the patrons "interested" (in this crap). I dont think there is nothing of value in this game in 2023, only Rachel, which at this point is a collectible, like one of those platinum trophies in Playstation.

I'm sorry to say this is not a good game. It's not horrible, but not good at all. 2-3/5 stars.

The renders are avarage, not bad, but can't really compete with what's out there at the moment. The animations are very inconsistent, from sub-standard 3PFS animations to a few that are not bad at all.
The story and writing is a mess. Everything very disconnected, especially the characters. There is almost no relationship buildup at all, no emotional connection between the player and the characters. Sex is included like yet another box to check. Example (slighty exaggerated): "Hey MC! - Hey hot 18-year old adoptive sister. - Here's some blabla... and I want you to teach me about sex. - Okay, remove your clothes. - (One silent cunnilingus scene + one silent penetration scene where no penetration is seen later) - That was great. - Yes. Now back to business."
The story is a convoluted mess and has inconsistencies as well. First MC was 1 year in a coma and near total amnesia, later he says he was half a year in a coma and amnesia is never mentioned again, because MC remembers everything perfectly now. Complex things happen overnight, reactions are not human at all half the time. Feels like the dev is trying to include every idea they had in the story at once, oh and we need sex, too, but by not focussing on one thing they fail at every part of the story.

Summary: No suspense, no rooting for any character, no emotional connection to or between the characters in a story that doesn't know what it wants. Giving 3/5 as an incentive to get better.

The MC- if agent 007 was a soyboy.

The story- it starts out by referencing the most commonly played chess opening (e4, Nf3) but using an archaic nomenclature to denote the positioning, so that should tell you how often you will roll your eyes to see your own brain.

The characters- average. MC submissive to the unlikeable to characters. MC plots payback against a character blackmailing him by submitting to her as his "goddess" and eating her ass..

Yeah, it's gonna be a no from me, dawg.

If 3.5 was an option, I'd probably lean in that direction because this game does have a lot going for it. It starts out with the fairly cliche 'dad dead, son returns home' trope, but the dev uses it well, and it's fun to watch the MC start to rebuild his father's empire. There are also lots of very cool opportunities to arise out of the work the MC is doing. However, from this grows some of the problems that are hurting the game for me a bit.

As the MC grows and establishes businesses/contacts/wealth etc. the game doesn't seem to grow with him. Continuing to do chores every morning...OK...I mean I guess while you are still with Sara it kind of makes sense...although as a business magnate you might have better uses for your time... but once you solve the Alex blackmail issue, you should have the choice to turn the tables on her. It would also be nice to establish different relationships with Sara and Wendy et al.

There are corruption/submission scores for every character...but the game doesn't really seem interested in letting you use them.

Don't get me wrong, I still see a TON of potential in the setup here...but it would be nice if the pacing took it's foot off the gas a little bit in terms of the empire building, and let the player establish some relationship choices with the ladies.

Will continue to look out for updates, and definitely am open to raising my score depending on where things head.

[Rev @ V0.1.3]

Neat. Not used to being a positive dissenting opinion.

I like the art. Girls are nice. What graininess I noticed I chalked up to being compression noise from the slim version and it didn't diminish the experience for me.

Writing is pretty good. Scenario is trite as hell with Guy Comes Home To Hot Mom And Two Hot Sisters being a frequent kicking post of mine, but this one is done well enough to keep my interest. Voice is good and easy to read. Narrative has a couple of jarring jumps that disrupt the flow but nothing too major. Characterization is fine and I had no issues with mixing people up like I do with many lower-effort knockoffs. I didn't get the "MC is a simp" vibe some report, and actually appreciated that he's neither a bumbling dipshit nor creepy little mouthbreather.

Porn content was fine; some scenes come out of nowhere and thus lack the buildup needed for a good payoff. Nothing I saw squicked me,

Gameplay feels a bit railroady. Choices are usually presented in the ol' "Obvious correct / Obvious Incorrect" pairings, and there are stat and skillup pops that seem to be pointless. These could easily be cut or fleshed out to improve design, but don't distract too badly.

TLDR: I think it's fine and look forward to more.

So, this game is average at best, the renders aren't good, i don't understand why some people think that this game has good renders, if it was a game from 2018 it would be acceptable, but from a game of 2020 it's pretty bad and grainly.

The story is pretty cliché, you were in a coma, goes to a house full of beatiful girls, all the girls seems to find you atractive and altough you are kind of family to them they don't really care, some people try to get revenge after the death of your dad and all that. And it's not even the cliché thing that makes it bad, this game has a lot of technical terms and this story is all about MC trying to find ways of getting money, so he is always in business meet ups, and it gets really confusing, most of the times i was reading but didn't understand nothing of it. The blackmail things it's pretty weird, doesn't work at all and doesn't make sense, like he already solved the blackmail problem in the first day, so why would him play along with it?. The MC act like he is shy sometimes but other times he is bold.

The writting itself is decent.

The sex scenes are also bad, they are short asf, there's no dirty talking, not even moans and all that, it isn't sexy, it doesn't give you the sensation of...acomplishment..you know?. Some animations are ok but others are really bad.

Good renders and runs well, however the story feels bare bones in the sense that there is no writing during the sex scenes. The writing overall is not the greatest, with stiff dialogue and a broad story that didn't appeal very much.

Art is strong with nice outfits, but sex scenes are fairly short.

Good game, but has flaws. Graphics are great, plenty of sex / erotic content, but brief scenes and no animation. MC makes money with odd jobs - everything from cleaning the pool to photographing for porn. Choices are easy - "compliment her" or "say nothing" and so forth. Points are achieved mostly via automatic progression, with or without action / dialogue choices. Overall, good graphics, nice sex, but too much dialogue and repetitive actions.

Unless you are a complete beta you will not like this game. Allow me to explain.
I played this for 5 minutes. Quit the moment when the step-sister "videoed"(great english there game) the MC jerking off in the shower and when he caught her because she got a call which pulled him out of his fantasy he asked her to delete it ... which she countered with "you peaked into my room and seen me on the bed with my naked ass pointed towards the door" when he was sent there by the step-mom to wake her up. She then proceeds to blackmail him into becoming her bitch or she will tell the step-mom that he has seen her naked ass ... and the MC just goes along with it ... literally calls her a bitch ONCE and accepts the blackmail ???
The MC is either a complete fucking idiot or the worlds biggest beta.
I played some blackmail and forced feminization games ... but even characters in those were less of a beta bitch than this guy at least they tried to resist more than a single "you are a bitch" followed by "ok mistress how can I serve you".

I'm going to break from my normal review formatting and make this my most succinct review to date.

If one will d/l Zoey Raven's WT you will see the following:

Version 5
- Day 11
- No Choices
- Day 12
- No Choices

Version 6
- No Choices

Version 7
- Day 13
- No Choices

Version 8
- Day 14
- (There is one choice available)

'nuff said.

Review for v.0.0.7

The dev uses 3d models and they are very nicely done. The story goes to many different locations. There are sex scenes with animations. The reviews and posts mention many spelling issues and grammar but in the version I downloaded there may have been 1 or 2 that I saw but not enough to distract me from the story. Maybe they have been cleaned up since earlier versions.

Updates seem to happen once a month so far. The visual novel and updates have been free so far. This makes me think the dev has good work ethic and might complete this VN.

All the characters seem to have different personalities and motivations, this has been nice to see so far.

Overall I find this more entertaining than Man of the House or Milfy City which were my first adult game experiences.

Keep up the good job dev!

Great start!
Great story, solid base to develop deeper, very beautiful girls.
Can also, if intended by the developer, have a time/money/skills management component, sidequests, etecetera
Looking forward to further updates.

Why is it terrible? Just for one reason, no choice! What is given is not a choice. It is a pseudo choice. In this case, this nonsense is better transformed into the category of kinetic novella. And the points should not be counted automatically.

While the game has some things going for it (the models are decent, the main concept of the game, while not revolutionary, is interesting), it does feel like a drag to play through it. The dialogue is monotone and predictable, the plot feels focused and forced, steering you in a certain comical direction. You get the choice to sneak a peek or not, but you do not get the choice to go along with someone's plan to blackmail you?

It has potential, but it requires a lot of work.

The story and writing are good and make you want to continue playing. The graphics and characters are differentiated enough that you aren't confused which interactions are occurring. I think it would be nice to have more choices, but it is not clear whether those choices will really impact opportunities yet. Overall I look forward to new updates.

Reviewed version 0.0.5 (Days 1-12)

This is a solidly average game. The developer is obviously competent with Daz, and uses those skills to arrange attractive female models in regular (although usually short) sex-scenes with each other and the cartoonishly large-dicked hero, and if that's what you're after in a porn game you'll be satisfied.

But that's about it. None of the characters leave a lasting impression, either in their appearance or their writing. The story is sometimes vestigial, sometimes nonsensical, sometimes just plain dull, but always derivative, repeatedly poking you in the face with reminders that these characters and plot beats have been done better elsewhere.