Heya,
Ehhh...
Honestly, it doesn't work.
I read the dev say he's improving the game, but the game needs to be redone.
The story is incomprehensible.
The characters are inconsistent with each other, from one scene to another.
I saw Mia being very angry with Sophia, and in the next scene, everything was normal, like nothing happened previously.
Sophia's anger at the MC for kissing her mother on the mouth was justified, but the mother's explanation was not justified at all.
Also, the mother's explanation of why she wasn't wearing a bra just made me think she was a slut. Why is she dressed like a businesswoman if it's to show off her breasts in an interview?
(And why give the mother a job where she needs to show her breasts with a smile in the first place?) Don't make the mother a slut, please.
And why Sophia pretended to be MC's girlfriend ? It makes no sense at all.
The hint system does not help at all. And I very sincerely think we don't need the thing where we have to feed or wash the MC. It's totally unnecessary.
The MC is too perverted and too stupid. Why does he bother to please Goldie and Cloe? They are not worth it at all.
Why the MC didn't tell them something like : " Yeah wathever, bitch, I'm here to have a good time with my sisters so don't bother us or I will show you what gender equality means."
And it's not just the MC. I found the scene in the bar unnecessary too. Why not just do a scene in the bar, where the MC and Mia explain to Sophia that it's normal for them to be intimate with each other at home? It would calm Sophia down, and she would understand that the MC is not the only one at fault.
The mother could also talk to Sophia privately and tell her that it's also normal for them to be intimate because the MC is supportive and all.
The lewd scenes happen way too fast compared to the relationship between the characters.
We can't understand that their intimacy is normal, we just think it's too rushed.
The dev needs to rethink his story and the behavior of his characters. Otherwise, the number of his patreon will never increase.
I found the idea of repairing the laptop quite good.When you try to fix it, it gives a scene with a character, it's easy to trigger and it's fun.
But again, the scenes were not good, especially the one with Mia.
But the idea was original. And you can do it with other things.
MC, there is a problem with the TV, can you take a look?
There is a problem with the fridge, with the bathtub, etc... at least, the MC would show that he is useful and it could show new scenes.
Then, but this is just my personal opinion, it is useless to give a corruption path or a love path to Sophia. Just let the MC slap her, let Sophia cry a little, and then the relationship can start over. Actually, I never understood the difference between love path and corruption path, for me, it's a waste of time.
There are others thing but I forgot.
Anyway, good luck to the Dev.
