- Sep 19, 2019
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I wouldnt even go that far. Its just that the clown caught my eye at instant but the half naked lady did not.
But the focus point allready got mentioned
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But the focus point allready got mentioned
- Jun 16, 2020
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That's great! I couldn't have done it better in my own language!
I hope that I have the right to use it?
- Feb 5, 2020
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My boy MC finally sees a lifelong friend, she's gorgeous and hungry. What does MC do?
My boy makes her toast...
I expect a Virgin tag down the line because my boy ain't getting any pussy.
My boy makes her toast...
I expect a Virgin tag down the line because my boy ain't getting any pussy.
First, please find an English language proofreader to polish the script. Overall it is fine but it could be much better. It will help attract more players.
How many parents have been lost in car accidents in these games? At least shake it up a bit and have it be a fire at a sea parks or a boating accident...
Emily is a redhead and her render looks good, since I am an infamous sucker when it comes to redheads you already get bonus points from me.
"I can't sit on your neck forever" is that a common phrase somewhere? She can sit on the MC's face all she wants.
And you lost that bonus point and a bunch more by making a freeroam game.
Does the MC have a cat? Otherwise the cat tower in the office is an odd accessory.
Is there anything else to the game besides going out and randomly buying wine? Because nothing else happened in my game.
Choose either the overhead map or the corridor of arrows, don't do both (overhead map was a better, cleaner idea).
Give the player hints as to what needs to be done next.
Overall, not enough content to judge anything else about it.
Good luck with this! Hope you have an idea of where you want to go with the plot.
How many parents have been lost in car accidents in these games? At least shake it up a bit and have it be a fire at a sea parks or a boating accident...
Emily is a redhead and her render looks good, since I am an infamous sucker when it comes to redheads you already get bonus points from me.
"I can't sit on your neck forever" is that a common phrase somewhere? She can sit on the MC's face all she wants.
And you lost that bonus point and a bunch more by making a freeroam game.
Does the MC have a cat? Otherwise the cat tower in the office is an odd accessory.
Is there anything else to the game besides going out and randomly buying wine? Because nothing else happened in my game.
Choose either the overhead map or the corridor of arrows, don't do both (overhead map was a better, cleaner idea).
Give the player hints as to what needs to be done next.
Overall, not enough content to judge anything else about it.
Good luck with this! Hope you have an idea of where you want to go with the plot.
- Jun 16, 2020
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Thank you for your feedback!First, please find an English language proofreader to polish the script. Overall it is fine but it could be much better. It will help attract more players.
How many parents have been lost in car accidents in these games? At least shake it up a bit and have it be a fire at a sea parks or a boating accident...
Emily is a redhead and her render looks good, since I am an infamous sucker when it comes to redheads you already get bonus points from me.
"I can't sit on your neck forever" is that a common phrase somewhere? She can sit on the MC's face all she wants.
And you lost that bonus point and a bunch more by making a freeroam game.
Does the MC have a cat? Otherwise the cat tower in the office is an odd accessory.
Is there anything else to the game besides going out and randomly buying wine? Because nothing else happened in my game.
Choose either the overhead map or the corridor of arrows, don't do both (overhead map was a better, cleaner idea).
Give the player hints as to what needs to be done next.
Overall, not enough content to judge anything else about it.
Good luck with this! Hope you have an idea of where you want to go with the plot.
Here are possible actions in the game at the moment:
Meeting-Breakfast-spying changing clothes (optional) - buying wine (optional) - spying shower (optional) - drinking wine. She will drink if you were generally friendly. Refuses if not. Also, if you helped with the laptop and did not ask for a refund, there will be an additional scene. After that, you can go to the room at night (optional) - if you drank wine, you can see more. If not, the scene will be short. I don't recommend wasting time using a bed. Otherwise, skip the content.
Yeah, I ended up skipping content because I don't creep on people by spying on them which seems to be what we are expected to do 3 times in the game? When she is changing, when she is showering, and when she is sleeping?
The MC is super pervy for a guy who considered Emily to be a "sibling" growing up. The fact she has a boyfriend makes the entire relationship a non-starter for me. It would be better if the relationship grew slowly over time instead of the MC trying to catch glimpses of his "sister" naked every chance he can when she JUST moved in.
Anyway, thanks for the response. Good luck!
- Mar 11, 2017
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Here is a free million dollar idea for you that i had 30 years ago and never did anything with it...
A residential electrical disconnect switch, to be mandated by code in disaster prone areas, which, when flipped, disconnects the house from the electrical grid, while the rolling action of the disconnect lever exposes a proprietary plug. This plug shall be proprietary to fit said disconnect, and shall consist of a 12 gauge, 20 amp, 240v cord, which will have at the other end, a NEMA L6 20 plug, to fit like receptacle, located as standard on gasoline generators.
Function of said device shall be, in the event of long duration electrical failure, to reliably and securely disconnect a home from the electrical grid, and provide 20 amps of 240v power across the residence, to be use to provide lights, fans, and other small appliances throughout the home safely,while insuring backfeed of electricity from same said improvised hookups of generators do not endanger line technicians working the grid to facilitate repairs.
A residential electrical disconnect switch, to be mandated by code in disaster prone areas, which, when flipped, disconnects the house from the electrical grid, while the rolling action of the disconnect lever exposes a proprietary plug. This plug shall be proprietary to fit said disconnect, and shall consist of a 12 gauge, 20 amp, 240v cord, which will have at the other end, a NEMA L6 20 plug, to fit like receptacle, located as standard on gasoline generators.
Function of said device shall be, in the event of long duration electrical failure, to reliably and securely disconnect a home from the electrical grid, and provide 20 amps of 240v power across the residence, to be use to provide lights, fans, and other small appliances throughout the home safely,while insuring backfeed of electricity from same said improvised hookups of generators do not endanger line technicians working the grid to facilitate repairs.
- Jun 16, 2020
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MC is what you make it. So everything is optional. Moreover, actions are remembered. And if you missed the content purposefully now, then the game will give you another alternative in the future, which is closer in spirit. I want to give players the opportunity to play as they want. Just in this demo version, these scenes are created as the easiest to perform.
That works! As I said, if the English was polished a bit more and you chose either the arrows or the overhead map (overhead map) then it would go a long way to making this game stand out.
- Jan 13, 2020
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The thing is, I have a General scenario. And when I came up with a name for it, I didn't know how much time and effort it would take to study and create even this demo. Three months ago I didn't know what the engine renpy. Rendering and so on. As I said, my work has nothing to do with the topic of programming. I had to learn everything from scratch. I tried to do something every day after work. I completed one day in the game. I decided to post the game to find out whether it is worth continuing at all. But this first day really does not reveal the name of the game in any way.
- Jun 16, 2020
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Unfortunately, at the moment I can't afford to hire a proofreader for a fee.
Only if I find someone who does it out of interest.
- Jan 13, 2020
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I'd be more than happy to proofread (The English translation of course) for free
There are a lot of people who offer their services free. Check the board in the recruitment/services section. I also do free proofreading if you would like me to help you out.
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- Jun 16, 2020
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Thanks! I could send you the source of the translation file. It opens in any text editor.I'd be more than happy to proofread (The English translation of course) for free