VN Ren'Py A Mother's Love [Part 1-15 Plus] [OrbOrigin]

[Snugglepuff]

It actually would be still be ntr

This isn't Japan, and way too many people are obsessed with using one of the three terms that's an umbrella for, let alone people using any of them at all who aren't Japanese.

Its the same feeling people look for in regular ntr games just done differently. There's even a bunch of them on this site and they all have the tag.

No, it wouldn't be the same feeling at all.
People saying that are deluding themselves into that belief because they've never had either of those things happen to them in the real world.
They're confusing porn-logic psychology with real-world psychology.

This is a topic that will lead to the mods deleting posts and providing warnings.
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[Jikoupe]

In any case NTR is such a complicated tag...The abreviation NTR stand for Netorare,Netori and Netorase at least that what a group think and again that will confirm what i said before that it is complicated.All game who are the sharing type will be tagged swinging, sharing or NTS(Netorase) not NTR and in F95ZONE tag system they put Netorare instead of the "NTR" abreviation for a reason but if you type Netorare to search a game most will be the MC gettin' cuck while the game tagged as the abreviation "NTR"
while the Netori one will be mostly tagged
'Cheating" or directly tagged "Netori" which is very rare.

 

[russelld]

I just played this again today and I must say that the sex scenes between Chloe and Mr. Beeman sizzle! I can watch those scenes over and over again.

 

[incest.elitist]

Too bad this doesn't have harem options, would love to see some daughter-mom action

 

[DankMemesAndCreams]

Holy shit, 657 pages of comments and 232 reviews? What are you people smoking?

I couldn't make it past the second day. The dialogue, the MC's internal monologue, everything needs a complete rewrite by - at a minimum - a fluent English speaker. The characters talk like grammatically deficient robots:

Let me speak mine first.

Go ahead.

To add onto my part of the deal, I don't want you to be hanging around my daughter anymore. Any sorts of activity she wants to be with you, cancel them. Is that clear?

Yes it is. Now here comes mine end.

Get on with it.

My part is simple, I just want you to be a bit more friendly with me.

What the heck you mean by "Friendly?"

It feels like we're enemies from all this. I would just like you to be nicer around me when we're alone, that's all.

Tsk... guess that isn't a problem.

"Yes it is. Now here comes mine end" made me actually laugh when I read it. This is not the worst exerpt from the tiny amount that I played, mind you, just the first conversation I found after doing a rollback from my latest save. This selection of dialogue has all of the worst problems I see with writing on this site: unnatural English, emotionally flat diction, and generally nonsensical characterization.

The MC is effectively blackmailing Nicole and trying to cajole her into being more agreeable... and that's fine, in theory. But his request is pathetic. "Please be nicer" and she immediately rolls over? Seriously? And shortly after, when he chides her for being irritable again, she says, verbatim, "You're such a cunning sly fox, mister..." which is just hysterical. There's nothing cunning here. If you want me to believe the MC is cunning, you need to show him saying cunning things. Tell Nicole that he doesn't really care if she actually likes him, just that she needs to pretend to if she wants him to keep coming back. Tell her that he'd much rather be spending time with her lovely daughter if Nicole continues to insult him, no matter how much skin she shows. Something. Anything.

The friend has psychic powers that are immediately accepted... and that's fine, in theory. If the MC is characterized as either not being entirely sure if she's just expertly cold reading his body language or spying on him, entirely nonplussed about the matter, or even outright shocked and confused but devoid of intent to spill her secret, then the reader can also accept it and move on. But as it is, she shows off psychic powers, the MC says "Woah, you have psychic powers," and that's the end of that line of thinking. It's the same issue as the above excerpt, which is the total lack of emotional or dramatic investment into the story by the author.

The premise of the story is ridiculous... and that's fine, in theory. But you have to help me suspend my disbelief. You have to make the characters feel like real people and make their choices seem sufficiently rational - given their situation - that I can accept their actions. Nicole doing sexual favors for the MC to get him to leave her daughter alone is stupid, so explain why she wants to do this under the table. Explain why she isn't talking to her husband about this. It doesn't have to be airtight logic, just enough logic and and emotion from Nicole that I believe that she'd go through with this.

 

[BBMorti]

Puhh I don't like critiquing peoples English but this games writing is really rough to get through.. It's like the reading of a first year student attempting to use a lot of more complex words. It also seems to get worse the further into the game you get.
The game could really use a c2-1 English speaker's gentle touch but even with all the grammar corrections etc. a lot of the conversations still wouldn't make much sense lol.
The overall idea of the game is good, though. Some beautiful images and room for several paths through the game. Ah I always feel bad making critiques.. the game has a lot of good going for it that writing level just stood out a lot.