I just started this game (which should be titled "A Perfect Exposition"), and I don't mind the slow burn, but I'm at the part shortly after David discovers his father's cyber security breach, and holy hell, the entire discussion is nonsensical. None of it is how business works, especially at the scale referenced in the story. It's so ludicrous, that a Nigerian Prince email scam would have been more believable. It completely destroyed what little bit of immersion I had developed during David's story thus far. Does this toy-train email/phishing scam ridiculousness persist as a significant plot device? I really hope not....
Not trying to flame, but please explain what is nonsensical, ludicrous and ridiculous about the phishing scam:
-Darren is tempted by customized email sent to him enticing him to click on a link for his toy train hobby.
-Darren, not being the most tech savvy person and not having good security on his company network, clicks on the link and downloads sophisticated spyware that enables perpetrator access to his system as an administrator (i.e. connect wise).
-Perpetuator studies Darren’s email history to find his frequent customers.
-Perpetuator, acting as Darren as imposter, reaches out to customers asking them to send payment to a new account and to pay now because he needs the money.
-Some customers send payment to new account because Darren’s email looks legit.
-Once Daren discovers this plot, there’s nothing he can do because the fraud account is offshore and has been closed, and since he dropped the ball on getting an insurance policy specific to cyber security that covers him in situations like this, he’s fucked.
If this isn’t realistic please point out why, because I believe this is fairly common, especially when businesses like Darren’s fail to address cyber protection. If I’m completely wrong I’m willing to relook at this scenario in the story because I don’t want to ruin the reader’s immersion by something nonsensical. While I know these scenarios I present aren't perfect (no pun intended), I hope they are pretty close to the mark, and I feel this incident is close to the mark.
I’ll point out, it’s not a major plot point in the story. It’s just one additional layer of shit that happens at the wrong time to enable Kendra’s plot. Even Kendra can't believe how easy it was that Darren foolishly took the bait and didn't have protections in place. And when Darren says "I just want to retire, I'm too old for this stuff" it indicates he's been asleep at the wheel.
Edit: I’ll add, another purpose it serves - David has a choice whether to tell Anna about it. Little does he realize she’d find out from someone else. If he didn’t tell her, Anna isn’t happy. So when he’s accused of cheating on her, it compounds her suspicion that he’s hiding things from her.
Those fake boobs totally suck and lots of women look like that unfortunately. It's a turn off.
