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Sadowdark

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Well it is lottery odds if it was Marvin at the door. Still, maybe Robinson...? Per your "surprised Anna" look, Robinson fits your guess and actually it wouldn't be a bad plot device to bring him back into the picture. Wasn't the last Robinson/Anna scene the Milker-yoga scene?

Still, it makes sense it would be someone Anna knows but wasn't expecting and the only two that fit that bill is Chris showing up unannounced or Robinson.
Old Fish won't come because he won't be there in this update (he probably doesn't know where Anna lives?) Chris is coming for dinner later, why would he come early? Besides, he warned them that he would come for dinner.
 
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ItsNotUs

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I swear you should do a game of your own!!!
For this i need a new PC, because on the one work for now, daz loads models (female gen8 and gen8.1) in an hour+-.
I created a suscriber account, but they still won’t approve it for me, even though several months have passed! I wanted to get an audition through it + earn money for a new PC ( that’s pretty optimistic isn’t it? :ROFLMAO: ) I wanted to make short stories, small comics - i even have the several works of 30-40 pictures, not processed and without completed stories.
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Rockpaper345

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The story is just now getting over the hump. Now wouldn’t be the time to jump ship. Granted, it takes a long time to develop, so the waiting game is certainly frustrating, but the story is now starting to play out after the build up.
Mr Palmer request to include aspects like foreplay and kissing and hesitant exploration ,some sneaky erotic acts in the beginning.

If it's like ham bam thank u mam and straight going at it , that would spoil the flow, in my opinion.
 

Rockpaper345

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The story is just now getting over the hump. Now wouldn’t be the time to jump ship. Granted, it takes a long time to develop, so the waiting game is certainly frustrating, but the story is now starting to play out after the build up.
I also come from literotica so I would quote stories like A woodworkers wife, or a true performance . I am sure u have read them.

U can feel the corruption happening with a linear scale of increment.
 

DarthSpitz717

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The story is just now getting over the hump. Now wouldn’t be the time to jump ship. Granted, it takes a long time to develop, so the waiting game is certainly frustrating, but the story is now starting to play out after the build up.
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Timing is everything when it comes to the conflicts in a story. Think Shakespear and the five act plays. Though your work doesn't follow that model, it still has its own timing issues. And each event plays into the next set of events.

If it's your intention of having Anna getting the excuses she needs to step beyond her marriage (though I do hope you keep moral inner conflict as part of Anna's personality and a measure of guilt... but the honey is just too powerful), then the first time Anna crosses that line will be the most important. Just in terms of plot progression it's like dominos.

Yet, even if you have picked Anna's first scene of cheating, constant background build for the next one in line. Just as an example, if Anna's first encounter with {X}...somewhere the next set ups ought to be lightly hit on... so that after {X}, we have an idea that maybe {Y} and {Z} are in the mix.
 

Couto25

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For this i need a new PC, because on the one work for now, daz loads models (female gen8 and gen8.1) in an hour+-.
I created a suscriber account, but they still won’t approve it for me, even though several months have passed! I wanted to get an audition through it + earn money for a new PC ( that’s pretty optimistic isn’t it? :ROFLMAO: ) I wanted to make short stories, small comics - i even have the several works of 30-40 pictures, not processed and without completed stories.
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Bro ..you already might have made 300+ fan art renders for this game....come up with some story and release your own fan update after this initial part 3 update release... you can understand the beginning of the story of part 3....and after that release your own update...we will see whose story is better...yours naughty one or Mr. Palmer one lol
 

sslovoe

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Bro ..you already might have made 300+ fan art renders for this game....come up with some story and release your own fan update after this initial part 3 update release... you can understand the beginning of the story of part 3....and after that release your own update...we will see whose story is better...yours naughty one or Mr. Palmer one lol
be wast his talent if he create remake other game and will be compare no one will look his original work as perfect
better he use his own talent to make his own game and character
and be his own no one tell him steal other idea and story
 
3.80 star(s) 117 Votes