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Wouldn't you agree Timothy and Dale are good agents of chaos? You are correct, the story can go on without either of them because they done their job by showing just how vulnerable Anna is to men's attention. We also get more information about Anna and her past... she stated this was the closest two men got that close to her; ok Anna hasn't had a 3 some. It doesn't mean Anna is now going to go out and look for one-- at most all the breakroom scene shows that given an erotic situation, Anna gets aroused.

The whole Timothy/Dale thing does have a problem if they are kept in the story and have a role. And let's say that role is naughty time with Anna. The question is should it happen early in the story... or later?

The danger of later, is by the time Timothy/Dale get their turn, Anna would be too well aware of all the men in her life and how weak and vulnerable she is to them... so you have to have a plot workaround where it happens.

Too early having Timothy/Dale having a go with Anna messes with the timing of her and David's disintegrating relationship. Their marriage is on the edge but not that close to the cliff to fall off yet. And it might just make the story awkward with the other character paths.

The perfect timing of a Timothy/Dale event would be first, when Anna can get surprised that she finds herself in such a situation; second is either too confident to resist other men's attention or realize just how vulnerable she really is. And the overall situation has to be right where a Timothy/Dale event expands the plots and evolves the story. But as to how to write Timothy/Dale into the story... that's easy and am pretty sure Mr. Palmer can easily manage
If MP wants to show that Ana is getting attention from men around the office/public and do something naughty with them...he can do that with Marvin, Hank, Leonard, Marcel and Jake..thats what they are for where Marvin is into building management, Jake as co worker and Hank as a boss, Marcel as gym trainer, Leonard as David's poker friend. These are random characters from the office and public life of Ana that she knows and they are attracted to Ana already and have major roles in the story.

One possibility might be that Tim/Dale might be the ones who push Ana to the edge of 3some fantasy I guess. It could have been done in any combination of antagonists that are already existing in the story like Jake/Chris , Jake/Marvin, Poker gang etc.

Now introducing 3some plot with the existing characters could have made more sense after Ana gets comfortable with groping by all existing antagonists individually. It feels awkward where Ana didn't want to be groped by Jake/Leonard/Marcel yet, the ones who has important roles to play in the story and are being introduced in first chapters in the game but Ana feels okay by being groped by 2 random characters together introduced in the middle of the story from the first day itself without knowing them.

Just saying when Ana wear mini skirt in the office to see if she gets men's attention..it would have been more enjoyable and made more sense if she would have been groped by Jake, getting his attention rather enjoying being slapped by random street guy in public because Jake is relevant to the story....we know he's attracted to Ana. Now introducing street guy/ new office colleagues in the middle of the story and building tension between him and Ana is more like an additional plot and waste of time.

Ana and her past or flashback should be related to someone that are already existing antagonist. Like if flashback show her tendency to please her father/old guys where her father was strict to her, it should effect Hank's path or her relationship with old guys like Marvin/Grant. If her flashback is regarding how her father/David stop her from seeing other guys she's attracted to then it should be related to Jake/Rob. That will make more sense..rather introducing new characters and building new paths.
 
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If MP wants to show that Ana is getting attention from men around the office/public and do something naughty with them...he can do that with Marvin, Hank, Leonard, Marcel and Jake..thats what they are for where Marvin is into building management, Jake as co worker and Hank as a boss, Marcel as gym trainer, Leonard as David's poker friend. These are random characters from the office and public life of Ana that she knows and they are attracted to Ana already and have major roles in the story.

One possibility might be that Tim/Dale might be the ones who push Ana to the edge of 3some fantasy I guess. It could have been done in any combination of antagonists that are already existing in the story like Jake/Chris , Jake/Marvin, Poker gang etc.

Now introducing 3some plot with the existing characters could have made more sense after Ana get comfortable with being groped by all existing antagonists individually. It feels awkward where Ana didn't want to be groped by Jake/Leonard/Marcel yet, the ones who has important roles to play in the story and are being introduced in first chapters in the game and Ana feels okay by being groped by 2 random characters together introduced in the middle of the story from the first day itself without knowing them.

Just saying like when Ana wear mini skirt in the office to see if she get's men attention..it would have been more enjoyable and made more sense if she would have been groped by Jake getting his attention rather enjoying being slapped by random street guy in public because Jake is relevant to the story....we know he's attracted to Ana. Now introducing street guy/ new office colleagues in the middle of the story and building tension between him and Ana is more like an additional plot and waste of time.

Ana and her past or flashback should be related to someone that are already existing antagonist. Like if flashback show her tendency to please her father/old guys where her father was strict on her, it should effect Hank's path or her relationship with old guys like Marvin/Grant. If her flashback is regarding how her father/David stop her from seeing other guys she's attracted to then it should be related to Jake/Rob. That will make more sense..rather introducing new characters and building new paths.
:unsure:It looks to me like the AWM replacement Sophia never had sex with anyone in the main storyline, except her husband. And so that followers don't give up due to lack of sex and have to wait who knows how long for their first sex scene. It gives events from the past and dreams. Where Sophia is wild and has sex with whoever she wants. It's a taste of the sex that awaits Sophia in the game. Just like MP gives these two random characters for Anna.
 
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:unsure:It looks to me like the AWM replacement Sophia never had sex with anyone in the main storyline, except her husband. And so that followers don't give up due to lack of sex and have to wait who knows how long for their first sex scene. It gives events from the past and dreams. Where Sophia is wild and has sex with whoever she wants. It's a taste of the sex that awaits Sophia in the game. Just like MP gives these two random characters for Anna.
yea thats what i called trolling...excuses everytime...and if we ask like why Ana didn't gave in upto sex with Chris, he has another excuse for trolling that Ana has not been tested with pussy touch. The more steps he introduce for sex scene via introducing step wise tease scene or by adding more paths, the more slow corrupt lovers will support him. So he decided to troll. I though MP has a good story, he doesnt need to troll with tease scenes and hold sex...but I guess i was wrong. He started trolling by new character introduction and adding more step to tease before sex.

For those who love this VN story wise, they have only 2 main things to see in the upcoming update...1st Her father nature towards her. 2nd The real story whether kendra get successful or not in her plans to put Cam in her office. And in the next update with Grant, story wise we will see whether Grant will give her money or not and what's his terms. Rest of the thing whatever he build for the next 2 updates is trolling if he doesnt introduce sex. He will just put all the excuses of why Ana cannot do sex that's all.
 
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yea thats what i called trolling...excuses everytime...and if we ask like why Ana didn't gave in upto sex with Chris, he has another excuse for trolling that Ana has not been tested with pussy touch. The more steps he introduce for sex scene via introducing step wise tease scene or by adding more paths, the more slow corrupt lovers will support him. So he decided to troll. I though MP has a good story, he doesnt need to troll with tease scenes and hold sex...but I guess i was wrong. He started trolling by new character introduction and adding more step to tease before sex.

For those who love this VN story wise, they have only 2 main things to see in the upcoming update...1st Her father nature towards her. 2nd The real story whether kendra get successful or not in her plans to put Cam in her office. And in the next update with Grant, story wise we will see whether Grant will give her money or not and what's his terms. Rest of the thing whatever he build for the next 2 updates is trolling if he doesnt introduce sex. He will just put all the excuses of why Ana cannot do sex that's all.
I've stated many times that the pacing has been terrific so far but pushing off sex with Chris specifically will break the story. Pulling the L&P AWAM move will kill this game. You can't have them get to the point of a blowjob and then have them go multiple updates without fucking.

In game time it has to be within a few days, which should make the update count no more than 3.

Fucking with basic logic pacing to stretch the story ends horribly in every VN I've ever seen. Fans get pissed because they know something is off, the dev gets lazy and fucks with the story to justify and try to make sense for why the pacing is stretched. Etc.

Every dev that does it thinks it's the right move and it never is. You set the pacing when you start, you don't do it 5-10+ updates in.
 

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I've stated many times that the pacing has been terrific so far but pushing off sex with Chris specifically will break the story. Pulling the L&P AWAM move will kill this game. You can't have them get to the point of a blowjob and then have them go multiple updates without fucking.

In game time it has to be within a few days, which should make the update count no more than 3.

Fucking with basic logic pacing to stretch the story ends horribly in every VN I've ever seen. Fans get pissed because they know something is off, the dev gets lazy and fucks with the story to justify and try to make sense for why the pacing is stretched. Etc.

Every dev that does it thinks it's the right move and it never is. You set the pacing when you start, you don't do it 5-10+ updates in.
I don't think that sex has anything to do with the story...let's see being a dick ...it has story sex both and it went out pretty well for the first 2 seasons because it has good story beside sex part....Third part he messed up, he got short on story and that too lame one.

Here people do like the story..Now for a second imagine Ana did sex with Chris is the last update instead of blowjob...Don't you want to see how it'll happen with Marvin and how the story goes on? Everyone would be waiting for the next update that way too. Because the story is good.

Now it's on developer, how long he'll decide to troll...For me even if Ana would have done sex with Chris, it would not be boring to play the upcoming updates at all to see how the story ends. But now whatever reasons he give to hold on to that sex scene I find it bs..I mean if you know how MP defines Ana character like she has daddy issues, she thinks her husband cheated on her, she's wet all the time, she gave bj to Chris where she doesn't even like that with her husband..She prefer sex over bj. Additionally, she's attracted to few antagonists, and she feels close to share with /enjoy being groped by other few antagonists...Now whatever reasons he will give beside that is trolling(,not the story part but the reason to hold sex).
 
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Bro took the meme seriously.
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iam taking serous before month i cant open daz program
i take month learn now , i think i learn ok try everything
also now try use other program for design cloth in body moving like this
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but i not have card to use so need buy new one after will learn hardiest part
i look buy RTX card
its for learn not business so i take thing cause i like do
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you need ask writer to make story this part scrip add poker game and chat seduction how new guy flirt spy to anna and see her naked and how sex with her also how david find out and what he think and do
i just add idea need scrip for all this
there some writer here fan hoop they share and make it
 
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maybe this is OT
but when think of artist i think this guymake good art every detail he make in one shot never see vn game that way of detail
this guy is making real art
My Husband's Boss game
look for one shot between wife and husband he make more 50 fram

i play game to see how he make this art he really director for the game

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perfect marriage he take more creative in chat box more than Chang position camera or body
he take only 12
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I don't think that sex has anything to do with the story...let's see being a dick ...it has story sex both and it went out pretty well for the first 2 seasons because it has good story beside sex part....Third part he messed up, he got short on story and that too lame one.

Here people do like the story..Now for a second imagine Ana did sex with Chris is the last update instead of blowjob...Don't you want to see how it'll happen with Marvin and how the story goes on? Everyone would be waiting for the next update that way too. Because the story is good.

Now it's on developer, how long he'll decide to troll...For me even if Ana would have done sex with Chris, it would not be boring to play the upcoming updates at all to see how the story ends. But now whatever reasons he give to hold on to that sex scene I find it bs..I mean if you know how MP defines Ana character like she has daddy issues, she thinks her husband cheated on her, she's wet all the time, she gave bj to Chris where she doesn't even like that with her husband..She prefer sex over bj. Additionally, she's attracted to few antagonists, and she feels close to share with /enjoy being groped by other few antagonists...Now whatever reasons he will give beside that is trolling(,not the story part but the reason to hold sex).


(TL;DR I don't think we're far off base but I may not have been clear in the past, I later explain but this is a very long post. My bad on that).

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In the general sense you're totally correct, no disagreement at all. However, there are things a story needs to maintain pacing...and pacing is important. Not just overall story but character pacing. I'll try to explain in more detail than before because it seems like I keep having to repeat this (I blame my own lack of clarity more than anything or anyone). Let me try to fully explain and maybe you'll see that we don't disagree but are likely focusing on different things.

*This will be long but I read your post with true consideration so I hope and you'll read and consider mine*:


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First, a story needs backbone (often called other things like foundational theme) and characters need footing for a complete story to make sense and sit right with the person taking it in. A few examples:

Footing:
I don't care about Star Wars but I've seen the movies. Before The Last Jedi came out Mark Hamill went in front of every camera he could find to tell people that this is *not* the Luke Skywalker he knew and played. He even did it on the red carpet at the premiere! Later, many fans hated the movie and cited Luke as a major reason.
What happened? The writer of that film changed the footing of Luke. Luke was no longer Luke as fans knew him. That makes a story worse.

Another quick example or hypothetical would be if a new Iron Man movie came out and it spent the first half of the movie showing Tony Stark learning Algebra in order to build a tool he needed, lol. Fans would understandably be upset to have to pretend that "Supergenius, Tony Stark" didn't know basic Algebra. We've seen him time travel and build a suit from scraps in a cave but he had to learn Algebra real quick, lol.
The footing of the character would be destroyed by that. It would undermine the basic sense of that character.


Backbone/Foundation/themes:
Star Wars is generally about rebellion, teamwork, overcoming great odds through perseverance and faith, redemption, etc.
Sex wouldn't be one of those things, lol. Sex is, at best, a vague and distant theme and kept only to Han and Leia. Sex is certainly not a theme of Star Wars.


Ok, now to APM:

Sex *is* a theme of this story. This is a porn site, lol. Every story here is heavily and often totally rooted in sex. Sex is a backbone, a foundational theme of A Perfect Marriage.

So now we have character footing:
Chris (only speaking of Chris and Anna at this point) is a man long obsessed with Anna. He has lusted after her and been secretly in love with her for, what, a decade? Since college/University.
He makes his move and slowly flirts with her until she reciprocates. He sets his best friend up to look like a cheater to help his cause with Anna. He gets her to talk privately. He gets her to divulge secrets. He gets her to send sexy photos. He finally got her to jerk him off in a shower as he fondled her tits/ass, cumming in her hand! Then within the next day (or two) gets her to suck his dick in her garage!

It would go against his footing to suddenly pull back from pursuing Anna further. He is locked-in to a pattern of behavior.

Anna has lost her ability to say "no" to Chris. Clearly. It would go against her footing to suddenly decide that things will pause or stop with Chris. Anna is locked-in to a pattern of behavior with Chris.

Note that I'm ONLY referring to those two. I've long repeated that what I'm saying does not necessarily apply to other characters because they all have their own pacing. In this story about sex...and in the pacing between Chris and Anna...they have to fuck soon to maintain pacing because breaking that pacing (backbone and footing) will make the story worse due to it being nonsensical.
This does NOT mean Anna has to become the town bicycle with every man in town if she fucks Chris soon. Noe does it make other events meaningless or more important.

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Now, this doesn't mean there are no ways to avoid it! There just aren't any ways to avoid it AND keep the story at the quality it is without a massive and difficult to write alternative. Maybe Chris gets bit by a bus or sent to Antarctica for work (lol)? Maybe Anna trips doen the stairs on ber way to fuck Chris and she's now in a wheelchair? Whatever. It CAN be avoided but it would be hard to do and not come across as bad writing/pacing.

The reason a story written with no sacred cows and a nearly impossible ability to predict the next moves is because it takes a FANTASTIC writer to achieve those things.
George RR Martin with ASOIAF/Game of Thrones is an example and there are no GRRM-level writers making porn on F95Zone, lol. I guarantee. Its best for a dev on F95 to not even try.

So, had Chris and Anna fucked would it ruin what happens with other characters? Of course not, in a general sense. In fact, I'd argue that they SHOULD HAVE fucked instead of a blowjob due to the previous shower scene. But anyway...

It wouldn't ruin the story to delay that event but it would weaken it, and if you make that a pattern (like AWAM) it would ruin the overall story. I'm sure of that.
Again, even in a porn story that requires some leeway of credulity, things have to make sense and characters have to behave in a consistent way or the story is worsened.

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Finally, I don't claim to be the arbiter of everything. In fact, if I don't know what I'm talking about I tend to shut the fuck up. With most things in life I don't know what I'm talking about, lol. I'm not a "have an opinion just to have it" guy.

I will extrapolate if anyone asked me to but I've stated here many times that cheating is something I have personal experience with. It fucked my life up and I'm literally on this site due to that event. If I were still with my ex-fiance' I wouldn't be here or know what this site is, let alone be a member, but I kinda shut my life off after losing the only person I ever loved due to my own actions. That led me to being lonely and finding this site (I need to get back on track if I'm being totally honest, lol).

If this were about gangbangs or 3-ways I'd keep my mouth shut due to having never been in one. I don't know what a 3-way is like as I've never had two women at once...

...I know the pacing of two people having a fling behind the backs of their significant others. I know what that looks like, sounds like and the speed that it happens. No two are exactly the same but they all seem to share similarity so I think that's why I'm so insistent on this one is (Chris and Anna). I've never been a 90yo man (Marvin) and I've never been the head of a company that employs the hot daughter of an old friend, lol.
I have come across an old crush later in life, slowly flirted, slowly took breaks together, slowly left campus with them on breaks, sext, get nudes sent and fuck that person behind the backs of our partners. There is a rhythm to it. You don't pull back.

I've also taken courses on screenwriting and read a dozen books on the topic so I think that's why I also focus on the stories and pacing of VNs.

When a VN is going as well as this VN I don't want it to suddenly go to shit. Too many do, for dev greed or laziness. My takes are only an attempt to keep this going as well as it has been.
 

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I am assuming if MP is aiming to let someone other than Chris shine. That person will have to be adjusted as far as time of any sexual achievements
 

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(TL;DR I don't think we're far off base but I may not have been clear in the past, I later explain but this is a very long post. My bad on that).




Ok, now to APM:

Sex *is* a theme of this story. This is a porn site, lol. Every story here is heavily and often totally rooted in sex. Sex is a backbone, a foundational theme of A Perfect Marriage.

So now we have character footing:
Chris (only speaking of Chris and Anna at this point) is a man long obsessed with Anna. He has lusted after her and been secretly in love with her for, what, a decade? Since college/University.
He makes his move and slowly flirts with her until she reciprocates. He sets his best friend up to look like a cheater to help his cause with Anna. He gets her to talk privately. He gets her to divulge secrets. He gets her to send sexy photos. He finally got her to jerk him off in a shower as he fondled her tits/ass, cumming in her hand! Then within the next day (or two) gets her to suck his dick in her garage!

It would go against his footing to suddenly pull back from pursuing Anna further. He is locked-in to a pattern of behavior.

Anna has lost her ability to say "no" to Chris. Clearly. It would go against her footing to suddenly decide that things will pause or stop with Chris. Anna is locked-in to a pattern of behavior with Chris.

Note that I'm ONLY referring to those two. I've long repeated that what I'm saying does not necessarily apply to other characters because they all have their own pacing. In this story about sex...and in the pacing between Chris and Anna...they have to fuck soon to maintain pacing because breaking that pacing (backbone and footing) will make the story worse due to it being nonsensical.
This does NOT mean Anna has to become the town bicycle with every man in town if she fucks Chris soon. Noe does it make other events meaningless or more important.

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Now, this doesn't mean there are no ways to avoid it! There just aren't any ways to avoid it AND keep the story at the quality it is without a massive and difficult to write alternative. Maybe Chris gets bit by a bus or sent to Antarctica for work (lol)? Maybe Anna trips doen the stairs on ber way to fuck Chris and she's now in a wheelchair? Whatever. It CAN be avoided but it would be hard to do and not come across as bad writing/pacing.

The reason a story written with no sacred cows and a nearly impossible ability to predict the next moves is because it takes a FANTASTIC writer to achieve those things.
George RR Martin with ASOIAF/Game of Thrones is an example and there are no GRRM-level writers making porn on F95Zone, lol. I guarantee. Its best for a dev on F95 to not even try.

So, had Chris and Anna fucked would it ruin what happens with other characters? Of course not, in a general sense. In fact, I'd argue that they SHOULD HAVE fucked instead of a blowjob due to the previous shower scene. But anyway...

It wouldn't ruin the story to delay that event but it would weaken it, and if you make that a pattern (like AWAM) it would ruin the overall story. I'm sure of that.
Again, even in a porn story that requires some leeway of credulity, things have to make sense and characters have to behave in a consistent way or the story is worsened.

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Finally, I don't claim to be the arbiter of everything. In fact, if I don't know what I'm talking about I tend to shut the fuck up. With most things in life I don't know what I'm talking about, lol. I'm not a "have an opinion just to have it" guy.

I will extrapolate if anyone asked me to but I've stated here many times that cheating is something I have personal experience with. It fucked my life up and I'm literally on this site due to that event. If I were still with my ex-fiance' I wouldn't be here or know what this site is, let alone be a member, but I kinda shut my life off after losing the only person I ever loved due to my own actions. That led me to being lonely and finding this site (I need to get back on track if I'm being totally honest, lol).

If this were about gangbangs or 3-ways I'd keep my mouth shut due to having never been in one. I don't know what a 3-way is like as I've never had two women at once...

...I know the pacing of two people having a fling behind the backs of their significant others. I know what that looks like, sounds like and the speed that it happens. No two are exactly the same but they all seem to share similarity so I think that's why I'm so insistent on this one is (Chris and Anna). I've never been a 90yo man (Marvin) and I've never been the head of a company that employs the hot daughter of an old friend, lol.
I have come across an old crush later in life, slowly flirted, slowly took breaks together, slowly left campus with them on breaks, sext, get nudes sent and fuck that person behind the backs of our partners. There is a rhythm to it. You don't pull back.

I've also taken courses on screenwriting and read a dozen books on the topic so I think that's why I also focus on the stories and pacing of VNs.

When a VN is going as well as this VN I don't want it to suddenly go to shit. Too many do, for dev greed or laziness. My takes are only an attempt to keep this going as well as it has been.
Here I disagree, the fake friend is not secretly in love with Anna. And they didn't meet in college. David introduced the fake friend to Anna on their first date. And on that date the fake friend wanted to invite Anna to his house to have sex in the jacuzzi
 
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