- Mar 4, 2020
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Except that Anna waited out Jak. And it was him who leaked in his pants, not Anna in her panties.
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I noticed part 3 is still the same. The stake is overwhelming against MCs as usual. To the extend I think skipping the pages doesn't do much difference to the game.
It gets bored if this continue with everyone trying to take advantage of the mc scenario. It will be good if MCs has some reliable friends helping them out too. If not, it is really like another grand alliance of creeps game.
It gets bored if this continue with everyone trying to take advantage of the mc scenario. It will be good if MCs has some reliable friends helping them out too. If not, it is really like another grand alliance of creeps game.
- Jan 14, 2024
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Warning: This is even longer than a DarthSpitz717 comment lol.
I wasn't sure what to make of this update. Parts were great, parts were bad and everything inbetween. I don't know why the dialogue, internal monologues and narrator speech is so simple and as if every little thing needs to be explained, like it's written for children to understand. I saw a little bit of this in the previous update but now it's constant. Anna's internal thoughts are always shown, even when in conversation with others for no reason. We can already see how she's acting. No need to write each emotion she's feeling every second line. Mr Palmer originally never wrote like this and even in his Literotica short was much more nuanced with smarter writing. Is he actually still writing this? To me it seems completely opposite from before, when he did such an amazing job of plot development and conveying great emotions through characters. This new style reminds me of how European devs write the dialogue for their VNs. By over explaining things which are already obvious. Exposition dialogue is shown so blatantly, not even tried to blend in with conversation. Even the previous built up reasoning behind characters actions and some plot points have been thrown to the side with no care. I'm hoping that the worst hasn't happened!
I wasn't sure what to make of this update. Parts were great, parts were bad and everything inbetween. I don't know why the dialogue, internal monologues and narrator speech is so simple and as if every little thing needs to be explained, like it's written for children to understand. I saw a little bit of this in the previous update but now it's constant. Anna's internal thoughts are always shown, even when in conversation with others for no reason. We can already see how she's acting. No need to write each emotion she's feeling every second line. Mr Palmer originally never wrote like this and even in his Literotica short was much more nuanced with smarter writing. Is he actually still writing this? To me it seems completely opposite from before, when he did such an amazing job of plot development and conveying great emotions through characters. This new style reminds me of how European devs write the dialogue for their VNs. By over explaining things which are already obvious. Exposition dialogue is shown so blatantly, not even tried to blend in with conversation. Even the previous built up reasoning behind characters actions and some plot points have been thrown to the side with no care. I'm hoping that the worst hasn't happened!
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- Mar 4, 2020
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For god's sake, we have so many stats and points when the only difference is a link to another dialogue or a hidden choice. I still think there are kinetic choices. And it was supposed to be the end of Ch3 of kinetic choices. But the creator said not to waste time on the game. He is working on the same scene with different dialogues. But they could give other choices. In my opinion it should work like this. You get points for submitting to Penguin for your previous choices related to him. Anna is submissive to him, you get choices related to submitting. Depending on the path you take. For example, he could have given a choice in the faithful path that Anna stops Penguin from approaching her, so he doesn't come near her because he'll start screaming or something. Dude fish Anna could have shut the door in his face.
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Writing wise, I felt a standard got a little lower than previous updates..Hank storyline I find funny rather emotional...and the flow from one scene to other I felt was not continued as previous update...it felt like Ana getting teleported from one location to other with different characters until the night storyline.
He could have used 5/10 renders where Ana thinks on her way to other location instead of putting all her thoughts in one scene. Like in the office , Ana was talking to kendra, and poof she was in canteen then again with kendra then poof with Hank then poof topless in her office..then she went out of her office and poof in the shop with Jake, then poof directly home...he could have shown like Ana leaving office, Jake and Ana leaving the office entering the car driving to shop and dropping her back to home.....something like that it feels continuity. After she came back to home the story feel continuous.
He could have used 5/10 renders where Ana thinks on her way to other location instead of putting all her thoughts in one scene. Like in the office , Ana was talking to kendra, and poof she was in canteen then again with kendra then poof with Hank then poof topless in her office..then she went out of her office and poof in the shop with Jake, then poof directly home...he could have shown like Ana leaving office, Jake and Ana leaving the office entering the car driving to shop and dropping her back to home.....something like that it feels continuity. After she came back to home the story feel continuous.
- Mar 10, 2024
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The one thing APM does which I like is the ability to choose a chapter and just do the choices then it starts the new chapter. Wish CH, AWAM, JOHN and other games like it do that . After I play APM I delete it to save space I couldn't do it if I couldn't do the choices. All seriousness after finding all the stuff the chapter has to offer the replay after that is 0 so no purpose of keeping it in my computer,
can you share the link of that perticular story on Literotica.com that your referring to? thanks.
we need your beautiful and touching story, I can't do it anymore, I can't live on your literature, I need my dose, if you want I'll pay you.
No payment required. This is freewe need your beautiful and touching story, I can't do it anymore, I can't live on your literature, I need my dose, if you want I'll pay you.
But I must also say that my interest in this story is decreasing day by day... Too many unnecessary characters added. Chris, Jack, Hank, and Marvin's paths would suffice. It's okay for the actions in the story to be delayed... But if she's going to have something with someone, I'd rather the plot be well-designed. Like the war going on inside her and why she lost it. I didn't like that she turned into public property in one day."She's a whore" is the easiest explanation for whatever she do in the future, hence the public groping is crucial in order to whorewash whatever she's doing. If a random person can touch her, that means anything that move can eventually grope and do her, "Nothing personal she's just a whore".No payment required. This is free
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I just wanted David to come in and see this whore giving his best friend the blowjob she always denied him!
- Mar 4, 2020
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She hates giving blowjobs when someone forces her to, she broke up with her boyfriend because he kept forcing Anna to give blowjobs. David should wait and stand in front of her with his penis and wait patiently, and Anna will gladly give him a blowjob
. Because when no one forces her, she gladly gives blowjobs and is happy, especially since she suddenly became an expert (like a cheap, experienced, paid whore in a dirty alley), since she recently started practicing on the banana.
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