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________________________________________++++++++++++++++_____________________________________I actually did consider adding in that Sophia is a Gym teacher instead of what she is now, but that would mean there is no logical reason for side job 2 and tutoring. I do think her being a Gym teacher from the get-go is probably the best idea but side job 2 would alienate some people who are a fan of AWAM, so why I decided not to add it but I see the logic to Sophia being a gym teacher.
I also considered that the Aiden tasks not actually having a specific number or that number being lower, 12 is too specific and too long. I actually think it would be better if Sophia just says no and stands up for herself instead of using Morella to end them. I decided against it as honestly, these tasks are popular with a lot and myself included, so I think I could meet the 12 number. However, I would've been very tempted to remove the model scene as that just seemed so random. Also, I agree with reusing locations, so removing the model scene would fit in with what you saying.
The classroom, gym area and Aiden hangout area, and maybe Sophia's home would be the only places where tasks occurred.
Yeah, I agree with Liam, he seems pointless but I'm biased, I would love to remove him altogether and have him killed in a car accident and Sophia is a widow looking after Liam's children. She moves near her sister to get help with raising them. However, some people do like the good wife route and I got nothing against swinging storylines, it does add more to AWAM.
Sometimes you have to decide between what is logical and what is best for the project.
The side jobs are not logical, Liam barely ever around is not logical and the Aiden tasks are not really logical. However, they are reasons to add popular content to AWAM, so a lot of people are fine with it.
I actually did consider adding in that Sophia is a Gym teacher instead of what she is now, but that would mean there is no logical reason for side job 2 and tutoring. I do think her being a Gym teacher from the get-go is probably the best idea but side job 2 would alienate some people who are a fan of AWAM, so why I decided not to add it but I see the logic to Sophia being a gym teacher.
Actually it's your story, and how you want to progress is up to you. Regardless of being a gym teacher or having side jobs, the only weakness is Sophia's mind set. What makers her do what she does... we really don't get an inner demon perspective of her thoughts. How she is educating the Myers looks like Dr Ruth gone bad.
I also considered that the Aiden tasks not actually having a specific number or that number being lower, 12 is too specific and too long. I actually think it would be better if Sophia just says no and stands up for herself instead of using Morella to end them. I decided against it as honestly, these tasks are popular with a lot and myself included, so I think I could meet the 12 number. However, I would've been very tempted to remove the model scene as that just seemed so random. Also, I agree with reusing locations, so removing the model scene would fit in with what you saying.
Well, if you're a high school kid and you have a position of power over a (hot) teacher and you're already sexually blackmailing your fellow students... think you might want "something" else???
The classroom, gym area and Aiden hangout area, and maybe Sophia's home would be the only places where tasks occurred.
As above comment but as to tasks, they could have been more "creative." Though at least the strip club and private dance held potential.
Yeah, I agree with Liam, he seems pointless but I'm biased, I would love to remove him altogether and have him killed in a car accident and Sophia is a widow looking after Liam's children. She moves near her sister to get help with raising them. However, some people do like the good wife route and I got nothing against swinging storylines, it does add more to AWAM.
Oh no, Laim could have and still can be the tool that gets you to where you want the story to go. If he was or becomes inattentive, dismissive, more self-absorbed, and neglectful of Sophia's feelings, you give Sophia a "pretext" for whatever happens...or just an excuse. If Sophia's needs are not being met, well.... am sure you can take it from there.
Sometimes you have to decide between what is logical and what is best for the project.
It's my experience in writing anything can be done in a story. It only comes down to how you give it plausibility of it happening.
The side jobs are not logical, Liam barely ever around is not logical and the Aiden tasks are not really logical. However, they are reasons to add popular content to AWAM, so a lot of people are fine with it. Sure those are weak points in the plot--that is until you flesh out how to make them logical.
The whole Aiden story arch. All you had to do was to have Aiden demand things like being allowed to touch her, see her, or do things. You didn't have to have Sophia have sex at all in the tasks or go too far from your intended vision of the game. And you could have turned that rout around with Sophia liking the 'feel' of being kissed or touched, but still loathing Aiden and that loathing finally winning herself free of Aiden.
Keep going with the side jobs. A plot devise to use in either of them (the old duffers or the tutoring) is Sophia has some exhibitionist tendencies... she's a hot woman.... she knows it...people throughout the game have been mentioning it... and it starts to turn her on. Just adding that element in Sophia makes any of your other plots and subplots work better. For example, Sophia sees the love in Sam's eyes and knows it's real and it thrills her that Sam is so taken with her beauty... Sophia is so pretty that her own daughter is on the same level just like when Sophia was a teenager...etc... Then you don't have to do the "clinical" explanation of why Sophia does what she does