- Feb 12, 2021
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I like this in all VNs. I like to be able to read the thoughts of a character in times where they struggle, fail, etc. Mostly or especually women in sexual situations but even men as they question themselves or share an ulterior motive with the reader (like when corrupting or lying to a female).I should add that I like when it is narrated through the toughts of her, her struggling and falling.
Here it doesn't work as well because it's constant and diametrically opposed to her behavior.
"Why am I doing this" as she takes her top off.
"How did it get to that point" after leading the other character or easily being led to that point.
Rather than give insight it makes the main character seem mentally ill, like a woman genuinely dealing with BPD or another mental disorder. It's beyond teasing or a woman slowly losing her inhibitions, it comes off as deranged here.