Since you mention that you felt inconsistencies, what example in the story or storyline did you feel was unconvincing? I'm just curious about your thoughts.
I haven't seen the dialogues since I last played the update when it was released. I only remember the thoughts that I had while playing the scenes.
The problems I had were from all the 4 main scenes.
1st Job - the initial dialogue with old men. The language used by them was pretty bold and kinda abrasive to me. But only lasted for a little while they were in the room, the second half with bathing was fine
2nd Job - the whole scene was not written well. I have no problem with the content but It wasn't the least bit convincing in comparison to the rest of the game, went a little too far too quickly and thrived only on porn logic. He should've taken his time with it but for some reason he was in a total rush.
3. Aiden event - The part involving convincing Sophia to be the art class model felt not very convincing. I mean if I could assign numbers, I would say I was convinced around 60 on a scale of 100. The scene after that moves towards it peak but then again towards the last 40-50 renders it felt like the scene was losing momentum and was gradually falling. It just kinda fell flat in the last part.
If I use a graph to describe how I felt the was I would use a Positively Skewed graph. For those who might not know what it is
Dylan Event - Hated how direct Dylan was right off the bat. Throughout the initial part of the scene Dylan's words were way too abrasive to me. Also how he was gawking at Sophia's body throughout that part. And the worst of it all was how Sophia was acting towards it, almost like she doesn't realise the language Dylan is using for her. To me it felt like L&P completely forgot that he is writing a mother and son and not a gf and bf. Later on the scene gets better and feels fine primarily because now the scene had developed to the point where it felt fine. But Dylan using such language right from the beginning was not good.
Many felt the 2nd job uncomfortable, to me this little part of the conversation between Dylan and Sophia was actually quite unsettling, I felt really awkward.
Never in any of his scenes before with his important characters has he been so direct in the approach