- Mar 1, 2019
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I really appreciate your insightful perspective. L&P is definitely breaking his story down into acts. From what I can glean from the story so far I strongly believe he is using the classic Three-Act method of story telling. Act I (the set up), Act II (the journey) and Act III (what happens upon reaching the destination). I still maintain that L&P used the metaphor of Sophia getting on Aiden's motorcycle as the beginning of the journey, and making the transition from Act I to Act II.Very interesting.
You have probably described with relevance the majority approach of reproaches that can be made both on the rhythm and/or on the content.
My opinion may then be in a minority
I would have preferred that the story unfold as a play, where each of its acts brings a major event throughout the scenes, rather than a continuous succession of small things, and steps forward and steps back.
If you take 30 playable days in 5 acts or even 4 acts, then we are already at the beginning of the 3rd, so a major step must happen very quickly, because if we want that in the last act, the full realization of her filthy (or good) side is accomplished, there is no more time to lose.
But maybe that’s what’s gonna happen, I always thought that her first sexual intercourse would be coerced* or wilfully degrading** and that it’s gonna traumatize her & that it’s going to wake up in her, an aspect of her personality (pleasure, perversion, ...).
Months ago I was told that the psychology of the characters was unimportant and that I had to shut my mouth. But I’m staying on that line.
* revenge against her
** revenge against Liam (even though some said me he was a faithful husband lol)
And like you said, it’s gonna be hard to change the rhythm now... unless my theory is correct.
In classic story telling the protagonist needs to encounter obstacles in the way along the journey during Act II if the presentation is to remain engaging (essentially, a good story). It remains to be seen if L&P has the writing chops to present a good, or great story (as he is aspiring for) over the course of Act II. If Sophia has to sneak, orchestrate and maneuver to avoid unwanted consequence on her journey I will be impressed (and a bit surprised). Doing this will allow him to dispel the current impression that his writing does not live up to his talent for the visual presentation. Only time will tell.