The game is really quality and enjoyable so far. Main issues are some minor typos/capitalization things, other than that the characters each feel unique and the story looks to be going an interesting route. I like the blowjob face stuff and the teasing. For the first time I’m interested in both routes equally, so this could be an all time banger if both get finished/fleshed out. Good stuff, good luck to dev!
- Thread starter 7767
- Start date
- Nov 11, 2018
- 128
- 98
Haven't played yet, but will be giving this a shot soon. I just hope that it doesn't go the same direction as most games promising dom/sub(ntr) paths and focus on one over the other.
- Nov 7, 2023
- 840
- 751
Hmm, I just took a quick peek into it. Shouldn´t there be a "furry" tag? Or is the "ash" character not relevant in the story anymore. I just would like to know as I am not into furry at all and it puts me off quiet a bit.
Thank you very much in advance!
Cheers!
Thank you very much in advance!
Cheers!
- Sep 18, 2024
- 41
- 185
- Furry [Anthropomorphic animal (Not to be confused with monster or humans with animal ears/tails).]
The game starts with dominant vibes because I want to establish Mia as a strong character before the actual path choice happens. I just ask for a bit of patience.
I may not reply to everyone, but I read all your feedback and truly appreciate it. Keep it coming!
The main things i noticed:
- Size is unoptimized
- Font too small, need better outline
- Formation, punctuation, capitalization errors etc.
- Android
Last edited:
- Nov 7, 2023
- 840
- 751
Sorry mate, I just have no idea what that is.Ashley is more of a neko and sadly there is no tag for it.
- Furry [Anthropomorphic animal (Not to be confused with monster or humans with animal ears/tails).]
The game starts with dominant vibes because I want to establish Mia as a strong character before the actual path choice happens. I just ask for a bit of patience.
I may not reply to everyone, but I read all your feedback and truly appreciate it. Keep it coming!
The main things i noticed:
- Size is unoptimized
- Font too small, need better outline
- Formation, punctuation, capitalization errors etc.
- Android
For me thats a cat girl. Maybe it need the monster girl tag then. But what I was trying to get to know if this is an important character or even love interest? Or are there more furry/monster whatever things like this in the game. I am personally just not into that kind of thing.
Thank you very much in advance!
So far I really enjoyed it, but there are a couple things that could be improved. First a background for the text box would help a lot with the readability of the text. Second, it would be nice if the other characters actually got introduced, because I have no idea who Lucy and Camilla are, the same for goes for Zaya. The mother was described as abusive so I am guessing that's not Camilla, or is she only abusive when she drinks, which was hinted at?
- Feb 22, 2018
- 290
- 391
Hot scenes. But with terrible subhuman zoomer dialogue and social drama.
May as well have spun Cold Steel the Hedgehog and his evil alter ego fanfiction into a futa porn game.
But salt and peppered it with "for real, for real" and "no cap".
The MC futa becomes a mix between a bygone eras 'trying too hard to be cool' cigarette smoking protagonist and a black gang rapist. This combination being beyond insane to me.
I don't even care about played straight rape fantasy games, it's somebodies fetish, but this feels like just and only an accident.
The futa is Spike Spiegel sad-boy nihilisting herself at women that she is simultaneously calling biddies, groping against their will and talking the equivalent of fanum tax and gyatts to.
This despite the fact the spooky evil futa is somehow less offputtingly fully raping people.
Somehow actual mind control is less repulsive than imagining someone willingly "polishing the glizzy of the rizzler". Especially post surprise grope and rape-escape.
If it's a rape game it's a rape game. But part of what makes futa hot typically is that they are so intrinsically hot that most people become into them near immediately, especially once they learn how massive and perfect their cocks are.
It's just less hot to even show this much work being necessary, even if it weren't so hamfisted. You could still contrast normal actually effective futa charm with mindcontrol without all this chicanery.
Regardless, making the MC have the approach of a bastardization of a 90's protag combined with a zoomer sexual assaulter is beyond comical.
Just have Mia be viewed as actually charming and attractive, and then you can meaningfully contrast it with Valerie's """"rapier"""" behavior through the distinction in conscious states of their sexual partners.
At any rate, still a good game. Found it really hot. Love the character design and the animations. Hate almost all of the dialogue because of this.
A white, cursed, superhuman, fantasy, elf woman doesn't call her sex partners 'hoe'.
May as well have spun Cold Steel the Hedgehog and his evil alter ego fanfiction into a futa porn game.
But salt and peppered it with "for real, for real" and "no cap".
The MC futa becomes a mix between a bygone eras 'trying too hard to be cool' cigarette smoking protagonist and a black gang rapist. This combination being beyond insane to me.
I don't even care about played straight rape fantasy games, it's somebodies fetish, but this feels like just and only an accident.
The futa is Spike Spiegel sad-boy nihilisting herself at women that she is simultaneously calling biddies, groping against their will and talking the equivalent of fanum tax and gyatts to.
This despite the fact the spooky evil futa is somehow less offputtingly fully raping people.
Somehow actual mind control is less repulsive than imagining someone willingly "polishing the glizzy of the rizzler". Especially post surprise grope and rape-escape.
If it's a rape game it's a rape game. But part of what makes futa hot typically is that they are so intrinsically hot that most people become into them near immediately, especially once they learn how massive and perfect their cocks are.
It's just less hot to even show this much work being necessary, even if it weren't so hamfisted. You could still contrast normal actually effective futa charm with mindcontrol without all this chicanery.
Regardless, making the MC have the approach of a bastardization of a 90's protag combined with a zoomer sexual assaulter is beyond comical.
Just have Mia be viewed as actually charming and attractive, and then you can meaningfully contrast it with Valerie's """"rapier"""" behavior through the distinction in conscious states of their sexual partners.
At any rate, still a good game. Found it really hot. Love the character design and the animations. Hate almost all of the dialogue because of this.
A white, cursed, superhuman, fantasy, elf woman doesn't call her sex partners 'hoe'.
Last edited:
- Nov 11, 2018
- 128
- 98
Not critiquing yet. I enjoyed this first release. I was only saying that a lot of devs have promised the dom/sub thing but end up focusing on one over the other for convenience, ease, or demand instead of what they originally planned, making it seem as if they were only interested in making a quick buck, even if that wasn't actually the case. Basically, I'm hoping for artistic integrity. Whatever your vision for this game is, keep to it. That's what I wanted to say, although I think I get a little wordy or judgmental sometimes. Good luck with the game and hope you continue it!Ashley is more of a neko and sadly there is no tag for it.
- Furry [Anthropomorphic animal (Not to be confused with monster or humans with animal ears/tails).]
.
The game starts with dominant vibes because I want to establish Mia as a strong character before the actual path choice happens. I just ask for a bit of patience.
I may not reply to everyone, but I read all your feedback and truly appreciate it. Keep it coming!
The main things i noticed:
- Size is unoptimized
- Font too small, need better outline
- Formation, punctuation, capitalization errors etc.
- Android
will the submission content be able tu submit to valerie? and the domination content be to dominate her? why the ntr too? will the mc have a gf and it'll be possible in the submission route to get ntr?
It wont even launch for me, what joiplay version do you run? I tried both 1.20.023 and 1.20.500. No matter what it crashes as soon as i launch
- Sep 18, 2024
- 41
- 185
Ashley is pretty important to the story and there might be more cat girls in the future.Sorry mate, I just have no idea what that is.
I am personally just not into that kind of thing.
Thank you very much in advance!
No worries, i didn't think you were judmental or anything. I just missclicked and posted 2 emots so maybe that's why you thought i took it the negative way?
Not yet, but I'm into it heavy so you can expect it.
I find it very hard to respond to your criticism. A lot of your feedback comes off as very subjective, like 'subhuman zoomer dialogue.' The characters are young, so I want them to talk like they are young. Does that make it bad? You won't see Camille, Ashley, or even Lucy speaking like that. Sure, there are some lines that will either hit or fall flat. I'm taking that risk. You're making some reaches about the story, which I won't answer. At least not until 0.3. You gave me a lot to think about, but in the end, my mind didn't come out any different, because, as I said before, it just comes off as very subjective.
" A white, cursed, superhuman, fantasy, elf woman doesn't call her sex partners 'hoe'. "
But Mia does.
Even tho i disagree with a lot being said here it's definitely something to keep in mind for the future. It's very hard to judge my own work, so if I see a patern of similiar things being said, I'll know I was just wrong.
I'm using 1.20.500 and I have several different Ren'Py plugins installed, including 8.2.3, which this game uses.
- Mar 3, 2020
- 108
- 318
That's the point at which I stopped giving their post any credence, myself. There are reasonable criticisms to be made about your dialogue (please, for the love of any god you care to name, capitalize the word "I"); but they haven't made any, and also they seem to have missed the point.
I think I haven't; or at least I think I can tell more or less where you're going with this, and I suspect I don't want to watch the protagonist fall down either path. Well done so far, though. Best of luck.
The main lines for story development - exploring Mia's chains and its breaking - is well laid in this first iteration. Breaking out of Mia's dominant side in the toilet scene is very hot; soundtrack complement and art visual are good. Mia's dialogue with the two siblings in the pool feel slightly forced; the idea of baiting the two into conflict is noteworthy nonetheless.
Eagerly looking forward to your next installment
Eagerly looking forward to your next installment
- Sep 18, 2024
- 41
- 185
I agree the execution wasn’t great. I have my own take on it, but I wonder—what exactly felt forced to you?The main lines for story development - exploring Mia's chains and its breaking - is well laid in this first iteration. Breaking out of Mia's dominant side in the toilet scene is very hot; soundtrack complement and art visual are good. Mia's dialogue with the two siblings in the pool feel slightly forced; the idea of baiting the two into conflict is noteworthy nonetheless.
Eagerly looking forward to your next installment