VN Ren'Py Altered [v0.6] [Mr.J]

[ImperialD]

awesome this makes what like 2 games where my MC is not a simp ... love it

 

[thirstysnakeinboot]

this looks good, gonna give it a try

 

[FatGiant]

Played it, some thoughts:

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No offense meant, just Honesty.

Peace

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

Oh so funny!!! hahahaha.......

Does he fuck his sister, mom, dad, brother or all of them?

Wait he still has a dad and he has a brother?!
Why did no one tell me?!

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

So certain love interests are forced upon you, or not?
I would like to know before I play.

Yeah mom said you have to play nice with everyone...

but seriously yes, the way I wrote the story needs to have specific women as love interests otherwise current and later events don't really make much sense.

 

[Dark Silence]

Yeah mom said you have to play nice with everyone...

but seriously yes, the way I wrote the story needs to have specific women as love interests otherwise current and later events don't really make much sense.

Not sure if you ever said, but which girls are the main LIs?

 

[Vortex@]

Enjoyed the update. Can't wait for Tanya content. Love some Hot chocolate. Also enjoyed the previous netori content

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

Played it, some thoughts:

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No offense meant, just Honesty.

Peace

Thanks for being respectful, as I said if you voice your thoughts respectfully. I'll reply as best as I can and take you thoughts seriously.
-I do try to keep improving their quality, but I'm still fumbling around with daz studio trying to learn what affects the quality and in what ways.(Such as assets used, lighting, samples, etc)
-As for the poses I have been making making more unique poses for specific occasions, but it does take time. so I do have to use a lot default and downloaded poses for the more relaxed scenes.
-As for the skins, that has been something that did bug me at first and I tried to fix it and still do. But I honestly don't really know how to.
-The writing progression is a bit fast on purpose, because honestly I feel like if try to needlessly drag the story it will get boring or muddy the story with things that don't belong or matter.(I'm not sure if that's what you meant.)
-I'll do my best to deliver with Tanya, I already have her character event planned out.

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

Not sure if you ever said, but which girls are the main LIs?
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Primary characters Saeko, Haley, Scarlett, Laura, Sandra, Juliet, Deborah, Delilah, Tamara, Vanessa, Vanya are NOT avoidable and important to the story.
Secondary characters like Alex and Tanya, plus some others who will pop up later will be optional. However rejecting them will make you miss out on the events they are tied to. Like Alex and the M.C's events or Tanya and the M.C's flashback event.
Tertiary characters like Alison will not have major events and will pop once or twice, but be completely avoidable as you please.
Hope this helps, if you have any further questions I'll try my best to answer them.

 

[Dark Silence]

Primary characters Saeko, Haley, Scarlett, Laura, Sandra, Juliet, Deborah, Delilah, Tamara, Vanessa, Vanya are NOT avoidable and important to the story.
Secondary characters like Alex and Tanya, plus some others who will pop up later will be optional. However rejecting them will make you miss out on the events they are tied to. Like Alex and the M.C's events or Tanya and the M.C's flashback event.
Tertiary characters like Alison will not have major events and will pop once or twice, but be completely avoidable as you please.
Hope this helps, if you have any further questions I'll try my best to answer them.

Well, I'm not a fan of one of the primaries listed there. Sandra. I just met her and not a good first impression. I can't stomach liars or cheaters. That's just me and I do understand that she's a primary, but can we avoid having an intimate relation with her? If not, it's not a huge deal breaker for me, am still going to continue playing.

Edit: Never mind. That rabbit hole goes way too deep to cut one person out when there was more than one. ~sigh~

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

Well, I'm not a fan of one of the primaries listed there. Sandra. I just met her and not a good first impression. I can't stomach liars or cheaters. That's just me and I do understand that she's a primary, but can we avoid having an intimate relation with her? If not, it's not a huge deal breaker for me, am still going to continue playing.

Edit: Never mind. That rabbit hole goes way too deep to cut one person out when there was more than one. ~sigh~

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[FatGiant]

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Knowing Wolf, he means the initial scene where Sandra lies to Vanessa about John and MC. Even if we know it is a white lie that is done with the utmost best intentions, he doesn't forgive even that. And no arguing will ever make him change his mind.

Sandra and everyone else involved in that, are on his shit list, and there's nothing you can do to change that.

It is what it is...

Peace

 

[Dark Silence]

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Not cheated. No. But she lied to Vanessa. I'm still in the beginng of the game. Was just saying that I hate liars and cheaters. Not that she was cheating. Sorry for the confusion on that.

Knowing Wolf, he means the initial scene where Sandra lies to Vanessa about John and MC. Even if we know it is a white lie that is done with the utmost best intentions, he doesn't forgive even that. And no arguing will ever make him change his mind.

Sandra and everyone else involved in that, are on his shit list, and there's nothing you can do to change that.

It is what it is...

Peace

Bingo. But, I can work with it.

 

[Mr.J_Dev]

Not cheated. No. But she lied to Vanessa. I'm still in the beginng of the game. Was just saying that I hate liars and cheaters. Not that she was cheating. Sorry for the confusion on that.



Bingo. But, I can work with it.

Ah! okay yeah that does clear things up.
I can understand that, I hope getting to know her as you get further into the story helps.

 

[dopple091]

just found this nice little gem. cant wait to see how the story develops. gg

 

[FatGiant]

I left a few things out of my thoughts list above. Mostly the subjective parts of my impression of this.

For a first project, it is a quite decent effort. Not only in the graphics part but also on the story that has serious grip. Sure, the graphics are a WIP. Daz3d isn't exactly known to be easy and flexible, has a seriously steep learning curve. We can see some improvement from the first images to the last.

It wouldn't be fair to not point out that the graphics aren't top of the line, but, it is a really decent effort that many of the first projects seen here would compare favorably. It is also fair to point out that it is improving.

The same with the posing and generally speaking the other cinematic or photography elements. It is a complex set of skills to develop, something more akin to Directing a Movie or a Photoshoot, but also having the responsibility of setting the scenes and the actors expressions, both facial and all the body language.

One point I'd like to mention to Mr.J_Dev is the eyes expressions. In almost all your renders they are static. I know how hard it is to make them talk, but it is a very important skill to master, then the smiles and frowns... and so on. I noticed that some poses in the last chapter there was already some work done there. I enjoyed it, but, it needs to be worked still.

Your usage of the "Camera" needs some work too, my suggestion would be to see some tutorials on photography to understand the concepts of depths, shadows and angles. Because even if most people don't understand it, with 3D rendering, you may create the most beautiful scene, but if you don't know how to shoot it, it's all for nothing.

Anyway, I rated this with a 4. I don't regret it. But, to be absolutely transparent, it is mostly for effort. I see the improvements and I see the work. I respect that, a LOT.

Good Job.

Peace

 

[Dark Silence]

I left a few things out of my thoughts list above. Mostly the subjective parts of my impression of this.

For a first project, it is a quite decent effort. Not only in the graphics part but also on the story that has serious grip. Sure, the graphics are a WIP. Daz3d isn't exactly known to be easy and flexible, has a seriously steep learning curve. We can see some improvement from the first images to the last.

It wouldn't be fair to not point out that the graphics aren't top of the line, but, it is a really decent effort that many of the first projects seen here would compare favorably. It is also fair to point out that it is improving.

The same with the posing and generally speaking the other cinematic or photography elements. It is a complex set of skills to develop, something more akin to Directing a Movie or a Photoshoot, but also having the responsibility of setting the scenes and the actors expressions, both facial and all the body language.

One point I'd like to mention to Mr.J_Dev is the eyes expressions. In almost all your renders they are static. I know how hard it is to make them talk, but it is a very important skill to master, then the smiles and frowns... and so on. I noticed that some poses in the last chapter there was already some work done there. I enjoyed it, but, it needs to be worked still.

Your usage of the "Camera" needs some work too, my suggestion would be to see some tutorials on photography to understand the concepts of depths, shadows and angles. Because even if most people don't understand it, with 3D rendering, you may create the most beautiful scene, but if you don't know how to shoot it, it's all for nothing.

Anyway, I rated this with a 4. I don't regret it. But, to be absolutely transparent, it is mostly for effort. I see the improvements and I see the work. I respect that, a LOT.

Good Job.

Peace

I mostly agree with you on the parts that I've played so far. However, with that said, at the point I'm at, just before the party, the story seems a bit disjointed to me. The repetitive convos makes it play it out way too slowly. Hearing the same thing repeated over and over is a bit much. I think during the times that we have to explain things again, it should just fade to black and say that we explain to whoever we were talking to.

Also, I think the renders are better than a lot of other games. Even a few long-time devs can't compare to the quality that these have. But I do agree that the eyes are static and seem very lifeless to this point. I'm no expert, I'm also not the guy who really cares about eyes blinking or being expressive.

There's also several typos here and there. Not to mention wrong words being used. The game could do with a good English speaking proofreader. I would offer my time for this, but I'm helping a few other devs already, so I really don't have the time to do so.

But all in all, I'm liking the game, especially Saeko and I'm NOT a fan of Asian models in Daz, as they all end up looking generic and not very pleasing to me. Very few devs have pulled it off for my tastes and I'm an extremely picky fucker. Anyway, I haven't finished this yet, but decided to give my 2¢.

 

[ImperialD]

jeeezzz you guys love desertions

 

[Woodstock_1983]

i like girls with makeup but this is too much makeup lol. I can't even look at her face anymore, i just mostly keep my eyes down and read the words when she shows up lol.

 

[Woodstock_1983]

Um, what happened to the headboard in picture 1 for picture 2 lol?