VN Ren'Py Abandoned Angel's Tear [Epi.1.5] [Cesny]

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Zero141214

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Okay, if English is not your first language, OR you aren't confident in your ability to write your story in English, please find someone else to help you; check out the recruiting forums as there are people who will do that for free or a simple credit. This could be a great idea with a great story but it needs someone to polish it and make it coherent in English. I wish I could read Turkish, I believe that's the original language, as I'm sure it makes a lot more sense in the author's native tongue.

Best of luck to the dev, I hope this gets polished up.
The antagonist is some Dimitrov guy, right? That's definitely a russian name. Developers in their VN tend to use names they're familiar with, or resort to generic american ones. I'm guessing this dev is russian, which wouldn't be rare in this category of games, by the way.

Edit: I may be wrong. All his games are in turkish and english, and this time also portuguese. You're right, he has to be turkish. In any case, I just realized his previous two games were abandoned on chapter 1. Things aren't looking good.
 
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Tunak23

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I feel like my playthrough was only about admiring the characters noticing how good they all looked but what began with an interesting mystery left me completely lost,the lack of ero content made all the uncertainty even harder to deal with.

It is a really intriguing clear but the how the story is narrated to readers leaves all to be desired,there is a limit how far your enjoyment can go when your understanding is broken.
 

joe powa

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I don't understand a damn about the time line of the story. We see only present ? the past ? How discerned them ?
 
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Lordisigler

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I think I reached more than 3/4 of the story. But sorry, I'll stop there. The story is confusing, depressing and complicated. The logic from scene to scene is odd and it keeps "introducing" characters too fast for me + the fact that the timeline can be confusing. The project is just starting so of course there are no "actions" to help motivate me. Also, I'm pretty sure that when the next update come out, I'll remember nothing of the story.
 

Boehser Onkel

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i dont get why people say its "depressing" :unsure:

at what point is it ?
the storytelling is a bit confusing atm but that is it
 
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That's a game I could love even without porn scenes.

It doesn't make me angry when an untalented developer drops a game, but I go insane when someone as talented as this one has that habit.
 

Cesny

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That's a game I could love even without porn scenes.

It doesn't make me angry when an untalented developer drops a game, but I go insane when someone as talented as this one has that habit.
While I was creating my previous games, I didn't have a graphics card, each render took at least 7-8 hours. I will make this game at least 5 chapters, don't worry.
 

LostGhost

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While I was creating my previous games, I didn't have a graphics card, each render took at least 7-8 hours. I will make this game at least 5 chapters, don't worry.
Man regarding ntr you should avoid it(as always a ntr player can play any games but a non ntr fan don't play ntr) and regarding harem there are too many characters so if it's an optional one it will be easy to get everyone's content in one playthrough
 

everhardninja

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I was enjoying this story but my curiosity only goes so far. For close to an hour of reading I had no idea of what was happening so I had to stop before I got a stroke or something. I was literally feeling my brain getting sucked. Probably lost some QI point in the process.

Thank you and the best of luck.
this sums it up for me. It looks interesting but at some points i'm like what is going on?
 
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everhardninja

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Can somebody summarize and explain what i just played. I am confused when do the flashbacks stop and what is currently going on. Nice renders but i could not understand what was going on
 

everhardninja

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While I was creating my previous games, I didn't have a graphics card, each render took at least 7-8 hours. I will make this game at least 5 chapters, don't worry.
Dont say at least please finish it or perhaps to a point where my brain understands whats going on
 

everhardninja

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I felt a mental fatigue and clicked as fast as I could starting somewhere in ep. 1, I think. The average # of words per mouse-click must be around 4 or 5. The repeated use of the same transition / wipe also put me off.

I didn't see a single choice in the game that gave any sort of clue that it'd lead to a fuck scene in a bathroom stall but the animation had so much "head bob", I don't even mind.
wait there was a fuck scene??
 

Soundgfx

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The writer/dev for this need a proper storyboard and a proofreader.

Like - I get it, English isn't his first language - that's all well and good but they definitely need someone to proofread their work.


I can work with broken dialogue but some scenes are jumping all over the place, dev needs proper storyboard to set scenes properly - the last thing you want is having a confused audience/reader not knowing who the fuck is who and what the fuck they're even talking about.

I can't even tell if if a particular scene shows a timeskip or a memory - it's a good thing the main character has a beard or else I wouldn't be able to properly tell, I hope the dev improves on his writing because these renders are amazing.
 
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Not even a single nude scene or a flash. Better off skipping the game for now.
okay I'm still playing the game

but I have to stop and ask is anybody else having a hard time following the story I can't tell what is the past present or future

like at all it just goes from one random scene to another and I can't understand the story one bit

is it me or I mean am I really that stupid
 
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xinkala

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okay I'm still playing the game

but I have to stop and ask is anybody else having a hard time following the story I can't tell what is the past present or future

like at all it just goes from one random scene to another and I can't understand the story one bit

is it me or I mean am I really that stupid
yea...i've played this yesterday and still trying to figure it out :BootyTime:
kind of confusing
 

Boehser Onkel

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okay I'm still playing the game

but I have to stop and ask is anybody else having a hard time following the story I can't tell what is the past present or future

like at all it just goes from one random scene to another and I can't understand the story one bit

is it me or I mean am I really that stupid
its not just you ...

i think 95% having a hard time to follow , incl me
 
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its not just you ...

i think 95% having a hard time to follow , incl me
I thought it was because of my reading disability but

but it's not just me

don't get me wrong it's a well-made game

but I don't understand a single thing that is happening like at all

this is the first time I've ever stop playing a game in the middle of it just to ask for help to understand the story

has the developer said anything about it
 
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