- Oct 26, 2017
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I liked the short story. I think it's similar to how most of us experienced "Our first time"
The main point is the mixture of feelings that we experience for the first time.
The first time you jumped off a high drive ( nervous but excited), the first time driving a car, our first kiss.
It's not knowing the outcome but hoping for the best.
On another Topic.
I took a go at smoothing out the script for the short story. Frankly, it was hard to continue beyond the first scene for me.
I not putting down anyone's work. It's just a matter of translation, plain and simple. IMO, Translation and inexperienced writing are the two main hurdles here at F95.
I stayed to the theme of the game and just smooooothed it out a bit, hopefully. And I probably missed something.
I also added a super XXX version for its too-vanilla crybabies. JustKidding
I love Anna and her Game, and I love DeepSleep. And also the DEV DeepSleep.
Unzip and put it in the game folder...Blah.Blah.Blah!
The main point is the mixture of feelings that we experience for the first time.
The first time you jumped off a high drive ( nervous but excited), the first time driving a car, our first kiss.
It's not knowing the outcome but hoping for the best.
On another Topic.
I took a go at smoothing out the script for the short story. Frankly, it was hard to continue beyond the first scene for me.
I not putting down anyone's work. It's just a matter of translation, plain and simple. IMO, Translation and inexperienced writing are the two main hurdles here at F95.
I stayed to the theme of the game and just smooooothed it out a bit, hopefully. And I probably missed something.
I also added a super XXX version for its too-vanilla crybabies. JustKidding
I love Anna and her Game, and I love DeepSleep. And also the DEV DeepSleep.
Unzip and put it in the game folder...Blah.Blah.Blah!
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