So, just to be clear,
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is the actual version of the game controlled by you, and not the falsely uploaded one?
Also since I'm unaware on what is the correct version/page. I'll post something I was going to post on itch.io here.
The beginning description is brutally ESL.
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The story is about an ordinary guy whose life will change 180 degrees at one moment. Welt works as an ordinary ship builder, caring for his sick mother, and he has only a close friend from the far north. "
The main culprit being that use of "180 degrees in one moment". The proper use of that idiom would be "
whose life will take a complete 180 after a single moment." Though really the entire thing should probably be re-written, since you also kinda overdo it with the ordinaries.
"The story follows Welt, an ordinary shipbuilder just trying to care for his sick mother, whose life will take a complete 180 after a single moment."
If you want to keep the close friend part in the description, this might work too.
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The story follows a man whose life will take a complete 180 after a single moment.
Meet Welt. An ordinary ship builder caring for his sick mother, and with only a single close friend who hails from the far north."
Here's another alt version (frankly I don't know how important you consider the "far north" part.)
"The story follows Welt, an ordinary shipbuilder who cares for his sick mother and with only one close friend. His life is about to take a complete 180. "