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Overview:
What if you had a new chance in life? What if you could make it better than all those years of misery and harassment?
What if you could get revenge on all the people who wronged you and get what you always desired....
What will you do, with this chance as you wake up in a youthful body, thirty years in the past?
The choice is yours.
Formerly Known as Extra Life

Thread Updated: 2024-06-30
Release Date: 2024-06-29
Developer: RNGeusEX - - - - - -
Censored: No
Version: 0.9.1
OS: Windows, Linux, Mac, Android
Language: English, French, Russian
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RNGeusEX

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Pictures look great, although it looks like it will need a proofreader according to picture 4.
I am aware of some problems with words or expression, the game has been proofread 3 times and by two proofreaders including a professional writer.

If you ever see a strange sentence why don't you suggest me what to replace it with?


Thanks for all your compliments on the game, I really wanted to propose something different
 

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I am aware of some problems with words or expression, the game has been proofread 3 times and by two proofreaders including a professional writer.

If you ever see a strange sentence why don't you suggest me what to replace it with?


Thanks for all your compliments on the game, I really wanted to propose something different
I don't see anything technically wrong with the fourth picture, I don't know what that person is on about. However, it's better to use a "." instead of a comma there. In truth the sentence itself is awkward, while not really wrong, but its not really natural. I would suggest something like this:

"No wonder Noriko calls me a parasite. I am one." <---I'd actually add a bit more to this but I need more context. This is just makes it worded more naturally and splits it with the period. The "I am one." part should probably have a bit more to it, but that is dependent on context.
 
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I am aware of some problems with words or expression, the game has been proofread 3 times and by two proofreaders including a professional writer.

If you ever see a strange sentence why don't you suggest me what to replace it with?


Thanks for all your compliments on the game, I really wanted to propose something different
Seems alright to me...only thing I would do is get rid of the comma and make it 2 sentences.
 
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RNGeusEX

Goodbye Eternity
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I don't see anything technically wrong with the fourth picture, I don't know what that person is on about. However, it's better to use a "." instead of a comma there. In truth the sentence itself is awkward, while not really wrong, but its not really natural. I would suggest something like this:

"No wonder Noriko calls me a parasite. I am one." <---I'd actually add a bit more to this but I need more context. This is just makes it worded more naturally and splits it with the period. The "I am one." part should probably have a bit more to it, but that is dependent on context.
Thanks a lot for the feedback, it's fixed.
 
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