VN Ren'Py Astreon [Ch.2 v0.4] [NoGlory]

[Ashira13]

The Dev is using ChatGTP, right?

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The dialogue is still rubbish.
Most of it still looks like the kind of pretentious crap that AI shits out.
Aside from being pretentious, the above isn't even true, actresses do what they're told by the director in accordance with the script.

That's just an example, one of many.
I just can't believe the writing is still this bad, overly verbose, totally pretentious and saying so much without actually saying anything useful.

It's just so tiring to slog through, yap yap yap yap yap and then you still don't really know anything new anyway.

maybe, or maybe not, but could use some english proofreading. not seen that many "errors", but i may miss some from time to time,
i guess, the dev meant to write : "Forgive my boldness, but... Why did you save us?"
disregarding spelling errors. and maybe a bit too much overuse of contractions, the story is pretty well written in an overall sense. so, not complaining too much

 

[Zanny@$7]

maybe, or maybe not, but could use some english proofreading. not seen that many "errors", but i may miss some from time to time, View attachment 5643090
i guess, the dev meant to write : "Forgive my boldness, but... Why did you save us?"
disregarding spelling errors. and maybe a bit too much overuse of contractions, the story is pretty well written in an overall sense. so, not complaining too much

For Me it's not the spelling..or other English errors(i can handle that)...it's just the characters blab a lot..to the point I lose the sense of what's going on

 

[Zerob1]

i see a lot of people saying it is harem and many saying its not. Which one is it? havent played it yet.

Harem

 

[Zerob1]

Biggest problem i have is why is the MC so weak lol. I get it with the implant but he has all of this experience it's ridiculous, and age shouldn't matter too much if he has a chip. Recent episode he was fighting that short haired gorilla girl when she gave her his chip, he should have folded her instantly, but na he barely beat her. Come on this woman was like 20 years younger than you, thats 20+ more years of fighting experience and you have a powerful chip.Dont know what this dude was doing in his combat years other than commanding. I hope this guy gets a zenkai boost because he seriously needs it, at this point the world is a reverse women world and this dude is getting dominated, by everyone included, hes being used as a pawn. Should be adding the femdom and maledom tag lol. Hopefully we see him whooping everyone in the future.

 

[Avaron1974]

Biggest problem i have is why is the MC so weak lol. I get it with the implant but he has all of this experience it's ridiculous, and age shouldn't matter too much if he has a chip. Recent episode he was fighting that short haired gorilla girl when she gave her his chip, he should have folded her instantly, but na he barely beat her. Come on this woman was like 20 years younger than you, thats 20+ more years of fighting experience and you have a powerful chip.Dont know what this dude was doing in his combat years other than commanding. I hope this guy gets a zenkai boost because he seriously needs it, at this point the world is a reverse women world and this dude is getting dominated, by everyone included, hes being used as a pawn. Should be adding the femdom and maledom tag lol. Hopefully we see him whooping everyone in the future.

He hasn't been fighting for years.