A lot of minor grammar issues and typos, examples below.
Here is she. : Here she is.
We talk later. : We'll talk later.
Where's Megan? I haven't seen her yet. : (This seems slightly redundant being you just arrived, so of course you wouldn't have)
Do not worry. She is also : Don't worry
just with her incomes : income
I am going to a job interview today that he indicated to me. : (reads weird)
She blinks and bites : She winks
I missed you too, sweet. : sweetie
I didn't come sooner : come home sooner
Leaving already, daddy? : Daddy?
We were so little together : We spent so little time together
$Blanche: Please sit down. Let's start. : (remove the $)
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The biggest issue so far is everyone sounds the same and a bit robotic, very unnatural sounding. Example below.
Jason: You left today and have already come to visit me. What an honor, my friend.
MC: Hello, buddy. I didn't know if I should come or not, but I'm so happy that I needed to thank you. I was hired and I'm starting tomorrow.
(This is definitely not how a native speaker talks.)
Other issue, MC doesn't get a large amount of choices on where to cum. Mainly Oral or facial.