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Lennier

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There a few mistakes, some of them are a typo and other probably me being drunk. They'll be clean up when V0.22 is read. (When my editor/co-writer get back)
 

Akamari

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@Lennier
Thanks for the update.

I won't comment on the story, cause the writing sure needs editing. However, there was one graphical thing that really irked me. What's with the nipple pokies? Through two or three layers of clothing? Does that seem right to you?
 

Lennier

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@Lennier
Thanks for the update.

I won't comment on the story, cause the writing sure needs editing. However, there was one graphical thing that really irked me. What's with the nipple pokies? Through two or three layers of clothing? Does that seem right to you?
Yea, that was me using nude model, and throw their cloth on and forgot to adjust the nipple. Anyway, I copy the model to be used with clothing and such, so you won't see that in the future version.
 

Lennier

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I'm really not happy with this release just think of 21 as a preview for chapter one or something. when .22 come out it will be a cleaner version.
 

Pif paf

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I don't get it, what problem do you have with the writing please?
Anyway, I really love the story so far, so I can even stand those reminiscent drop-ins which are rather distracting ..... :unsure:
 

Lennier

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I don't get it, what problem do you have with the writing please?
Anyway, I really love the story so far, so I can even stand those reminiscent drop-ins which are rather distracting ..... :unsure:
It felt like I spend more time fixing stuff than working on the novel itself last month and end up being rush works is all.
 

TiffanyMonroe

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Whoa I randomly named my mc Bruce Wayne as a joke and then the cop asked if he wants to be Batman. lol 2 dead parents a billion dollar company. Levi is clearly Joker.
 

botc76

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Have to say that this update seems in far worse Engrish than the previous one.
Which is a pitty, because apart from that the game is quite good.

Could it really be that hard to find someone to look over the script once and correct the mistakes?
 

WaltS

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Have to say that this update seems in far worse Engrish than the previous one.
Which is a pitty, because apart from that the game is quite good.

Could it really be that hard to find someone to look over the script once and correct the mistakes?
ISTR that @Lennier mentioned in a prior post that his editor is on vacation at this time and the text will be reworked 'later' when he returns.
 

Patrick6918

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I do not understand why English and the few faults are so important to you this is only a porn game 'Cum, Ah, Yesssss, Fuck, More .....' Chinese and Arabic are more spoken, many DEV are Russian can you read this languages?
 

Walter Victor

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I do not understand why English and the few faults are so important to you this is only a porn game 'Cum, Ah, Yesssss, Fuck, More .....' Chinese and Arabic are more spoken, many DEV are Russian can you read this languages?
It's mostly just annoying. The real problem comes when the meaning of a section of text is completely unclear. I know I'm strange, but I actually read the texts, and want to know what the hell is going on. If I just wanted the sex I'd simply download the CGs, or go play Meet 'N Fuck games.
 

Lennier

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I had trouble with my editor that cost all source of delay. Anyway, there was a volunteer from F95 which I really appreciated. I did find an editor close by that join me on my project. What you think better worst? And for some reason, I couldn't make the Android version. The stupid thing keeps saying I didn't agree to the term of service. I am still looking into this issue.

This version mostly focus on the story. And fixing languages issue. next version.. well I don't wanna give a release date or make any promise since every time I schedule a release date I miss them by two miles. Still, it shouldn't take long for the next version to be ready.

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4.10 star(s) 13 Votes